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Brick Wall
A Black Vacant Hole,
Buried Deep,
Within My Skull,
My Mind,
Empty,
Hollow Echoes Surround Me,
Overwhelm Me,
Compound Me..
Trying So Hard,
To Force A Thought,
An Image,
A Line,
Feel So Desperate,
A Statement,
A Rhyme..
I’ll Take Anything Right Now,
I’ve Drawn A Blank,
Hit A Wall,
Devoid Of Ideas,
Staring Into Space,
An Inane,
Expression Covering My Face..
I’m Searching For A Feeling,
An Emotion,
A Sense,
A Notion..
It’s Been Days,
I Need To Kickstart My Mind,
And Engage My Brain,
I’m trying to hard,
But I have nothing,
Hopefully This Feeling Won’t Last,
The Vacant Emptyness,
This Void Has To Pass..
Buried Deep,
Within My Skull,
My Mind,
Empty,
Hollow Echoes Surround Me,
Overwhelm Me,
Compound Me..
Trying So Hard,
To Force A Thought,
An Image,
A Line,
Feel So Desperate,
A Statement,
A Rhyme..
I’ll Take Anything Right Now,
I’ve Drawn A Blank,
Hit A Wall,
Devoid Of Ideas,
Staring Into Space,
An Inane,
Expression Covering My Face..
I’m Searching For A Feeling,
An Emotion,
A Sense,
A Notion..
It’s Been Days,
I Need To Kickstart My Mind,
And Engage My Brain,
I’m trying to hard,
But I have nothing,
Hopefully This Feeling Won’t Last,
The Vacant Emptyness,
This Void Has To Pass..
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amazing!
19th Mar 2011 10:54am
i m searching for a feeling....trying too hard.
i found something
by a voiceless call
it was signal
to my ear
there is some one
always
everywhere
i never fee alone
i always eager to be alone
to love him
to enjoy with him
an enjoy
better than sex
because.....
i loved your poem, i felt its not finished. the more i read it, i found more sentence. its all about feeling
great man, great work
lovely, lovely regards to you
i found something
by a voiceless call
it was signal
to my ear
there is some one
always
everywhere
i never fee alone
i always eager to be alone
to love him
to enjoy with him
an enjoy
better than sex
because.....
i loved your poem, i felt its not finished. the more i read it, i found more sentence. its all about feeling
great man, great work
lovely, lovely regards to you
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19th Mar 2011 5:03pm
Thank you loads for your help and advice :o)
I have been trying to find a subject to write about for days now but I've hit a brick wall.. hence this poem, lol
Mental block :o)
Although I'm working on one now..
(Which will keep me out of mischief for a few days :o)
PS Great verse :o)
I have been trying to find a subject to write about for days now but I've hit a brick wall.. hence this poem, lol
Mental block :o)
Although I'm working on one now..
(Which will keep me out of mischief for a few days :o)
PS Great verse :o)
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20th Mar 2011 6:56am
The second paragraph is in my opinion the best, probably because I can relate to it the most. Kudos to you, Clayton. (I got it right this time!)
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20th Mar 2011 10:25pm
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20th Mar 2011 10:51pm
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31st Mar 2011 1:29am
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31st Mar 2011 8:35am
Hey Jessica,
It sucks doesnt it, lol
Someone on here gave me advice to not force it. If you cant write at that moment then leave it and come back to it another time. Chill out and it will come :o)
It sucks doesnt it, lol
Someone on here gave me advice to not force it. If you cant write at that moment then leave it and come back to it another time. Chill out and it will come :o)
Thats beautiful
1st Apr 2011 10:04pm
re: Thats beautiful
1st Apr 2011 10:26pm
:)
1st Apr 2011 10:35pm
So relatable this poem..I feel your angst and pain and need to break though this wall..you've done a brilliant job of it with this poem..peace Crim
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1st Apr 2011 10:43pm
Thank you so much Miss C your comments mean loads :o)
I have another poem that I keep going back to and cant seem to finish, it's crazy, lol
I have another poem that I keep going back to and cant seem to finish, it's crazy, lol
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1st Apr 2011 10:56pm
I'm working on a poem myself it's so raw and honest though I'm not sure I can post it..but you can call me Miss B or Miss C lol..they are both me my alter ego you could say is Crim :)
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1st Apr 2011 11:13pm
If it's raw and honest then ya gotta post it, there the best ones arn't they. I'm intrigued now, I'll have to keep me eyes out for it :o)
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1st Apr 2011 11:34pm
I posted it true story that's why it feels so raw..I really go through this craziness though I don't know if my description of it does the madness justice..thank you for the interest..peace Crim
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