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Who are you?
What the fuck do you think?
You, with your receding hairline
you, with your caged mind
and weak manhood,
telling me tasteless jokes
whilst my best friend is dying?
You, with your fucking greed
and petty mind.
Who are you to expect me
to be flawless, flawless to the core
at the age of fifty four?
Who are you to expect me
to accept your hunger for
fresh and willing flesh,
your hunger for innocent minds
though sobered hearts.
Who are you?
You, with your receding hairline
you, with your caged mind
and weak manhood,
telling me tasteless jokes
whilst my best friend is dying?
You, with your fucking greed
and petty mind.
Who are you to expect me
to be flawless, flawless to the core
at the age of fifty four?
Who are you to expect me
to accept your hunger for
fresh and willing flesh,
your hunger for innocent minds
though sobered hearts.
Who are you?
Published 23rd Apr 2014
| Edited 24th Apr 2014
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24th Apr 2014 6:52am
It's the hunger for innocence from the side of those who are already beyond it. Thanks for stopping by, 7th_son. I appreciate you!
24th Apr 2014 00:37am
it's one of those poems that
really hit home and at the
same time leave the reader
wanting to know more...
but no, it's enough, it's
strong and it's good..:)
really hit home and at the
same time leave the reader
wanting to know more...
but no, it's enough, it's
strong and it's good..:)
24th Apr 2014 6:50am
Dear Paul, thanks for feeling me. That means a lot. At the moment there is not much more to know, open end, so to speak. Of the development you will surely read :-).
24th Apr 2014 1:06am
Sometimes we have to be bold and forget about politeness :-). Will always remember your: Get out of my garden. That's such a nice way to say fuck off :-).
24th Apr 2014 11:33am
24th Apr 2014 2:24am
this is painful to read, Chi, you seem to be revealing a lot here. our love is w/you...
24th Apr 2014 6:58am
It was painful, too, to write it, John. But when the angry feelings calm down, it will get better, like always. Thank you so much for your kind words!
24th Apr 2014 5:43am
I'm with the others... Worried bout how ur being emotionally hurt... U know I'm here sweetness...
24th Apr 2014 6:59am
I know you're here and with me. Thanks for that, always. Don't worry, Chi is a big girl!
24th Apr 2014 5:47am
Your work never fails to amaze me. I hope you are okay, some people are just...stupid
24th Apr 2014 7:01am
Thank you for being so kind, Sara. It means a lot to me! The stupidity of people isn't only hurtful but as we can see from history, dangerous, too.
24th Apr 2014 10:16am
Reads like a song of betrayal, could be interpreted as either a partner has betrayed you for someone younger, or the friend's partner turning attentions on you. The hurt shows plainly in the poetic brush-off.
24th Apr 2014 10:43am
Well, it is a song of betrayal though a little more subtle as it might show since the partner matter is a bit delicate as you've already mentioned. Life is complicated, isn't it? I'd like to thank you warmly for your always thoughtful comments, Solomon.
26th Apr 2014 9:55pm
Okay now, first I laughed reading the first four lines and went straight into disgust mode with the next few lines, ended up pissed by the end.
Emotionally thick ink, Chi....Xo
Pen love~
Emotionally thick ink, Chi....Xo
Pen love~
3rd May 2014 9:31pm
Sory Rain, just read your very welcome comment! Glad to make you laugh (that's always a good sign)and I'm glad, too, to lead you through my feelings. Appreciate you very much!
3rd May 2014 9:25pm
I felt the anger and the hate. Your words where so graphic; I could visualize them. very impressive.
Cheers
Cheers
3rd May 2014 9:46pm
Thank you so much, forever_young, for stopping by and taking your time to read my poem. I'm glad that you understood my feeelings.
Cheers!
Cheers!
