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Life Such As It Is
I weep for the person I've lost
an intelligent woman with a voice
potent and lovely
striving for sobriety
with every ounce of my being
failing at this task bitterly
I can see the deterioration in my writing
witnessing my own demise
I'm so tired of my own thoughts I want to scream
"you're stronger than this" I say
but anxiety sets in and I'm not a fighter anymore
really I think I'm full of self hate
my mind not turning anymore
personal growth at a standstill
I'm hurting, I want to cry but can't
I want to be that bright eyed intelligent lady again
not the lack luster copy I've become
an intelligent woman with a voice
potent and lovely
striving for sobriety
with every ounce of my being
failing at this task bitterly
I can see the deterioration in my writing
witnessing my own demise
I'm so tired of my own thoughts I want to scream
"you're stronger than this" I say
but anxiety sets in and I'm not a fighter anymore
really I think I'm full of self hate
my mind not turning anymore
personal growth at a standstill
I'm hurting, I want to cry but can't
I want to be that bright eyed intelligent lady again
not the lack luster copy I've become
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Re: Life Such As It Is
Anonymous
- Edited 10th Apr 2014 1:50am
10th Apr 2014 00:47am
Yes. This is good. It hits home. The person you're writing about is painfully aware of her own shortcomings, I don't see any deterioration in this piece.
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10th Apr 2014 00:57am
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10th Apr 2014 2:05am
Sweet friend..I'm sending you hugs and losta good mojo across the miles.. also..I agree with Hydro.. I don't see any deterioration in this piece..with love and respect xoxo domore
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10th Apr 2014 3:39pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Apr 2014 00:38am
10th Apr 2014 3:07am
Sweet Crim......your writings lack nothing and neither do you. You are my inspiration and so many here. We have become strong thru watching you bravely getting thru each day. Every time you come on site i think.....she's fought thru another day. My heart jumps with a big HOOORAY! Sending luv your way. Xoxo :)
I BELIEVE IN YOU!!!! Xo
I BELIEVE IN YOU!!!! Xo
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10th Apr 2014 3:41pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 3:57am
Aaaawwww you wanna get me all sad n shit!?
Firstly, your ink is as great n relevant as it's ever been
N secondly, ur NOT a weak person, the fact u even dare to fight against ur demons proves that...
Firstly, your ink is as great n relevant as it's ever been
N secondly, ur NOT a weak person, the fact u even dare to fight against ur demons proves that...
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10th Apr 2014 3:42pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 6:25am
i have to agree with the comments above, Brenda... you are a true powerhouse.
i often face my own demons in your writing and find strength in how you manage to fight yours.
with so much love and many many many hugs
- kat
i often face my own demons in your writing and find strength in how you manage to fight yours.
with so much love and many many many hugs
- kat
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10th Apr 2014 3:43pm
thank you beautiful lady for the love and hugs.. hugs you back :) with love Brenda
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 6:43am
Lovely Lady, many have shared that which I echo. Your strength of spirit, talent and ability to exercise said talent is nothing short of amazing.
You can do anything you set your sail for, so set it firmly, both hands on the wheel, now sail. One day at a time.
Encouraging hugs and a heart full of love sent your way.
You can do anything you set your sail for, so set it firmly, both hands on the wheel, now sail. One day at a time.
Encouraging hugs and a heart full of love sent your way.
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10th Apr 2014 3:44pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 7:34am
depression hits us all when things get quiet, thank God for rock&roll!...
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10th Apr 2014 3:45pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 10:27am
Good god this is raw.... and so utterly heartbreakingly beautiful. I feel your pain xoxoxox Well written, melancholy, beautiful, desperate. xoxoxox
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10th Apr 2014 3:46pm
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10th Apr 2014 5:28pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
10th Apr 2014 9:35pm
Healing is a process,trust in one and yourself...the battles we fight are hard and fear is a weapon used against us(be strong crims,trust and believe)...you have the light in your eyes,it never left you :)
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10th Apr 2014 9:46pm
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11th Apr 2014 1:04pm
I'm in love with this Crim, touching, felt deep inside. I thank you so much for sharing. :)
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11th Apr 2014 3:39pm
Re: Life Such As It Is
11th Apr 2014 1:20pm
Life is but a double edge sword
We strive to yield it but it's grip to strong
we are left with scares and always bleeding wounds
carving us as we are still fighting to belong
My heart aches for you Crim as you dangle at the end of your rope, if you read your own words it is the end of the rope that truth is uttered, clear and vibrant. In return your writes have been most eye opening and powerful and truly inspirational. So let the mighty sword of life carve you for the only choice you have is to define what good comes of it, or dwell on what you can not control.
We strive to yield it but it's grip to strong
we are left with scares and always bleeding wounds
carving us as we are still fighting to belong
My heart aches for you Crim as you dangle at the end of your rope, if you read your own words it is the end of the rope that truth is uttered, clear and vibrant. In return your writes have been most eye opening and powerful and truly inspirational. So let the mighty sword of life carve you for the only choice you have is to define what good comes of it, or dwell on what you can not control.
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11th Apr 2014 3:41pm
thank you kind Soul for your words of wisdom so poetically put I cherish them :) with love Crim
Re: Life Such As It Is
11th Apr 2014 3:39pm
We get to start fresh everyday. Have faith in yourself, we have faith in you. Your fire defines you, and it burns fiercely. Stop fretting!:)
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11th Apr 2014 3:42pm