love poem...

It's a... little short. Sorry.

don't apologise..:)

Yeah but it's what you do with it that matters:)

I know, and the writer can do whatever they please of course. Just giving my opinion is all. ^^

And you find
your entire
point of "v i e w"
changes..... ;)

wee be
all ways
each-thee-other's

tease

If you, as the reader, can look at a set of words (regardless of the amount) and have a scene planted in your mind- a complete, vivid scene that plays like a silent film-  then, the job of the author is complete.

With regards to the actual content, I think that you picked the right moment in time with this.. not before, not after.. but right in the middle. It's a snippet of something bigger; just the chorus of a song. And that's enough, imo.

I tend to write on the premise
that one can never write the
full story, since just when you
think that you have, something
else occurs, another chapter,
perhaps, or merely another
word...so one has to choose
where to begin and where to end,
leaving the rest to the reader...