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Like a Snake
I found a piece of glass today
a broken piece
from past fights we had
it was on the floor
under my bed.
Memories flash back
yelling,screaming,fighting
nasty words said,filled with hate
visions in my head.
Busted doors,shattered glass,changed locks
swollen lips,crying eyes,broken dreams
missing cash,stuff gone,things pawned
all the self prescribed meds.
My teenage son,now twenty one,
so happy and proud
of the young man you've become
through the pain and darkness
your skin you have shed...
your demons have fled.
a broken piece
from past fights we had
it was on the floor
under my bed.
Memories flash back
yelling,screaming,fighting
nasty words said,filled with hate
visions in my head.
Busted doors,shattered glass,changed locks
swollen lips,crying eyes,broken dreams
missing cash,stuff gone,things pawned
all the self prescribed meds.
My teenage son,now twenty one,
so happy and proud
of the young man you've become
through the pain and darkness
your skin you have shed...
your demons have fled.
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Re: Like a Snake
Anonymous
10th Mar 2014 6:23pm
powerful piece, a heartfelt read. nice work
peace,
miki
peace,
miki
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Anonymous
10th Mar 2014 6:59pm
This is so sad. Brought make memories for me. Well written emotions here. Good job! :)
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10th Mar 2014 7:56pm
We go through life and learn through the good and bad times. Changes and staying the same...good read Hashman.
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10th Mar 2014 8:27pm
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10th Mar 2014 8:49pm
Hash great to reflect and be a proud dad at how far your son has come moving ink :) with love and respect Crim
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10th Mar 2014 11:00pm
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10th Mar 2014 8:57pm
To see such a victory in real life brings back Hope to us who yet struggle.
Any vise can break through the thin ice of self control and splash cold misery on all victims, especially, our Loved Ones.
Any vise can break through the thin ice of self control and splash cold misery on all victims, especially, our Loved Ones.
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10th Mar 2014 11:01pm
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Anonymous
10th Mar 2014 11:36pm
It's interesting how small things bring back memories, sometimes unfortunately painful memories.
This is truly touching Mr. Hash, for someone to overcome and turn life around is what life is about.
This is truly touching Mr. Hash, for someone to overcome and turn life around is what life is about.
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11th Mar 2014 00:28am
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11th Mar 2014 00:10am
Oh yea bro. After all that drama n turmoil if year bygone
How sweet it must feel to see your child n self in a much better place! I know a similar reality :)
How sweet it must feel to see your child n self in a much better place! I know a similar reality :)
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11th Mar 2014 00:30am
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11th Mar 2014 5:40am
It is often said, that with maturity(age) comes wisdom. My friend, this piece truly depicts this concept.
Glad to see how the love, that you and your son share, has strengthened your bond throughout the years. You both are so surely blessed to have one another!
Inked with Intensity
Glad to see how the love, that you and your son share, has strengthened your bond throughout the years. You both are so surely blessed to have one another!
Inked with Intensity
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11th Mar 2014 7:43pm
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11th Mar 2014 7:47pm
Yes Mr. Dartford there were times it would have been so easy to give up,but so far so good (peace brother)
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11th Mar 2014 7:21pm
That's so powerful and captivating, Hashman! I can relate to that, as you know. We raise our flesh, try to help them find their way. Sometimes they break our hearts and much later, they use the wings we (hopefully) provided them with. Outstanding!
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11th Mar 2014 7:52pm
Thank you Miss Chi...sometimes it's hard but with love we can do it (peace and love to you and your loved ones)
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19th Mar 2014 1:14am
You seem like an incredibly strong man, full of love who never gave up. You went through that storm and held on.
Cheers to you and your son!
I loved this
Cheers to you and your son!
I loved this
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19th Mar 2014 11:15pm