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Shapes in Shadows
His eyes held life,
carried silent
tears for her,
she is his match
the piece
to his missing
puzzle,
she could feel his
loneliness as
she curled
up to his
thoughts,
there was flashes
of whiteness
in between
their spaces
and they
twisted,
allowing their
passion to
open,
holding fears
in salty
tears
they have been
alone too
long,they
make beautiful
shapes in
shadows,
as their bodies
rise and
fall against
the candlelit
wall.
carried silent
tears for her,
she is his match
the piece
to his missing
puzzle,
she could feel his
loneliness as
she curled
up to his
thoughts,
there was flashes
of whiteness
in between
their spaces
and they
twisted,
allowing their
passion to
open,
holding fears
in salty
tears
they have been
alone too
long,they
make beautiful
shapes in
shadows,
as their bodies
rise and
fall against
the candlelit
wall.
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6th Mar 2014 1:34pm
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6th Mar 2014 2:13pm
Nothing but love for this write. Sense of being at peace, entangled into a world of pureness that invokes honest embraces.
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6th Mar 2014 3:12pm
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6th Mar 2014 2:13pm
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6th Mar 2014 3:20pm
Tommie this is so beautifully written and tender :) with love and respect Crim
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6th Mar 2014 4:12pm
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6th Mar 2014 5:18pm
It's been awhile Hawkdude, nice to hear from you. Thank you very much for reading and the RL add ;)
Re: Shapes in Shadows
6th Mar 2014 5:17pm
Very romantic, Tommie! My favorite passage is:
"she could feel his
loneliness as
she curled
up to his
thoughts"
It makes you feel good to know someone is "curling up to your thought" Getting comfortable :)
"she could feel his
loneliness as
she curled
up to his
thoughts"
It makes you feel good to know someone is "curling up to your thought" Getting comfortable :)
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6th Mar 2014 5:25pm
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6th Mar 2014 7:49pm
Favourite lines:
they
make beautiful
shapes in
shadows,
as their bodies
rise and
fall against
the candlelit
wall.
Could visualise this.
they
make beautiful
shapes in
shadows,
as their bodies
rise and
fall against
the candlelit
wall.
Could visualise this.
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6th Mar 2014 11:51pm
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