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conscious retreat
straight talk, but no talk will do
rough on the edges of that list
you wrote then crumpled in your pocket
dizzy with ideas about ships that sailed
last week, but missed the rocket launch
to catch fireflies instead
don’t get too excited, this isn’t much…
random phrases unless you go backwards,
or read just the first word of every line
i lied
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Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 5:47am
the enigmas of your lies sting like truths... not to mention, my brain noodles always get a wonky feeling wiggling in your soups
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5th Mar 2014 3:35pm
Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 6:37am
love the second stanza ... for me it speaks to making choices that make you participate in life - not simply spectate ... Unless you're lying about it
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Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 9:25am
Sometimes catching fireflies is the place to be.
Even though you lied, I checked it out anyway lol.
I prefer no talk if it's not going to be straight talk.
Great stuff Atakti.
Even though you lied, I checked it out anyway lol.
I prefer no talk if it's not going to be straight talk.
Great stuff Atakti.
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re: Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 3:37pm
Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 11:33am
sometimes - we've got to step back a little especially when fireflies and rockets look the same
good write great Atakti
good write great Atakti
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re: Re: conscious retreat
5th Mar 2014 3:38pm
Trust the whale to find the grain of truth in a VAT of lies...
Thank you, poet.
Thank you, poet.
Re: conscious retreat
Anonymous
5th Mar 2014 8:02pm
Losing the war to be a hero in battle or missing the show while watching the ads...this write makes all kinds of sense,but most lies do ..lol
Lovely and clever write dear Atakti ;-)
Lovely and clever write dear Atakti ;-)

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5th Mar 2014 11:06pm
Re: conscious retreat
6th Mar 2014 3:37am
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6th Mar 2014 3:21pm
Re: conscious retreat
Anonymous
6th Mar 2014 5:27am
Sometimes fireflies are safer ... rockets burn too bright and hot ... whatever is needed...

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re: Re: conscious retreat
6th Mar 2014 3:22pm
Re: conscious retreat
Anonymous
7th Mar 2014 8:30pm
This one is a little like...."Gotcha!"
Much enjoyed!
Much enjoyed!

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re: Re: conscious retreat
8th Mar 2014 12:00pm