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Suicide Street
On the streets of Chicago, as I write
a desperate junkie gives up the fight
He sprays his brains against the wall
of an abandoned home’s upstairs hall
A teenage girl shoots her first rig of dope
because her parents never taught her to cope
She finds the relief that she’s always sought
Her biggest concern is not getting caught
She wakes the next morning and reads the news
about a junkie in Chi-Town who cured his blues
She thinks he’s a coward and can’t understand
why someone would execute such a dark plan
Twenty years later she’s found lying in the street
with semen in her stomach and tracks on her feet
Half her face is gone and a pistol by her side
Another victim of addiction who couldn’t stop the ride
a desperate junkie gives up the fight
He sprays his brains against the wall
of an abandoned home’s upstairs hall
A teenage girl shoots her first rig of dope
because her parents never taught her to cope
She finds the relief that she’s always sought
Her biggest concern is not getting caught
She wakes the next morning and reads the news
about a junkie in Chi-Town who cured his blues
She thinks he’s a coward and can’t understand
why someone would execute such a dark plan
Twenty years later she’s found lying in the street
with semen in her stomach and tracks on her feet
Half her face is gone and a pistol by her side
Another victim of addiction who couldn’t stop the ride
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28th Feb 2014 8:45am
this is hardcore. it's laid out exactly as it should be. those streets never run out of stories...
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28th Feb 2014 1:56pm
The other side of the tracks aint pretty, some live, some survive and some eventually give up the fight.
Well constructed piece Gemini with good rhythm.
(the word Chi town brought some memories, its one of the coolest cities to be in)
Well constructed piece Gemini with good rhythm.
(the word Chi town brought some memories, its one of the coolest cities to be in)
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28th Feb 2014 2:11pm
I don't know about coolest, Vee, but surely one of the coldest. As you know, my favorite city is yours. I miss it every day. Especially when the whether is like this here in the Chi.
Naw, it sure ain't pretty but it's reality. I spent a lot of time on that side of the tracks in my life and I don't miss it one bit.
Gemini
Naw, it sure ain't pretty but it's reality. I spent a lot of time on that side of the tracks in my life and I don't miss it one bit.
Gemini
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28th Feb 2014 3:36pm
A very harsh real portrayal of what life on the streets and addiction does to you.. as they say in NA it leads to death, insanity or an institution.. great ink Gemini with respect Crim
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Best poem iv read on here yet. Shows the harshnes life gives , nice work
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5th Aug 2015 8:37am
this poem is perfect. . so sad because its a commom occurrence for some people. . brilliantly expressed
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5th Jul 2018 6:27am
“AddictedHelp,” your pseudonym alone is a dead giveaway that you’re the kind of person I attempt to assist these days so I’m glad it’s helpful. I appreciate the compliments. :))
I was thinking of doing something with this one because it was one of those ideas that just hit me and I sat down and typed it out in a few minutes because I remember being in that Writer’s Zone when I scribbled it out. Of more importantance is the chance that posting it elsewhere may help someone. You solved that internal riddle with your comment because ‘Nothing, absolutely nothing, happens in God’s world by mistake.’
Cheers,
Gemini
I was thinking of doing something with this one because it was one of those ideas that just hit me and I sat down and typed it out in a few minutes because I remember being in that Writer’s Zone when I scribbled it out. Of more importantance is the chance that posting it elsewhere may help someone. You solved that internal riddle with your comment because ‘Nothing, absolutely nothing, happens in God’s world by mistake.’
Cheers,
Gemini