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When the Lights Go Out
Entered in Night time is the best time comp
When the lights go out
I feel the shadows closing in
When the lights go out
The dreams become real again
Look in the inky blackness
What can you see?
Hidden forest dwellers
That tremble the trees
The cold shining moon
Inside the abyss
Heightens the gloom
Where lost spirits kiss
Do you shiver?
The shivering meadows
Of ill-fated love
Cursed by the devils
And the stars above
Lines of cold rejection
Those words of spurn
Cast their spellcraft
A wound that burns
The deep longing, that is full of such unease
The singing in trees, the wicked wisp of my dreams
She comes to me with her laceration nails
With mildew clung to her dress, wretched smell of Hell
With her rotted lips, she kisses on my brow
Her once fair skin, shredded with decay, dripping foul
Still the most beautiful, there is of no doubt
She climbs on top of me when the lights go out
When the lights go out
I feel the shadows closing in
When the lights go out
The dreams become real again
When the lights go out
I feel the shadows closing in
When the lights go out
The dreams become real again
Look in the inky blackness
What can you see?
Hidden forest dwellers
That tremble the trees
The cold shining moon
Inside the abyss
Heightens the gloom
Where lost spirits kiss
Do you shiver?
The shivering meadows
Of ill-fated love
Cursed by the devils
And the stars above
Lines of cold rejection
Those words of spurn
Cast their spellcraft
A wound that burns
The deep longing, that is full of such unease
The singing in trees, the wicked wisp of my dreams
She comes to me with her laceration nails
With mildew clung to her dress, wretched smell of Hell
With her rotted lips, she kisses on my brow
Her once fair skin, shredded with decay, dripping foul
Still the most beautiful, there is of no doubt
She climbs on top of me when the lights go out
When the lights go out
I feel the shadows closing in
When the lights go out
The dreams become real again
Published 12th Feb 2014
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12th Feb 2014 3:07pm
Wow! This honestly left me feeling speechless. "cursed by the devils and the stars above" Love...Love that..
12th Feb 2014 3:23pm
12th Feb 2014 6:16pm
This flowed so well... The second stanza is a beaut, and the line "Do you shiver?"... very effective.
Good luck in the comp!
Good luck in the comp!
12th Feb 2014 6:21pm
12th Feb 2014 6:38pm
12th Feb 2014 6:53pm
13th Feb 2014 5:55am
Very enjoyable read. Has a flow not unlike a nursery rhyme
The 5th Stanza was my favorite.
Not so sure about the line
"Do you shiver?"
But, then again, it ties the 2nd and 3rd Stanza together pretty effectively. But, I guess now I'm just rambling
The 5th Stanza was my favorite.
Not so sure about the line
"Do you shiver?"
But, then again, it ties the 2nd and 3rd Stanza together pretty effectively. But, I guess now I'm just rambling
13th Feb 2014 6:14am
It's there as both a tie in and for an extra creepy factor. Anyway, glad you liked it.
