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Bare
I've quit smoking my medical mary jane
I feel so bare, naked to the bone.
No more dreamy landscapes to visit
My muse spits in my face, quitter.
Gone is the rhyming scheme
That once fueled my passion.
Feeling brain dead, lethargic
Philosophical ponderings dried up.
Yet compelled to write something new
Come inspiration, don't deny me entry.
Take me to the land of the free
Does this place still exist for me I wonder?
They say no junk, no soul
I suppose this is true.
As I ramble aimlessly, listlessly through
This poem of sorts.
Just one hit will set you free
Though i'm tired of sleepwalking through life.
I want to awaken take a good look around me
See if it was me or the junk talking.
Inside i'm screaming
Fuck, damn, shit.
Profanity, my demon is demanding
Feed me bitch,feeeeeeeeed me.
"I'm stronger than that",
I say with much resolve.
Phone off the hook try another number
I won't let my demons rule me, i'm a tough fucker.
My head will clear eventually
Then will see if I have any talent
Or if my inspiration only comes from
Toking and smoking.
Will see.
I feel so bare, naked to the bone.
No more dreamy landscapes to visit
My muse spits in my face, quitter.
Gone is the rhyming scheme
That once fueled my passion.
Feeling brain dead, lethargic
Philosophical ponderings dried up.
Yet compelled to write something new
Come inspiration, don't deny me entry.
Take me to the land of the free
Does this place still exist for me I wonder?
They say no junk, no soul
I suppose this is true.
As I ramble aimlessly, listlessly through
This poem of sorts.
Just one hit will set you free
Though i'm tired of sleepwalking through life.
I want to awaken take a good look around me
See if it was me or the junk talking.
Inside i'm screaming
Fuck, damn, shit.
Profanity, my demon is demanding
Feed me bitch,feeeeeeeeed me.
"I'm stronger than that",
I say with much resolve.
Phone off the hook try another number
I won't let my demons rule me, i'm a tough fucker.
My head will clear eventually
Then will see if I have any talent
Or if my inspiration only comes from
Toking and smoking.
Will see.
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 21st Feb 2011
| Edited 22nd Feb 2011
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In the end..weed won Crimin 0
22nd Feb 2011 1:53am
re: In the end..weed won Crimin 0
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2011 2:04am
Crimsin: 1; Weed: 0
This is a strong poem. Apply that strength to your battle.
This is a strong poem. Apply that strength to your battle.
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Thank you
22nd Feb 2011 3:36am
Thank you for the comment and encouragement..it's really appreciated..peace Crim
wow
22nd Feb 2011 6:51pm
i like it crim and your creativity i dont think comes from weed your writing is too amazing i think it is bottled up inside you happy to come out to play when you let it if that makes any sense :)
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:)
22nd Feb 2011 6:54pm
re: :)
22nd Feb 2011 6:56pm
walk the line
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2011 8:14pm
stay strong and yes - you are a quitter and will be stronger for it.
This is intense stuff and compelling to read...I can 'feel' the battle raging against your demons.
Great,
S
PS - Should the first line of the 7th read "I'm stronger THAN that?"
This is intense stuff and compelling to read...I can 'feel' the battle raging against your demons.
Great,
S
PS - Should the first line of the 7th read "I'm stronger THAN that?"
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re: walk the line
Thank you for the encouragement and the heads up on the spelling error..I'm walking the line my head is clearing..thank you again peace Crimsin
Great
23rd Feb 2011 1:21am
I love the feeling you put into the poem. It almost made me feel like those were my emotions.
~Dark Poet
~Dark Poet
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......
23rd Feb 2011 10:57pm
Which was it
24th Feb 2011 2:26am
This is a right on the point poem. Keep up the talent. question though . Did you quit because you felt it controlled your writing or another reason?
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re: Which was it
25th Feb 2011 6:02pm
good luck
18th Mar 2011 3:37am
re: good luck
20th Mar 2011 5:38pm
I know how you feel...
18th Mar 2011 6:42am
I feel all the time that weed heightens the creativity factors in my brain.. It is as if it sends me into analytical mode... You will always have people to support you in your decision to quit, and it is something to be very proud of if you are doing it for yourself... But if there is still a part of you with doubts, or a part of you that misses it.. dont feel ashamed. If you can write like a genius while you are baked, consider it a talent and embrace it..
Not trying to be the bad influence though...
Not trying to be the bad influence though...
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re: I know how you feel...
20th Mar 2011 5:39pm
Thank you I still smoke sporatically it does seem to heighten my creativity..gives me dreamy landscapes to visit..peace Crimsin :)