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Alone with you
Dreamed we were
on our way to the moon
on a cosy little star ship
with a roof made of glass,
all left on our own.
Surrounding us,
the velvety blue sky
where stars twinkle and glimmer
like unintentionally spilled pearls.
No presence of the
longingly expected moon
just the sight of our Earth
disappearing from view.
Alone with you.
on our way to the moon
on a cosy little star ship
with a roof made of glass,
all left on our own.
Surrounding us,
the velvety blue sky
where stars twinkle and glimmer
like unintentionally spilled pearls.
No presence of the
longingly expected moon
just the sight of our Earth
disappearing from view.
Alone with you.
Written by
Chiyo
(Miss Chi)
Published 1st Feb 2014
| Edited 17th Feb 2014
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Re: Alone with you
1st Feb 2014 3:10pm
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I think you're right with the romantic touch although the dream was still a little disturbing with the Earth vanishing. Maybe I need an anchor somehow ...
Thank you, J. for your nice words!
Thank you, J. for your nice words!
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1st Feb 2014 3:14pm
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1st Feb 2014 3:16pm
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1st Feb 2014 4:19pm
A wonderful romantic adventure…it is amazing where our dreams can take us… :) ox
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1st Feb 2014 4:27pm
Yes, it is amazing and somehow disturbing. I altered the dream a bit into a more romantic direction although it was romantic enough except for the vanishing earth :-). Thanks, dear JeJe for your precious comment and your friendship. xo
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1st Feb 2014 8:51pm
An out of this world experience sexy!!!
Awesome write sweets!!!
I enjoyed!!
Sir Lancelott
Awesome write sweets!!!
I enjoyed!!
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: Alone with you
3rd Feb 2014 8:38pm
Yes, an out-of-the-world journey but missed the moon. Thanks for your kind words, Sir Lancelott!
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1st Feb 2014 10:49pm
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3rd Feb 2014 8:40pm
Eery ideed with all the glass surrounding us, the Earth vanishing. Moonless space journey. Thank you, Paul, for feeling me.
Re: Alone with you
2nd Feb 2014 1:54pm
Always loved taking trips far away from earth
In my dreams ONLY though! lol
Sweetly romantic ink my dear!
In my dreams ONLY though! lol
Sweetly romantic ink my dear!
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3rd Feb 2014 8:48pm
I've always loved to go
on extraterrestrial mind trips.
It was the first time I dreamed a bout it.
It was a little uncanny.
Thank you for understanding and commenting!
on extraterrestrial mind trips.
It was the first time I dreamed a bout it.
It was a little uncanny.
Thank you for understanding and commenting!
Re: Alone with you
Anonymous
2nd Feb 2014 7:34pm
Beautiful celestial journey into a world of your own with your beloved. We can only dream and you captured it beautifully Ms. Chi.
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Re: Alone with you
3rd Feb 2014 8:52pm
Thank you for your kind comment, Vee. I tried to depict the dream authentically but it turned out differently. Sometimes a dream is more than a dream.
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3rd Feb 2014 9:26pm
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re: Re: Alone with you
3rd Feb 2014 9:32pm
Thank you so much, Gabriel! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, perhaps as much as I enjoyed my dream!
Re: Alone with you
12th Feb 2014 4:32am
One ticket please. I do alway enjoy the float of your pen Miss Chi. Always touched. Thank you.
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3rd May 2014 9:49pm
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24th Feb 2014 3:55pm
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re: Re: Alone with you
3rd May 2014 9:50pm
Hmmmmmmmmmmm ... I think you lost you're way :-) Apples Falling? Or did you mean the Earth?
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3rd May 2014 9:31pm
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3rd May 2014 9:54pm
Sometimes the strangest (or not that strange?) conections are made when we read other people's poems. And yes ... this speaks of a past love, too.
Re: Alone with you
5th Jul 2014 8:35am
Reading your words again; and the deep feelings and heartache they make me recall....
Your talent is breath taking.
Your talent is breath taking.
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