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Hidden
Her hidden disease
controls her soul,
that voice she battles
with dilly dallies
in her mind,
like drops of rain on
a hazy rainy day,
she leans her head back
while screaming into
emptiness pulling
her own hair,
begging for relief from
the manic episodes
that fuel her.
controls her soul,
that voice she battles
with dilly dallies
in her mind,
like drops of rain on
a hazy rainy day,
she leans her head back
while screaming into
emptiness pulling
her own hair,
begging for relief from
the manic episodes
that fuel her.
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Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 2:57am
I wind up reading your poems 3 or 4 times
and then again
after posting my comment
Serious, compelling mental ink
and then again
after posting my comment
Serious, compelling mental ink
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re: Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:05am
Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:08am
Pain and pleasure or pleasure through pain.
I get it. I've lived it. I know
Amazing write.
I get it. I've lived it. I know
Amazing write.
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re: Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:24am
Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:56am
it's difficult to fathom
what you say at random
but we all love it
as we read it so often
thanks madam
what you say at random
but we all love it
as we read it so often
thanks madam
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re: Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 4:12am
Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 1:48pm
Depression is a vicious disease tht never ceases
this write short and powerful very strong.byou have managed to capture it true sickness as i see the women fight with herself in utter manic. I love this Tommie
this write short and powerful very strong.byou have managed to capture it true sickness as i see the women fight with herself in utter manic. I love this Tommie
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re: Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 2:41pm
BS, your words mean a lot, thank you so much....I really appreciate you reading me. :)
Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:45pm
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26th Jan 2014 3:58pm
Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:51pm
Ooooo ... that's a very dark write. the protagonist here looks like has been attacked by some deadly evil spirit ..
u did a good job in telling the story.. well written...
keep Rollin
cyanide..
u did a good job in telling the story.. well written...
keep Rollin
cyanide..
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re: Re: Hidden
26th Jan 2014 3:59pm
Re: Hidden
28th Jan 2014 1:15am
Gotta watch what those voices say girl. Sneaky little fuckers they are. XO
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re: Re: Hidden
28th Jan 2014 2:19am