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For-u-ever !!!
Forever is a lie
You proved it true
Happy that truth is
still persisting in you !
I was there
Standing in queue
To be with you
To fight for you !
Your face was the idol
I worshiped all day
Your unaccepted love
was ultimate passion play !
Your voice in my mind
and thoughts inside,
the hunger for love
Won't be denied !
Wherever you are
Whatever you do
Will always be yours
I wish you knew !!!
You proved it true
Happy that truth is
still persisting in you !
I was there
Standing in queue
To be with you
To fight for you !
Your face was the idol
I worshiped all day
Your unaccepted love
was ultimate passion play !
Your voice in my mind
and thoughts inside,
the hunger for love
Won't be denied !
Wherever you are
Whatever you do
Will always be yours
I wish you knew !!!
Published 21st Jan 2014
| Edited 22nd Jan 2014
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21st Jan 2014 12:00pm
22nd Jan 2014 4:27am
haha.. I guess once in life we do have such huge crush for whom that soft corner lasts forever :)
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21st Jan 2014 3:53pm
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22nd Jan 2014 4:30am
Anonymous
21st Jan 2014 4:08pm
What a wonderful write and so relatable to so many. Beautiful! Enjoyed! :)
22nd Jan 2014 4:31am
21st Jan 2014 6:13pm
This write, especially the first 3 stanzas had me humming Dire Straits' "Tunnel of Love".
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21st Jan 2014 8:59pm
.....I see you've slipped a beauty in here on us Brinda! :) You don't ink often, but when you do, you deliver with style! This was a joy to read....Xo
22nd Jan 2014 4:34am
22nd Jan 2014 10:26am
now that was a very divine piece if I can call it ..
an awesome work there ..just one thing I'd like to point out if u don't mind , u forgot to place a 'the' before 'idol' on the third stanza first line..
rest all goes very nice ..its just a very pure n clean heart that u poured out .. keep up the good work..
keep Rollin..
cyanide..
an awesome work there ..just one thing I'd like to point out if u don't mind , u forgot to place a 'the' before 'idol' on the third stanza first line..
rest all goes very nice ..its just a very pure n clean heart that u poured out .. keep up the good work..
keep Rollin..
cyanide..
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22nd Feb 2014 2:17pm
Beautiful write! Loved it top to bottom! Favorite lines
"the hunger for love
Won't be denied!"
"the hunger for love
Won't be denied!"
25th Feb 2014 4:43am
