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25g of Cutters Choice tobacco
4 750ml bottles of Leffe
(you don't pronounce the final 'e')
3 bottles of Berberrana Rioja
2 bottles of ginger ale
3 limes
8 mixed bottles of ale
1 pint of milk
2 seabass
brown rice
garlic
salad
I don't buy paracetamol,
nor do I know why I have chosen
to display this voyeuristic insight.
I suppose, I need to make sure
I feel myself, and that I don't get
distracted by something I don't know
whilst the seaguls outside seem lost
and the mechanic fails to answer his phone.
My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat
as I prepare to drag myself
from this bed
and commence another stretch
at getting through the days
the only way I know how.
4 750ml bottles of Leffe
(you don't pronounce the final 'e')
3 bottles of Berberrana Rioja
2 bottles of ginger ale
3 limes
8 mixed bottles of ale
1 pint of milk
2 seabass
brown rice
garlic
salad
I don't buy paracetamol,
nor do I know why I have chosen
to display this voyeuristic insight.
I suppose, I need to make sure
I feel myself, and that I don't get
distracted by something I don't know
whilst the seaguls outside seem lost
and the mechanic fails to answer his phone.
My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat
as I prepare to drag myself
from this bed
and commence another stretch
at getting through the days
the only way I know how.
Published 13th Feb 2011
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"I don't buy paracetamol,
nor do I know why I have chosen
to display this voyeuristic insight." - this set and the list are surprisingly revealing. love that.
and
"My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat" - wow.
excellent descriptions of listlessness, i feel it. well done; i'm sure you know that already. [:
"I don't buy paracetamol,
nor do I know why I have chosen
to display this voyeuristic insight." - this set and the list are surprisingly revealing. love that.
and
"My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat" - wow.
excellent descriptions of listlessness, i feel it. well done; i'm sure you know that already. [:
13th Feb 2011 4:46pm
Soulful poem..it lets your reader in to what your feeling excellent..peace Crimsin
13th Feb 2011 5:34pm
I get the voyeuristic part and the list missing the drug says you are a harmsless voyeur..Who is simply seeking inspiration..excellent poem..peace Crimsin
14th Feb 2011 3:09am
You're right, there's something tantalizing about the list,feels a bit voyeuristic indeed :P
and this verse:
My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat
as I prepare to drag myself
from this bed
and commence another stretch
at getting through the days
the only way I know how.
--A good write Sir, and a sentiment that resonates personally...
and this verse:
My lonely stomach lining
is weeping up my throat
as I prepare to drag myself
from this bed
and commence another stretch
at getting through the days
the only way I know how.
--A good write Sir, and a sentiment that resonates personally...
14th Feb 2011 6:30am
I wasn't sure what to make of the first half (the list), but the second half is pretty solid, so the whole thing is alright overall. It was an interesting concept for a piece, to be sure. Overall I'd say I'm on the positive side of ambivalent.
