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Tribute- Bye Hem
"You can't do this to me,"
How many times have we heard that clichč?
Regardless of how we feel now
you warned us
gave it to us straight;
told us all you're a shadow.
You're just so tangible to be a shadow...
Your presence sits heavy in the room
and you know it.
Don't you?
That you're missed when you're not there,
something's off,
something's less.
You're a leader
and a lover of other depth
with words of leaden weight or feather light
that flourish where they're planted.
A brother first, a poet next,
a pillar and a roller-
I'm vexed in this attempt
at a tribute to you.
It won't work-
It's still too fresh...
You know it,
don't you?
***See LA's (ImperfectedStone's) "Goodbye" ***
How many times have we heard that clichč?
Regardless of how we feel now
you warned us
gave it to us straight;
told us all you're a shadow.
You're just so tangible to be a shadow...
Your presence sits heavy in the room
and you know it.
Don't you?
That you're missed when you're not there,
something's off,
something's less.
You're a leader
and a lover of other depth
with words of leaden weight or feather light
that flourish where they're planted.
A brother first, a poet next,
a pillar and a roller-
I'm vexed in this attempt
at a tribute to you.
It won't work-
It's still too fresh...
You know it,
don't you?
***See LA's (ImperfectedStone's) "Goodbye" ***
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LA
12th Feb 2011 2:16am
Yours cuts it far deeper than mine. A beautiful set of lines, can't stop rhyming, I feel so done in. =[
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re: LA
12th Feb 2011 2:18am
I know, me too...and it's two o'clock in the fucking morning...I have kids to take care of tomorrow. This is distressing. Highly distressing...how will I sleep?!
re: re: LA
12th Feb 2011 2:24am
yes, writers tend to be twitchy
12th Feb 2011 2:47am
it's like attempted suicide, cry for help and all that. it's something about vulnerability, actually quite touching. you can find some of his poems by googling: "deep underground hemihead" and clicking on the 'Cached' link. (google is our friend.)
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re: yes, writers tend to be twitchy
12th Feb 2011 5:21pm
nah, he's just on to better things i'm sure. i'm so glad you're a google-genius, ray. DUP would not do without your resourcefulness. [:
re: re: yes, writers tend to be twitchy
12th Feb 2011 6:07pm
well, yeah, it's actually like a fantasy suicide, no help needed. writers love to do this, me included.
it's somewhere between psychiatric withdrawal and the need for a vacation. :)
but 'better'? hey, we chopped liver or somethin'?
hmm, yeah, well, ok, maybe we are. (though i happen to love chopped liver myself.)
it's somewhere between psychiatric withdrawal and the need for a vacation. :)
but 'better'? hey, we chopped liver or somethin'?
hmm, yeah, well, ok, maybe we are. (though i happen to love chopped liver myself.)
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Ouch Jacki!
this is so heartfelt! I'm with you on this sentiment...
good write babe... :(
good write babe... :(
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re: Ouch Jacki!
12th Feb 2011 5:17pm
=)
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16th Feb 2011 6:55pm
the last 3 lines were a like a knife piercing your heart out or maybe more like a cruel reminder of what we wish to remain forgotten!
great poem
great poem
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16th Feb 2011 9:04pm
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