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dancin in the dark
So I'm drivin ‘cause I'm bored & for some reason the whole world sucks tonight. maybe I need a drink & music. maybe I need to goof on wasted people who pretend they're havin a good time...
I come to a club called Dancin inthe Dark, park in the lot & go in. kinda place plays dark ambient music, Lacrimosa, Nox Arcana, that kind. sit at the bar, corner, get a drink. I see you, long hair, short dress, talkin to some other babes. not just sexy.....dirty. yeah, real dirty.
your guy with the brown hair & azure eyes takes your hand, leads you to the dancefloor. the music's up tempo, but he grabs you close, runs his hands all over you like he's payin the rent. his hand on your dress where it's tight on your ass, it's like his fingers are pressin right into your crack. I look at your face & I see every fuckin woman who ever walked out on me.
other guys hit on you for a dance, pretty soon they're lined up, fuckin pigs wanting their paws all over you like you're up for a gangbang. in all this action, you notice me watching you. just watching. 15, 20 minutes later, you come over to me. slutty-like, you say 'don't you wanna dance with me?' I say no, you're a fuckin cunt. your angry eyes scream 'who the Fuck do you think you are!'
you say 'there's an alcove in the back. private. I wanna tell you somethin.' curiosity kicked my ass a few times, but I can never resist. we go back there, sit on a leatherette bench. 'you know I'm a bad girl,' you tell me. 'maybe you wanna spank me.' I say 'let's see.' you slip your dress off casual-like, & stand there in your garter belt, dark hose & heels. you get on your hands&knees along side me, your ass calling for brutal punishing.
I rub your creamy ass, circling. when I smack you hard, your o's tell me you're in ecstasy. so I beat your ass, beat it good. you moan & I get hard. I open my pants & my dick makes a jail break. you go down on me quick, fuck! you suck good! when I unload in your mouth, you grab my cock & let the cum spray under your eyes. angel with cum tears.
I straighten my pants & walk out, leaving you there, fingering yourself...
Published 5th Jan 2014
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Love the Sin City feel Mr Feddeller. Noir the hell out of it. I'll read your book. Thank you Sir.
5th Jan 2014 12:47pm
5th Jan 2014 1:03pm
5th Jan 2014 1:42pm
5th Jan 2014 5:40pm
thats perhaps most of men would greedy read.
pieces like this, sir,agonize my feminist
sensibilities.
pieces like this, sir,agonize my feminist
sensibilities.
5th Jan 2014 5:42pm
5th Jan 2014 7:15pm
Hardcore, leaving us begging for more :) Having a skilled hand move about our flesh is an awakening, thank you, for the mind candy and the artsy chick is pure *Sweetness*
Anonymous
5th Jan 2014 7:52pm
You write these so well ... love the gritty reality of it.
5th Jan 2014 8:47pm
Anonymous
6th Jan 2014 3:51am
John, this is one nawty delicious read..angel with ( ---) tears, good one, i have to remember that line ;)
6th Jan 2014 6:54am
Mr Feddeler, you give erotica at dirty name... so fucking dirty.
Cool style, great story telling, inspiring stuff.
Cool style, great story telling, inspiring stuff.
This is the first poem I read from JohnFeddeler. It is supposed to be hardcore and disgusting, but somehow it is not so bad. ;)
I think maybe because that word "jail break" make me laugh. :)
I think maybe because that word "jail break" make me laugh. :)
6th Jan 2014 3:44pm
once a guy was about to masturbate
he wrote
the prisoner... out broke like from a jail
as he removed his undies ...
similar jail break ..i could see
but best was cum tears and sluts need to be mouthed only
fucking them would be risky ..without condoms there is no fun...
you have finally cum
I am going to share this cum
if you agree
for all DUP to see
your cumming in here frothy
do I post this??
he wrote
the prisoner... out broke like from a jail
as he removed his undies ...
similar jail break ..i could see
but best was cum tears and sluts need to be mouthed only
fucking them would be risky ..without condoms there is no fun...
you have finally cum
I am going to share this cum
if you agree
for all DUP to see
your cumming in here frothy
do I post this??
7th Jan 2014 10:01pm
7th Jan 2014 10:38pm
7th Jan 2014 10:13pm
.....ending line was stellar. Your mind goes where many dream to go and others get lost...
Really digging the storyline of this cock-hard ink...
Respect John...Xo
Really digging the storyline of this cock-hard ink...
Respect John...Xo
Anonymous
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8th Jan 2014 3:19am
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27th Feb 2015 10:09pm
You are...a dirty man, John. And that girl just may be dirtier. I'm off to a cold shower....to cool the fuck off.
15th Jul 2016 1:04am
