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Mirror
I wiped off the tears of piercing eyes
And caressed the cheek so drenched
With tears fallen from great tempests,
I know this may be the last time I do.
Bound from being a long term company,
I am fettered to be forever of no benefit.
It is my greatest displeasure to my soul
That I may not give a hand to that man
Is it a burden or is it an incredible honor
To be the comfort only one may desire?
The rest for scars of one only I can give
When I stand before my own mirror...
And caressed the cheek so drenched
With tears fallen from great tempests,
I know this may be the last time I do.
Bound from being a long term company,
I am fettered to be forever of no benefit.
It is my greatest displeasure to my soul
That I may not give a hand to that man
Is it a burden or is it an incredible honor
To be the comfort only one may desire?
The rest for scars of one only I can give
When I stand before my own mirror...
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Re: Mirror
1st Jan 2014 5:15am
Very good as always my friend. I do love the emotion though am sorrowful right along with it.
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1st Jan 2014 7:33am
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8th Jan 2014 3:11am
technically, i like it. good, solid, sad but i think it pulls the reader in, and doesn't push him/her away. if you're speaking of cutting, this is a very well done way of speaking about it, not too obvious, not too "woe-is-me."
non-technically, i love it. it touches me, though maybe not for the reasons you might have intended. but that is part of the writer-reader connection.
non-technically, i love it. it touches me, though maybe not for the reasons you might have intended. but that is part of the writer-reader connection.
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Re: Mirror
16th Jan 2014 2:21pm
Not bad at all but I felt displaced from the true intention of the poem, like a sheep without direction. You might need to reel the notion in a tad just to give it more of a, 'I'm looking at my own reflection,' kind of thing. I got it but in a round about way.
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re: Re: Mirror
3rd Feb 2014 10:13am
I try my best to keep the deeper meaning ambiguous
for the readers to find out.
Thank you! And maybe I shall.
for the readers to find out.
Thank you! And maybe I shall.
Re: Mirror
8th Feb 2014 5:04pm