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Secretly yours
Your eyes my world of inspiration
your lips my only sin.
your lips my only sin.
Published 28th Sep 2009
| Edited 19th Jul 2011
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2nd Oct 2009 3:14am
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3rd Oct 2009 4:50am
lately i've been drawn to brief and meaningful poems..
i think by expanding it i would spoil the meaning i want to give..
i think by expanding it i would spoil the meaning i want to give..
24th Oct 2009 2:41am
Very similar to the two liners that Bukowski uses to seperate the section within his poetry collections.
24th Oct 2009 2:45am
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1st Nov 2009 9:59pm
Short, concise and to the point. I love it. It maybe just a few words but it has a lot of meaning and impact behind it.
5th Nov 2009 8:31pm
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18th Jul 2011 5:12pm
Can I be a grammar-Nazi and point out that an ellipsis is denoted by 3 periods/full-stops and not 4?
I found this poem from taking up the Webmistresses reading challenge and I'm glad I did. I have to confess I haven't read much (if any) of your stuff but I have to applaud the conciseness of this poem.
Very nice!
I found this poem from taking up the Webmistresses reading challenge and I'm glad I did. I have to confess I haven't read much (if any) of your stuff but I have to applaud the conciseness of this poem.
Very nice!
19th Jul 2011 00:45am
Thanks for pointing out the 4th fullstop!
Also thanks for reading and im glad you enjoyed my poem :)
Also thanks for reading and im glad you enjoyed my poem :)
19th Jul 2011 00:49am
Now you've taken out the ellipsis completely! :O
This changes the poem... a lot! That's certainly not what I was suggesting, but it is your poem.
This changes the poem... a lot! That's certainly not what I was suggesting, but it is your poem.
