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Renku : Love of Sea and Sky
Love of Sea for Sky
Far, Sea wishes to touch Sky
Loving Sky so blue
Sea whispers sweetly to Sky
"My love, your blue is splendid!"
Sky listens the words
At the end of the nice day
And he is blushing
Sky prefers to hide his red
With the night and with the moon
When night goes to sleep
Sky is blushing by sunrise
Just time for breakfast
Then Sea sees again the Sky
Always blue and beautiful
But what is her aim?
Sea wishes to attract Sky
Calling her fishes
Flying fishes fly in Sky
For catching the white wet clouds
But they meet only
Wet cotton and cheerful birds
And then dive in Sea
Sea calls to help by sirens
To attract Sky in her waves
But angels in Sky
Applaude to wonderful songs
And Sky smiles to Sea
"What charming smile, Sky"
Whispers sweetly Sea to Sky
"I love blue in you"
she says, "surely I love you"
"please, Sky, hug me strong!"
It is the beginning of
Love story with Sea and Sky
When you are on beach
You see as far as you do
Where they encounter
The horizon is the place
For their prudish stealth kisses
Love of Sea and Sky
Far, Sea wishes to touch Sky
Loving Sky so blue
Sky whispers sweetly to Sea
"My love, will you marry me?!"
Notes : this is my first renku (18 stenzas). Hope you like it as I like to write it! - The picture is mine, from West French coast, in a wild Landes beach
Published 30th Dec 2013
| Edited 31st Dec 2013
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Anonymous
31st Dec 2013 5:42am
I love the story of naturalistic love!
Quite brilliant, i did count the first two stanzas and they came out right :)
Great job Malin !!
Quite brilliant, i did count the first two stanzas and they came out right :)
Great job Malin !!
31st Dec 2013 5:46am
31st Dec 2013 7:17am
this must be quite a disciplined style of writing unless it comes naturally to you.
beautifully expanded from the original piece.
i forgot how beautiful France is... love the picture.
beautifully expanded from the original piece.
i forgot how beautiful France is... love the picture.
31st Dec 2013 7:36am
Thank you, Mia, for your comment, so nice! And happy to see you love my renku, my picture...
31st Dec 2013 1:18pm
31st Dec 2013 1:23pm
3rd Jan 2014 2:00pm
Malin, this is a poem with a inherited form, something that I am really rather bad at. I had to look up "renku" to learn more. Quite funny that it started as vulgar verse!
One day I will try this. Thank you for this poem!
One day I will try this. Thank you for this poem!
3rd Jan 2014 3:20pm
