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Pissing on him, but tell him...He's Reigning
It's not like you
are what he once
believed he knew...
So, it's not surprising
that his misoneistic
cloth burned past
the flesh, and bone...
As the sky washed away
cirrus clouds that overtly
peeked out from umbriferous
intentions...
'Pon the truth of
a malignant foundation, brittle
and like crystallized tissue
it's shatters with little more
than a breeze of thought...
are what he once
believed he knew...
So, it's not surprising
that his misoneistic
cloth burned past
the flesh, and bone...
As the sky washed away
cirrus clouds that overtly
peeked out from umbriferous
intentions...
'Pon the truth of
a malignant foundation, brittle
and like crystallized tissue
it's shatters with little more
than a breeze of thought...
Published 18th Dec 2013
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18th Dec 2013 2:41pm
19th Dec 2013 1:24am
Thank you Crim! So wonderful you are to me my friend
I'm humbled n grateful, always :)
I'm humbled n grateful, always :)
18th Dec 2013 2:56pm
I agree with Crim, you have delved deep with this shattering write. Nicely done :)
19th Dec 2013 2:18am
18th Dec 2013 5:21pm
*scratching head* Can I have an English interpreter please? ;) The title tells the story......Beautifully penned.
Hugs....Xo
Hugs....Xo
19th Dec 2013 10:01am
Truly, without the methaphor laced
'Rant' it's just another rant lol... But for real
you always leave me humbled, smiling
n always grateful to "Rain" on me your
sweet thoughts :) thank you!
'Rant' it's just another rant lol... But for real
you always leave me humbled, smiling
n always grateful to "Rain" on me your
sweet thoughts :) thank you!
Anonymous
18th Dec 2013 5:46pm
Without the title -I'd be lost..but lost in a beautiful piece of work anyway! With the title functioning to assist my mind in comprehension (and, admittedly a thesaurus) - this does reach at the depths and stir an array of wonder in my mind! Lovely work ;-)
19th Dec 2013 10:03am
My sweet Miki! aaaawwww you lost? Never
but I'm humbled n honored by your words
n of course forever appreciative of support :)
but I'm humbled n honored by your words
n of course forever appreciative of support :)
18th Dec 2013 9:15pm
what a wordplay on that title !!
man this is crazy...!!
great write..
keep Rollin
cyanide..
man this is crazy...!!
great write..
keep Rollin
cyanide..
19th Dec 2013 10:05am
Thanks bro! Yea, it just kinda 'hit' me in the head
so I ran with it lol... Happy you liked this spillage
n as usual, I appreciate you much :)
so I ran with it lol... Happy you liked this spillage
n as usual, I appreciate you much :)
19th Dec 2013 3:54am
My brother my friend you got down deep on this eye opening write. You are gifted hands touched by God. Continue to shine and stay focus on your creative writes. Much love & respect!
19th Dec 2013 10:38am
Thank you my brotha, but I don't have the market cornered
I clearly did the same for you kid... You are a light
n I appreciate your illumination upon my pages always! :)
I clearly did the same for you kid... You are a light
n I appreciate your illumination upon my pages always! :)
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 3:58am
How I feel this. My heart feels like a single drop of rain could drown it. Amazing how one person can you feel so different and so fragile even though you try to be strong. Enjoyed this! :)
19th Dec 2013 10:46am
"My heart feels like a single drop of rain could drown it"
Effing love that line! thank u my dear, appreciate you so much :)
Effing love that line! thank u my dear, appreciate you so much :)
19th Dec 2013 7:58am
how wrong of her to lead him on. But it would be wrong of him to fall for it again. Great write Poetikmind(:
19th Dec 2013 10:53am
I agree she was wrong, but him?
Nah some people just continue to believe
so he's not wrong, just too trusting lol
thank you for your heart, n words of support
I sincerely appreciate you :)
Nah some people just continue to believe
so he's not wrong, just too trusting lol
thank you for your heart, n words of support
I sincerely appreciate you :)
Anonymous
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19th Dec 2013 10:55am
Love love love your comment! Thank you so much Lily!
You sweet woman, appreciate you much :)
You sweet woman, appreciate you much :)
19th Dec 2013 1:43pm
it reads as if the only option available are being cut with a sword or a spear! The last two stanza really stand out!
19th Dec 2013 4:02pm
Well you know how goes bro. Rather they kill us with that
than by the slow agonizing death of deception n heartache!
thanks a ton for always showing your support bro. It's truly appreciated :)
than by the slow agonizing death of deception n heartache!
thanks a ton for always showing your support bro. It's truly appreciated :)
19th Dec 2013 6:30pm
There is some comfort in being able to identify your assassin rather then death via a silent killer!
22nd Dec 2013 00:24am
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 2:04pm
Bro!! fuck you doin' Man? Spillin' my guts and blood to mix with your ink and flush away like the piss the [bitch] anoints us with...I feel ya Brother..Love ya Man! Spill on...
19th Dec 2013 4:10pm
Damn bro. My bad! I see I made a mess too! lol
For real though I do understand your pain, much like my own
so suspected you'd feel this one a lot... Appreciate all your support all the time :)
For real though I do understand your pain, much like my own
so suspected you'd feel this one a lot... Appreciate all your support all the time :)
21st Dec 2013 10:54pm
21st Dec 2013 11:29pm
Wow she came back to me! :) so very happy to heR from you again sweetheart :) thank you
22nd Dec 2013 3:28am
can never ignore you or your hypnotizing words...lol just keeping you on your toes..:)
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20th May 2016 4:51am
Omgoodness You dug deep to find this! thank you! Appreciate you sooooo much my sweetness :)
22nd May 2016 4:46am
I'm glad you did...I read one of your poems...and my mind drifts off for ages. It's going to take eons to work through your back catalog. You are treasure...
