The spectral love lines of helium worship  

Interesting topic, I appreciate your vocabulary also.

maggot, thank you for dropping by for a read and comment.

cheers

I saw this one wish entry. I'm glad you posted it, Case. It's lovely to see the softer side of your ink.

You've caught that gorgeous weightlessness that comes with being with a close connection with someone. Plus you used galactic vocabulary, so I'm already sold...

Just lovely... Good luck in the comp, but it's already a winner, as far as I'm concerned.

Well, I've been reading a lot of love poems lately by dead poets, so I guess tenderness it's rubbing off on me... but I was also inspired by your tribute poem to Craic. You're not the only poet that adores him... I just want to pirouette in equilibrium through clover fields when he's around. ;)  
 
Atakti, I'm stoked that this concise piece caught your attention and your comments just shot me sky high. Thank you for adding it to your reading list too!!!

Not surprised at how well the vid turned out... Lovely work.

I did wonder if the very few lines would allow you enough space to unfurl those creative sails, but of course you rocked it!

:)

I needed to make the video and music atmospheric, but kept it simple, so I didn't take away too much from the poem. If you tell me it rocks, then I've hit my mark. Thanks heaps, Atakti.

The sense of timeless freedom is so beautifully drawn here. Love this, Case...

merci, Petit Minou. I'm really stoked you're loving this piece.

beautiful dreamy quality to this ... loved it before... love it even more now.

Cheers Petit_Minou, for coming back and loving it some more. I appreciate your support.

Case

I think because of the shortness of it, we're getting the full burst of your thoughts in a small amount of time, and that lends itself rather well to the sincerity of the wish

one thing, well one word might need being looked at, and that's 'suspended because you're talking or looking into the future, I could be wrong and it's not like the word is a poem changer, it's just the thought struck me, so I struck you with it

anyhow man, great stuff, shine on  

Craic, I think all that practice in the 20 word comp has definitely helped me hone my short poems and speed. The "One wish" comp was a perfect test and I enjoy the challenge of working to short word limits.    
   
I'm also stoked you confirmed my niggling niggle with the fourth line and the use of a past tense with "suspended". I was sitting there this morning trying to figure out a solution, but throwing in a third present tense at the start of the line was not an option, because I felt like I needed to break up L3 and L5.    
   
Anyway, I had another look at it today, with my feminine side, [I find she shoots straight down the line] and I figured out the puzzle after looking at the line and not the word. Thanks for your great feedback man, it's exactly what I needed to hear.

Case this is so very beautiful.. I love the tender side of you.. much love Crim :)

Thank heaps, Crim. I'm going to have to write the sequel to Animal [feed] now to restore some faith in my followers that I can still write hard as fuck.

I do favour equilibrium and you have the perfect balance in this beautiful piece Alexander.  A captivating wish. :)

I use to do a bit of scuba diving and finding neutral buoyancy is a tricky thing to achieve.

Thanks heaps for your great comment, Magdalena.

A timeless circumgyration perfectly penned as one wish....:)
Case, you captured it perfectly in this short and beautiful piece.

Vee, my dictionary even scratched it's head at "circumgyration".

Thanks for your awesome comment and for doing my head in with your vocab yet again.

Case, this vid is breathtakingly beautiful, the imagery is superb and the reading magnificent.  I like it very much, listed :)
btw, I love the word pivoting, one of my fav words ;)

Marvelous work Mr. Case ... The poem stands well on it's own but the video production with your reading takes it to another level ... It reminds me of the opening for some great love movie one might see ...

Bravo! Brother Case!

LSP

Brother LSP, I'm always humbled when you drop by and give my poetry and videos such a huge wrap.

Yeah, perhaps an opening for a Sci-Fi love story. I started a short novel some years ago. Perhaps I should finish it and incorporate this poem into the prologue. A video novel, now there's an idea.

Thanks for the support, man... and for adding it to your reading list.

O, to be weightless
To be air, ignite, like a flame
Crossing limits of dimensions

All we need is love and a stratospheric airship... :)

Thanks heaps, LIZQ for your awesome comments.

stratospheric text
timeless circumgyration
gorgeous weightlessness

I am wordless, then better to adopt words of others and to make an haiku to express my admiration in front of your text and the splendid video!

I'm honoured by your haiku, Sir Malin. I think the haiku could become your trademark seal of approval. I appreciate you dropping by and for adding this poem to your reading list.

I am really honoured and very impressed by your "Sir Malin"! And yes, writting the strange haiku, I made with words from the other commentators here is a way to approve and to show my admiration for your splendid poem and the video too! Sir Case, I am filled with admiration for the works which you produce, poems and video!