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Roads of Nowhere
I first found you under a bridge, picking up
fallen stars. The dust on your shoes shone
with half stories.
You smiled and shared a warm cup of you.
Filled with anywhere, I drank, wanted
you to pour more.
Your hands told me of today's cider presses, pear
trees and hot soup meals. You kept your yesterdays
and I kept mine.
We flowed into each other outside clocking minutes,
forgot the calendar of names. Our blood pumped;
in days, out nights.
The skies spun around, the moon stared, blinked but
autumn promises never keep. We chased summer,
corn fields and trails.
Our history is gone, ground into the southern road slipping
past. You know, baby, what they say... tramps like us
were born to run.
Entered in Miki's 'Born to Run' comp
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Re: Roads of Nowhere
I was here, I can sign the register, & I do know: always be on the run. never be more than tramps...
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5th Nov 2013 12:17pm
I wasn't there, John, so those words from a first-hand witness mean a lot to me... I was there in my head, and you saw that... sweet.
Thank you.
Thank you.
re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 12:18pm
Aww, thank you Dennis... I had fun writing it. The comps are doing their job, inspiring poets, and for that at least, I'm happy.
:)
:)
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5th Nov 2013 11:15am
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5th Nov 2013 12:19pm
Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 1:50pm
Hmmm....The thing is--somehow--i still am...running. The only problem with that is, we can never escape, ourselves.
Your phrasing is creatively unique: ..."our blood pumped;in days,out nights...."--that sense of urgency,and renewed energy.
The very best of luck in the comp, but--as always--a winning write, my Friend!
Your phrasing is creatively unique: ..."our blood pumped;in days,out nights...."--that sense of urgency,and renewed energy.
The very best of luck in the comp, but--as always--a winning write, my Friend!
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 3:37pm
We can all disappear one way or another, you're right, Enchantress. Escaping a reality is different from embracing a new one...
Thanks so much for reading!
Thanks so much for reading!
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Anonymous
5th Nov 2013 2:50pm
I agree with your above comment Atakti, that comps are quite inspirational to tackle on topics which we tend to dismiss on our own.
You've done an outstanding job with this one and good luck in the comp.
You've done an outstanding job with this one and good luck in the comp.
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 3:43pm
Vee, that's brill that you think it's 'outstanding'! It would be nice to win, but I'm just happy I pushed myself in this direction, else I'd probably just spend all my ink in the Eternal Darkness thread...
Thank you.
Thank you.
Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 3:02pm
Fffffffuuuucccckkkk... This was pure and simplest put,
AAAMMMAAZING!!! U had me from that first brilliant opening stanza lady! brava! :)
AAAMMMAAZING!!! U had me from that first brilliant opening stanza lady! brava! :)
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5th Nov 2013 3:46pm
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Anonymous
5th Nov 2013 3:06pm
Have that Talking head song in my head since I read the title of this poem...
Like how the sentences seem to unfold themselves.
Like how the sentences seem to unfold themselves.
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 3:50pm
Roads of nowhere... roads of now, here...
I tried to escape time with this write. I think I managed somewhat...
Thank you, Mourganna!
I tried to escape time with this write. I think I managed somewhat...
Thank you, Mourganna!
Re: Roads of Nowhere
5th Nov 2013 4:26pm
Our history is gone, ground into the southern road slipping
past. <---Dig that much Atakti!!!
The whole work wears Heart!!!
Good luck in the comp!!!
past. <---Dig that much Atakti!!!
The whole work wears Heart!!!
Good luck in the comp!!!
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5th Nov 2013 4:35pm
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5th Nov 2013 9:51pm
Well I was sure this was a real experience until I read otherwise... Job done tic tac. Don't spend all your ink on eternal darkness, that's eternal anyway, it doesn't appreciate it. Whatever this warm, tingly feeling is, it really appreciates these writes.
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
6th Nov 2013 5:50am
Dys, you have some turn of phrase gems in that mind of yours... Eternal doesn't appreciate, sooo interesting that concept...
Thank you for the encouragement. Yeah, warm and tingly, I feel you are just as baffled as I am.
Thank you for the encouragement. Yeah, warm and tingly, I feel you are just as baffled as I am.
re: re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
6th Nov 2013 8:45pm
Lol it's your fault I'm baffled. That first stanza and fourth were beautiful, then the painful contrast in the last stanza just made the rest of it even stronger, if anything. Highlighted how fleeting and precious those moments are... Anyway I'm gushing, gonna find an AC to stand in front of.
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Re: Roads of Nowhere
6th Nov 2013 4:46am
that took me back to a short chapter in my life. powerful stuff here atk
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
6th Nov 2013 5:51am
Well, wow, another poet with an interesting chapter... We'll have to pry it out of you all.
Cheers, Luna, I appreciate it!
Cheers, Luna, I appreciate it!
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Anonymous
6th Nov 2013 5:29am
This feels like it was written by someone who has truly been there... winning write, I hope...
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re: Re: Roads of Nowhere
6th Nov 2013 5:52am
Lol, I should get Miki to put you guys on the judging panel... Thanks so much, Petit!
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23rd Nov 2013 10:13pm