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Sorry King Of The Jungle
Mighty cat may be bigger but I think you will like my size
the length and especially the width
unsheathe it at your leisure
even give it a lift
Are you taking off the hosiery
or just the garters that are clipped
it sounds like your pleasure is running
indicated by the sound from your lips
Second to none with my energy
when our hips are thrusting to and fro
hopefully there will never be an occasion
where your response is tersely a "no"
So remember that on your menu
as you think about travels and fees
that with me you won't have to worry
for this animal is absent of any fleas!
the length and especially the width
unsheathe it at your leisure
even give it a lift
Are you taking off the hosiery
or just the garters that are clipped
it sounds like your pleasure is running
indicated by the sound from your lips
Second to none with my energy
when our hips are thrusting to and fro
hopefully there will never be an occasion
where your response is tersely a "no"
So remember that on your menu
as you think about travels and fees
that with me you won't have to worry
for this animal is absent of any fleas!
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Re: Sorry Tigger!
Anonymous
20th Oct 2013 5:12am
Loving this, although with the title, i would love to have seen more reference to the Tigger Song:
The wonderful thing about tiggers
Is tiggers are wonderful things!
Their tops are made out of rubber
Their bottoms are made out of springs!
They're bouncy, trouncy, flouncy, pouncy
Fun, fun, fun, fun, fun!
The wonderful thing about tiggers
Is tiggers are wonderful things!
Their tops are made out of rubber
Their bottoms are made out of springs!
They're bouncy, trouncy, flouncy, pouncy
Fun, fun, fun, fun, fun!
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re: Re: Sorry Tigger!
20th Oct 2013 5:14am
yes I know the Tigger Song, part of the territory with working with daycare kids. Care to offer a different word I can put in there for a feline?
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Anonymous
20th Oct 2013 7:25am
Tiger, Lion, Panther, Leopard, Cheetah...
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Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
20th Oct 2013 4:42pm
This was pretty smooth bro n I loved the wordplay
But I'm on the fence about the title... Still the ink was on point! :)
But I'm on the fence about the title... Still the ink was on point! :)
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re: Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
20th Oct 2013 9:01pm
I originally called it "Sorry Tigger". The references to "mighty cat", "fleas", suggests something from the cat family.
Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
20th Oct 2013 5:10pm
I enjoyed this poem and the rhyming you did here.
Sounds like you and you're lady friend are made for each other....... :)
Sounds like you and you're lady friend are made for each other....... :)
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20th Oct 2013 9:01pm
Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
20th Oct 2013 9:57pm
And he roars!!!
This rolled along Sir-it seemed a fast Write (I don't mean that as lacking...I mean that as in Muse Driven)
This rolled along Sir-it seemed a fast Write (I don't mean that as lacking...I mean that as in Muse Driven)
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Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
21st Oct 2013 3:44pm
jazz, sometimes you just hit upon this flow, this aura.....and your words become captivating to the reader. This is one of those times....man.
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re: Re: Sorry King Of The Jungle
Thanks, I don't want to be too critical since Al Stewart got the album band back together to do the "Year Of The Cat". Love the way Peter White got to show off his guitar chops on that album before launching into a very enjoyable solo career.
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Anonymous
22nd Oct 2013 3:42am
Very creative and i loved the humor and fun infused in there.
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