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Snoring Flowers
Sleep. The hazy, lazy lullaby; Slumber,
sheep, one sheep, two sheep, three sheep,
Oops! One fell over.
Ouch, that exclamation point hurt my head,
it's thumping.
Thumper.
Count bunnies, yes, bunnies.
One bunny, two bunnies, three bunnies,
and now 'Watership Down' is in my head and all I can see is blood and guts and gammy eye.
Sigh.
Just keep typing, hopefully I'll fall, face down onto the keys and that will be the end to it.
Why?
Three nights in a row I cannot sleep.
The tablets are gone, yet I'm popping Ibprofen to stop the migranes
and I want a cigarette.
I'm quitting.
Tender smoke inhaled through mouth and exhaled,
even imagining it helps me feel slumber's near.
Breathe in, exhale,
far better than counting sheep,
the bunnies are all blood and guts and gammy eye.
Breathe in, exhale...
breathe in, exha...
breathe in...
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sheep, one sheep, two sheep, three sheep,
Oops! One fell over.
Ouch, that exclamation point hurt my head,
it's thumping.
Thumper.
Count bunnies, yes, bunnies.
One bunny, two bunnies, three bunnies,
and now 'Watership Down' is in my head and all I can see is blood and guts and gammy eye.
Sigh.
Just keep typing, hopefully I'll fall, face down onto the keys and that will be the end to it.
Why?
Three nights in a row I cannot sleep.
The tablets are gone, yet I'm popping Ibprofen to stop the migranes
and I want a cigarette.
I'm quitting.
Tender smoke inhaled through mouth and exhaled,
even imagining it helps me feel slumber's near.
Breathe in, exhale,
far better than counting sheep,
the bunnies are all blood and guts and gammy eye.
Breathe in, exhale...
breathe in, exha...
breathe in...
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Published 17th Jan 2011
| Edited 21st Jan 2011
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20th Jan 2011 7:02am
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nice train of thought poem.
whose content is obvious. if i had one nit; it would be to not use the last line and let us the reader imagine the you nodded off on us.
thanks for the nice read
nice train of thought poem.
whose content is obvious. if i had one nit; it would be to not use the last line and let us the reader imagine the you nodded off on us.
thanks for the nice read
21st Jan 2011 00:28am
That's fair, I've made that change - I couldn't handle a riddle at the time, hence the obvious expression of the poem. I'd gone four days without sleep and I was suffering. =/ Thank you, Billy and at least it has your comment now :) Cheers!
