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high hopes
the ol man is snoozin comfortably in the back room
momma is still bitchin in the hallway
but i bet she'll be there soon
me and lil brotha fightin in the front yard
over who is gonna be bigger
and have better facial hair
if we ever grow up
there is a whole gang of bikes
piled up and oxidizing out back
the dog ran away
but when you stay on the seventh floor
rent controlled roach trap
you get it
you sometimes hope he never comes back
has found a happy home in a cul de sac
or at least ended up
catchin some zzzz's with dad
momma is still bitchin in the hallway
but i bet she'll be there soon
me and lil brotha fightin in the front yard
over who is gonna be bigger
and have better facial hair
if we ever grow up
there is a whole gang of bikes
piled up and oxidizing out back
the dog ran away
but when you stay on the seventh floor
rent controlled roach trap
you get it
you sometimes hope he never comes back
has found a happy home in a cul de sac
or at least ended up
catchin some zzzz's with dad
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Re: high hopes
6th Oct 2013 5:25pm
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6th Oct 2013 8:10pm
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6th Oct 2013 7:02pm
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6th Oct 2013 7:30pm
thanx miss A. glad you dig it.
stretching???
sounds good but idk just another one of those devils who happens to grab the wheel from time to time i guess......
stretching???
sounds good but idk just another one of those devils who happens to grab the wheel from time to time i guess......
Re: high hopes
6th Oct 2013 9:13pm
I love the lines "fightin in the front yard over who is gonna be bigger and have better facial hair if we ever grow up"
If we ever grow up.
The "if" that plagues the years as we get older, and realize that "if" is all we have...
If we ever grow up.
The "if" that plagues the years as we get older, and realize that "if" is all we have...
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6th Oct 2013 10:57pm
well said B. seems as if you analyzation and thought process on reading is coming right along as well....
good for you dawg.
thank you for the insightful comment brotha....
good for you dawg.
thank you for the insightful comment brotha....
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6th Oct 2013 10:58pm
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8th Oct 2013 2:36am
Really digging the heart felt images, John, and how you're heading out on your horizon with this gem of nostalgic insight. I agree with Spin's and B's take on your lines and am also quite fond of " a whole gang of bikes
piled up and oxidizing out back" and "but when you stay on the seventh floor
rent controlled roach trap
you get it". I feel it, man, and that's always a hallmark of your writing !
piled up and oxidizing out back" and "but when you stay on the seventh floor
rent controlled roach trap
you get it". I feel it, man, and that's always a hallmark of your writing !
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Re: high hopes
9th Oct 2013 1:21am
I really like this one Hun, it's like watching old home movies in the beginning before transitioning into thoughts of nostalgia towards the end. It flows and reads well together.
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Re: high hopes
9th Oct 2013 7:33am
thanx babe. i know you know the whole baackdground knowing it's more than comical so fo real thanx darlin....
Re: high hopes
28th Dec 2013 6:47am
Me too, bro. I hope the dog had a good life. They mean more than people.
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