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I want to have a secret exposed
something that makes my insides
scream passed this fence post
that I have been resting my coffee on
The view is on top of beauty
and the wildest ones
are penned in
but these grains have cousins
close blood
on other hills
and I am as divided as mitosis
the same seed on a sounding stage
singing separation
There is a death to unity
that the mystics miscommunicate
and the zealots pole vault towards
just over art
Poetry is for the liars
too in love with tragedy
to admit its flaws
something that makes my insides
scream passed this fence post
that I have been resting my coffee on
The view is on top of beauty
and the wildest ones
are penned in
but these grains have cousins
close blood
on other hills
and I am as divided as mitosis
the same seed on a sounding stage
singing separation
There is a death to unity
that the mystics miscommunicate
and the zealots pole vault towards
just over art
Poetry is for the liars
too in love with tragedy
to admit its flaws
Published 28th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
28th Sep 2013 10:11pm
"Poetry is for the liars
too in love with tragedy
to admit its flaws"
This is the most truthful thing I have read today. I believe it was Indie that once said that poets have a horrible habit of making everything sound beautiful. This is the stark truth about writing.
Thank you for the read.
too in love with tragedy
to admit its flaws"
This is the most truthful thing I have read today. I believe it was Indie that once said that poets have a horrible habit of making everything sound beautiful. This is the stark truth about writing.
Thank you for the read.
28th Sep 2013 11:54pm
thank you for reading
and commenting
yeah I spose that it is the bulk of the thing, we keep sharing the best ways to tell each other
that we are missing something
until its found, cheers!
and commenting
yeah I spose that it is the bulk of the thing, we keep sharing the best ways to tell each other
that we are missing something
until its found, cheers!
25th Nov 2013 9:14am
Grammatically, would change "passed" to "past" as it's being used as an adverb in this sentence. Would also change the mitosis line. Mitosis is the process of a cell splitting, so that your line effectively says 'I am as divided as division' ... also I'm not sure that the word mitosis sits easily with the rest of the piece; perhaps play with the wording there a bit? Only my opinion.
"Poetry is for the liars too in love with tragedy to admit its flaws" Like he who commented above, I was most drawn to those lines. Sad, but softly said, almost in forgiveness. Quite lovely.
"Poetry is for the liars too in love with tragedy to admit its flaws" Like he who commented above, I was most drawn to those lines. Sad, but softly said, almost in forgiveness. Quite lovely.
