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Death Spin
Sometimes I feel like
I'm thrown into the dark.
No words,no looks,no love
nothing from you
but then at times
all I have to do is knock
and you open your heart,
tell me your secrets,
listen to my words,
give me your love.
up and down,in and out,
black and white,here and there
you got me coming and going.
I say..."no more"
and your at my door,
covering me with your eyes
grabbing me with your smell
putting me in a death spin
with your words.
What can I say...
but "come on in".
Here we go again.
I'm thrown into the dark.
No words,no looks,no love
nothing from you
but then at times
all I have to do is knock
and you open your heart,
tell me your secrets,
listen to my words,
give me your love.
up and down,in and out,
black and white,here and there
you got me coming and going.
I say..."no more"
and your at my door,
covering me with your eyes
grabbing me with your smell
putting me in a death spin
with your words.
What can I say...
but "come on in".
Here we go again.
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Re: Death Spin
Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 8:47pm
That's some friend with benefits Hashman..I know you're not knocking this..lol
Nice write Man, very enjoyable read!
Nice write Man, very enjoyable read!
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 10:01pm
oh wow..wish I had room on my reading list..or that I wasn't too stoned to go erase one and add this! Awesome write, felt every word and every allusion it left to my own mind...bravo!
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 10:01pm
okay, I made it happen..lol
added! :-)
added! :-)
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24th Sep 2013 10:29pm
Your the best miki...gonna burn one in your honor right now...always smile :) (thanks for reading)
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Anonymous
25th Sep 2013 00:54am
Nice work, I've been in that tail spin, very well done sir
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Anonymous
25th Sep 2013 5:11am
One of those can't live with her, ca't live without her kind of things, huh? Enjoy the ride, then...
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25th Sep 2013 12:49pm
My bro. This is probably the very best piece I've ever read about the up n down of a complicated yet loving relationship... It's a FAV!
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27th Sep 2013 5:07pm
Stop.............Don’t.........Stop.....Don’t.....Stop...Don’t..Stop..Don’t..Stop.Don’tStopDon’tStopDon’tStop......
Good Write Hash....
Good Write Hash....
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Anonymous
28th Sep 2013 2:28am
...and that's the way love goes..:)
up and down, spinning around..we question and yet we want more.
good one my friend!
up and down, spinning around..we question and yet we want more.
good one my friend!
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