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The Travelling Man (part 1)
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He curled his fingers tight in his denim pockets. The snow had been falling fast for hours. First, in thick fluffed cotton balls, then fast dense streaks pounding intense, whiting out any distant vision. The wind had just enough bite to icicle his stubble as he walked against it, a bit of rain below his nostrils. He loved being cold like this, he felt alive. But if he didn't get to shelter soon he'd be soaked to the bone and not worth a damn. Quickening his pace he pushed snow with his feet like some sled dog headed for his nightly chow...White Fang he wasn't, and he didn't know Jack about how he ended up on this road. His main thought was;denim and leather doesn't last with unforgiving weather. "what fucking road is this!?!" He shouted into the bleak, the winds sharing nothing but a chilly reply. He remembered seeing something like a flash of light and disorienting images of smoke, but the bump on his head says, there are key things missing from his fogged up memory banks. Lighting a smoke helped give him a bit for distraction from his plight. He lit his hand warmer as well,his father had given to him when he was just a child and he always had it on him in the winter months. The faux gold inlay stamped onto the silver finish always made his heart warm, he rubbed his fingers over it where the center was worn down from years of this practice, he stuffed it to the inside pocket and buttoned back up. A tree line made a ghostly shape as he rounded the bend. Maybe there will be a house up there I can call a cab from, or at least figure out where the hell I'm at . So strange he thought;to not know where he was, truly lost...
He curled his fingers tight in his denim pockets. The snow had been falling fast for hours. First, in thick fluffed cotton balls, then fast dense streaks pounding intense, whiting out any distant vision. The wind had just enough bite to icicle his stubble as he walked against it, a bit of rain below his nostrils. He loved being cold like this, he felt alive. But if he didn't get to shelter soon he'd be soaked to the bone and not worth a damn. Quickening his pace he pushed snow with his feet like some sled dog headed for his nightly chow...White Fang he wasn't, and he didn't know Jack about how he ended up on this road. His main thought was;denim and leather doesn't last with unforgiving weather. "what fucking road is this!?!" He shouted into the bleak, the winds sharing nothing but a chilly reply. He remembered seeing something like a flash of light and disorienting images of smoke, but the bump on his head says, there are key things missing from his fogged up memory banks. Lighting a smoke helped give him a bit for distraction from his plight. He lit his hand warmer as well,his father had given to him when he was just a child and he always had it on him in the winter months. The faux gold inlay stamped onto the silver finish always made his heart warm, he rubbed his fingers over it where the center was worn down from years of this practice, he stuffed it to the inside pocket and buttoned back up. A tree line made a ghostly shape as he rounded the bend. Maybe there will be a house up there I can call a cab from, or at least figure out where the hell I'm at . So strange he thought;to not know where he was, truly lost...
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souladareatease
Published 18th Sep 2013
| Edited 19th Sep 2013
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Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
18th Sep 2013 5:40am
I am sensing a character like Roland from Stephen King's Dark Tower series.
Looking forward to the next part.
Looking forward to the next part.
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19th Sep 2013 2:12pm
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18th Sep 2013 5:41am
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Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
18th Sep 2013 6:24am
Damn this is great writing!
*chanting* "We want more! We want more!" Xoxo
Pen On Gabe~
*chanting* "We want more! We want more!" Xoxo
Pen On Gabe~
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re: Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 2:14pm
Hehehehe hope i get more of it done soon...sigh-time it's elusive eh? Thank You Dear Rain:)))
Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
Anonymous
18th Sep 2013 6:31am
Oh, this is good. Setting the mood. Can hardly wait...
(might want to check the title, though...)
(might want to check the title, though...)
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re: Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 2:15pm
Awwww so sweet Thank You Dear Petit...yes well spelling is never a strong suit...but when looking through the cracks of my eyes-forget about it Lol:)))
re: re: Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 3:40pm
travel(ing) and travell(ing) are both acceptable spelling...so don't worry about it, Soul!
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Anonymous
20th Sep 2013 4:05am
It was Tavellling, hon...
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20th Sep 2013 2:07pm
...thats a cross between a tavern man and a travellin' Man ;) hehehehe Thank You again Dear Petit ;)
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20th Sep 2013 7:18pm
hehehe no she was right Engr...I was looking through the cracks in my eyes and wrote tavellin man ...forgetting the R ....if She hadn't said...i'd probably never notice hahaha (it was one of those one eye open one shut times ...waaaay past my bedtime lol :)
Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
18th Sep 2013 9:34am
So easy to become lost in total white out. Great start to your story Soul. Look forward to more.
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re: Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 2:16pm
Indeed...they are so alluring to me...i run in joy to them when they happen along, till i start freezing-Thank You Dear Magdalena:)
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18th Sep 2013 7:56pm
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re: Re: The Tavelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 2:19pm
Brooooooooomieeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Your too kind Dear...Thank You for joining along this journey-MUCH appreciated!!!!!
...started the next section...but damn where does time go???-it truly is mean at times!!!
Thank You :)
Your too kind Dear...Thank You for joining along this journey-MUCH appreciated!!!!!
...started the next section...but damn where does time go???-it truly is mean at times!!!
Thank You :)
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20th Sep 2013 7:25pm
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Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 3:36pm
Ahhh, the joy of travelling...not knowing what to expect on every blind curves. Nice imagery and the riffs that go with it. That piece would keep me awake while driving.
Rock on Soul...
Rock on Soul...
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re: Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
19th Sep 2013 4:18pm
It is a calling isnt it? Thank You for the kind words and Your time Engr!!!
Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
20th Sep 2013 5:54am
Soul this is a scary tale I can tell eagerly awaiting the next chapter.. great inking peace Crim :)
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re: Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
20th Sep 2013 2:10pm
:) Thank You Dear Crim...it may turn silly...one never knows with my short attention span hehehe Thank You for visiting...hopefully soon i'll have the next installment!!!
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20th Sep 2013 7:28pm
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re: Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
20th Sep 2013 7:32pm
Ha!!! You're too kind Broomie...and I have NOT forgotten Your tales Dear...time and energy has been fighting me...You may think differently by the second installment ;)
Toooo Kind!!!
Toooo Kind!!!
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20th Sep 2013 7:58pm
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20th Sep 2013 8:15pm
You Brat!!! You did???? UUUUUGH!!!!!!!!!!!
I was headed there ...like very soon...i'm working back my updates ...GRRRRRR
You Write good whatever You put Your mind to-I have seen it time and time again!!!!
Loves You to Brooomie!!!!!!
Broomie...You may like this one...I don't mean for Ya to comment...but it's more story-style of a poem...and based on Mexican legends/myth
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/123606-gone-golden/
I was headed there ...like very soon...i'm working back my updates ...GRRRRRR
You Write good whatever You put Your mind to-I have seen it time and time again!!!!
Loves You to Brooomie!!!!!!
Broomie...You may like this one...I don't mean for Ya to comment...but it's more story-style of a poem...and based on Mexican legends/myth
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/123606-gone-golden/
Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
22nd Sep 2013 4:52am
Damn, Soulman, your fiction is as good as your poetry. Nice showing ! Love the pun in "...White Fang he wasn't, and he didn't know Jack about how he ended up on this road" Very impressive work !
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re: Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
23rd Sep 2013 1:58am
Thanks for taking the time to read this tripe Sir!!
Still need a third part~Sigh
Still need a third part~Sigh
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Anonymous
23rd Sep 2013 6:08pm
Wow...a great write...I could identify with...to me it read like a person lost in the woods in Quebec in a blizzard....yes I know the feeling....you should be published...your talent is that good.....
Kitty
Kitty
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re: Re: The Travelling Man (part 1)
23rd Sep 2013 6:25pm
Thank You for such kind words Kitty:) (dont swell my head i'll never get in and out the door properly.
Greatly appreciate You stopping in:)))
Greatly appreciate You stopping in:)))