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THE FLIP SIDE
She said she loved the fall
The rain on the window
The long walks in the forest
The blankets by candlelight
She forgot to mention
The water curtain was to hide
That she only had the fireplace
To keep her warm inside
The rain on the window
The long walks in the forest
The blankets by candlelight
She forgot to mention
The water curtain was to hide
That she only had the fireplace
To keep her warm inside
Published 10th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
10th Sep 2013 7:41pm
Powerful impact in a small package.
I like your style.
I like your style.
10th Sep 2013 8:01pm
O..this piece just somehow pierced my heart...the twist in the conclusion is like a serrated shard of glass.
I truly appreciate the contrast in the emotions of this piece---the joy that is seemingly soo apparent on the surface,only hides the sadness. and the loneliness, within.
(perhaps, the 'water curtain'...her tears, and only the empty fire place--without the flames of love to warm the 'emptiness' inside her.)
Creatively Crafted! A lovely, poem, my Friend!
I truly appreciate the contrast in the emotions of this piece---the joy that is seemingly soo apparent on the surface,only hides the sadness. and the loneliness, within.
(perhaps, the 'water curtain'...her tears, and only the empty fire place--without the flames of love to warm the 'emptiness' inside her.)
Creatively Crafted! A lovely, poem, my Friend!
10th Sep 2013 9:44pm
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2013 7:31am
Another small masterpiece. Wonderfully written
12th Sep 2013 11:01pm
Anonymous
11th Sep 2013 7:55am
Always something hidden in your last lines, another intriguing one!
12th Sep 2013 11:02pm
12th Sep 2013 8:38pm
I love how some of your ink 'insist' that I read it twice to really feel it....Xo
12th Sep 2013 10:58pm
Glad to have your presence here again, my lady
It is not the same without ;-)
It is not the same without ;-)
