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Deceptive
Lies...
that soar
like sparrows,
moving through the wind
beneath their wings
carrying rumors
like a wanted virus,
becoming airborne
spreading recklessly
by dispirited people,
that smell of misery
consumed with odium
no longer pursuing...
happiness.
Let us witness
the death of deceit
by the hands of betrayal
exposed by,
truth.
that soar
like sparrows,
moving through the wind
beneath their wings
carrying rumors
like a wanted virus,
becoming airborne
spreading recklessly
by dispirited people,
that smell of misery
consumed with odium
no longer pursuing...
happiness.
Let us witness
the death of deceit
by the hands of betrayal
exposed by,
truth.
Published 20th Aug 2013
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20th Aug 2013 9:29pm
Golden, I love the imagery and the message. Truth is a cold executioner of deception! I hope you have more like that one coming to DUP!!! JJ
20th Aug 2013 10:17pm
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21st Aug 2013 2:52am
Welcome to DU! what a second piece to start out here with. Can't wait to read more. :)
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22nd Aug 2013 9:30am
This is really deep and food for thought. It is short and to the point but delivers a powerful message.
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Anonymous
25th Aug 2013 11:22pm
Very well written
A good read
Welcome to DUP New Member
Write on!
Kitty
A good read
Welcome to DUP New Member
Write on!
Kitty
29th Aug 2013 5:53am
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29th Aug 2013 5:55am
28th Aug 2013 11:23pm
Wonderful. Glad I found you. Hope you don' mind me following you straight away. No doubt about that: love your way of words.
And of course: welcome her on DUP ;-)
And of course: welcome her on DUP ;-)
29th Aug 2013 5:56am
29th Aug 2013 9:21pm
Couple of things detracted from the poem for me: I thought it got disproportionately heavy at the end, a bit like a manifesto. And I've seen swifts, swallows, martins, hawks and even seagulls soar, but never the frantic sparrow. I mean well.
I can see your struggles. Thanks for pointing out your distractions. I will try to make the descriptive flow clearer.
