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Five Star *
That noise when
it connects
it's like cracking a whip
It makes me
gasp
especially right after
Each point stings
filling me
with numbing tingles
That sensation when
my body
reaches stimulation
I accept his
five star
granting him power
it connects
it's like cracking a whip
It makes me
gasp
especially right after
Each point stings
filling me
with numbing tingles
That sensation when
my body
reaches stimulation
I accept his
five star
granting him power
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16th Aug 2013 5:46am
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23rd Aug 2013 3:29am
GOD I THINK IM IN LOVE SRRY TOMMIE COMMENTING IS THE ONLY WAY TO GET MY CREDITS I NEED YOU KNOW I LOVE YOU THOUGH FANTASTIC WORK BY THE WAY
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Anonymous
16th Aug 2013 2:06pm
tommie,
Good job of cracking the whip. I think my mind has been branded! ; ) Enjoyed...
tornado
Good job of cracking the whip. I think my mind has been branded! ; ) Enjoyed...
tornado
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Anonymous
17th Aug 2013 3:22am
nice little whack here tl...strider
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25th Aug 2013 5:52am
"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars" - Oscar Wilde
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Re: Five Star *
17th Dec 2013 9:14pm
u have just changed your clothes
and look fresh
if you can compose a poem
A FUCK IN A 5 STAR HOTEL
DO U KNOW
it will be eaten
and look fresh
if you can compose a poem
A FUCK IN A 5 STAR HOTEL
DO U KNOW
it will be eaten
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17th Dec 2013 9:41pm
why thanks
i read all mostly read ones
or max comments
a poetry not liked nor commented
is no poetry
so after some time
though so many have read
i'd remove them instead
i read all mostly read ones
or max comments
a poetry not liked nor commented
is no poetry
so after some time
though so many have read
i'd remove them instead
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