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And it was
It was, if but for a sleeping moment
a vision of a dream
and it was, it would seem; enough to awaken me again
to open my eyes
and breathe with conviction
I am me, I am alive
It was something, and it was nothing at all
not anything that could be worded
or painted onto a canvas
like all the other somethings and nothings
that have come and gone
or grown strong enough to live on indefinitely
it was beauty, like northern skies, taken
by pinks and cyan of Aurora borealis
each brief wave, electrifying, progressing to its peak
then dying out to make way for the next one
and it was something, really quite something
a vision of a dream
and it was, it would seem; enough to awaken me again
to open my eyes
and breathe with conviction
I am me, I am alive
It was something, and it was nothing at all
not anything that could be worded
or painted onto a canvas
like all the other somethings and nothings
that have come and gone
or grown strong enough to live on indefinitely
it was beauty, like northern skies, taken
by pinks and cyan of Aurora borealis
each brief wave, electrifying, progressing to its peak
then dying out to make way for the next one
and it was something, really quite something
Written by
lepperochan
(CraicDealer)
Published 27th Jul 2013
| Edited 25th Apr 2016
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Re: And it was
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Jul 2013 9:04am
27th Jul 2013 9:03am
I love the thought process in this very much. The questioning of an emotion, life itself perhaps. We never find out exactly what you are talking about, but I think that the fact it is open to interpretation is part of its charm. Hell, I'd love to do an audio reading of this. You've got the pauses in here just right I think.
By the way 'Aurora boras' is such a joyfully rhythmic phrase to say out loud.
Thank you for the read.
By the way 'Aurora boras' is such a joyfully rhythmic phrase to say out loud.
Thank you for the read.
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 9:13am
Missy,
wow, thank you for the words, very encouraging to read.
yeah, I like saying that myself, though most people these days say Northern lights, which incidentally I wouldn't mind taking a trip up the top of Scottyland to have a peep at.
as for the Audio, I'd be more than honored.
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your footprint.
wow, thank you for the words, very encouraging to read.
yeah, I like saying that myself, though most people these days say Northern lights, which incidentally I wouldn't mind taking a trip up the top of Scottyland to have a peep at.
as for the Audio, I'd be more than honored.
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your footprint.
Re: And it was
Anonymous
27th Jul 2013 9:22am
This was a wonderful read. Almost like something seen out of the corner of your eye. Not quite there in direct sight, but enough for you to take notice.
And just a short note: The Northern Lights as actually the Aurora Borealis.
And just a short note: The Northern Lights as actually the Aurora Borealis.
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 9:32am
Thank you, Petit one
I keep getting mixed up with the two, good catch, changed it over
yeah, I like that, kind of like them little white dots that sometimes appear in my eyes, when I try focus on them they go straight into the peripheral again.
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your words
I keep getting mixed up with the two, good catch, changed it over
yeah, I like that, kind of like them little white dots that sometimes appear in my eyes, when I try focus on them they go straight into the peripheral again.
thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your words
Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 9:59am
What a great read, leaving a wonderful
picture in my mind...enjoyed this very much!
picture in my mind...enjoyed this very much!
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 10:16am
Tommie,
ha, glad to hear it missus, not sure I wanna ask what wonderful picture was in your mind.
happy to have you drop by anytime, and thanks for the words
ha, glad to hear it missus, not sure I wanna ask what wonderful picture was in your mind.
happy to have you drop by anytime, and thanks for the words
Re: And it was
Anonymous
27th Jul 2013 11:17am
Classic Eamonn....uhhh Mr.Lepperochan!
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 8:09pm
Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 11:49am
This is like a half-wake musing, between reality and dreams, with some pretty images.
You could lose the last line in Stanza 3.
Lovely.
You could lose the last line in Stanza 3.
Lovely.
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 8:11pm
Atakti,
so glad you liked this little ditty, I think , on reflection that you're probably right about that line, I'll probably cut it out before the end of the day.
thanks for the stop by and the words kind Lady
so glad you liked this little ditty, I think , on reflection that you're probably right about that line, I'll probably cut it out before the end of the day.
thanks for the stop by and the words kind Lady
Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 3:58pm
Beautiful. I love how you leave the reader wondering what you're speaking of, as well as making it so the reader can emit their own personal experience into the piece. Great work, Eamonn!
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 8:13pm
Rachel, me ol' flower
I love that you love, and that you drop by here when you get a chance, and thank you for that, and for the words you leave.
cheers.
I love that you love, and that you drop by here when you get a chance, and thank you for that, and for the words you leave.
cheers.
Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 10:49pm
reminds me of these sudden blasts of consciousness that i get sometimes; they come for no reason i can tell, but they make you realise that you're here, now, present, and alive... i guess that's my experience, and it is exactly like nothing at all, but it's so... something. really well described for me. personal and relatable at the same time. good show, Eamonn. [:
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re: Re: And it was
27th Jul 2013 11:15pm
Jesta,
cool, you get it. It can be quite exhilarating when it happens, I'm happy you found it relatable.
delighted to see you drop by missus, thank you for the words, I appreciate it
cool, you get it. It can be quite exhilarating when it happens, I'm happy you found it relatable.
delighted to see you drop by missus, thank you for the words, I appreciate it
Re: And it was
Anonymous
27th Sep 2013 1:38am
I love how its nothing and yet its something and that something is exceptionally well portrayed.
I really enjoyed this read, simplicity at its best.
I really enjoyed this read, simplicity at its best.
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re: Re: And it was
27th Sep 2013 9:55pm
ah, Vee hullo
Thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts. this piece of madness is among my favorites
Happy you enjoyed it, after all that's a lot of what it's all about for me, my thoughts being enjoyed.
Thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts. this piece of madness is among my favorites
Happy you enjoyed it, after all that's a lot of what it's all about for me, my thoughts being enjoyed.
Re: And it was
30th Oct 2013 10:33am