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Gay Pride
We are not idiots,
If we mean we are odds,
With our top buttons closed,
Not for our neck-ties.
We kiss each other,
And we hug each other,
And we fuck each other.
But we are-
Campy lampoons,
Of human existence,
Born sick,
In our sub-consciousness,
Like a dead child,
Wishing for day-light,
Trapped inside,
A biology machine,
Called womb.
Why then we march for?
Unlike justice & sympathy,
To those ill fated cowards,
Dressed in black,
Holding candles straight
And engaged in forums,
To vote for, to fight for,
And to satisfy their ego,
Because they did nothing,
For their dear ones killed,
When they were sleeping,
Like a baby unaware-
That the parents are playing.
We are not idiots,
If we mean we are odds,
With our top buttons closed,
Not for our neck-ties.
This one is a poem that finally talks about serious issues. After talking and writing about love for sometime, I have again focused my attention to the seriousness of this diversity which just not needs attention but requires a casual and ordinary status in the society. It was difficult for me getting into the skin of a gay character that gets tense and talks in anguish. So I have used a different language that suits the character and have not fixed it as a male or female protagonist. It is a poem of all genders that truly deserves to be assertive in its explanation of the problem,
If we mean we are odds,
With our top buttons closed,
Not for our neck-ties.
We kiss each other,
And we hug each other,
And we fuck each other.
But we are-
Campy lampoons,
Of human existence,
Born sick,
In our sub-consciousness,
Like a dead child,
Wishing for day-light,
Trapped inside,
A biology machine,
Called womb.
Why then we march for?
Unlike justice & sympathy,
To those ill fated cowards,
Dressed in black,
Holding candles straight
And engaged in forums,
To vote for, to fight for,
And to satisfy their ego,
Because they did nothing,
For their dear ones killed,
When they were sleeping,
Like a baby unaware-
That the parents are playing.
We are not idiots,
If we mean we are odds,
With our top buttons closed,
Not for our neck-ties.
This one is a poem that finally talks about serious issues. After talking and writing about love for sometime, I have again focused my attention to the seriousness of this diversity which just not needs attention but requires a casual and ordinary status in the society. It was difficult for me getting into the skin of a gay character that gets tense and talks in anguish. So I have used a different language that suits the character and have not fixed it as a male or female protagonist. It is a poem of all genders that truly deserves to be assertive in its explanation of the problem,
Published 7th Dec 2010
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7th Dec 2010 1:21pm
you encapsulated the character perfectly !
"Like a dead child,
Wishing for day-light,
Trapped inside,
A biology machine,
Called womb. my favourite line
"Like a dead child,
Wishing for day-light,
Trapped inside,
A biology machine,
Called womb. my favourite line
8th Dec 2010 11:29am
If I did it then I am the happier man...and you made me happy. Thank you very much for reading this debative work of mine and critically appraising the same:-)
9th Dec 2010 10:07pm
"Because they did nothing,
For their dear ones killed,
When they were sleeping,
Like a baby unaware-
That the parents are playing."
I like that line, and the one opheliac mentioned.
On the whole it's certainly interesting. I'm not sure what the culture is like near you, but anti-gay rights supporters in my area tend to focus solely on the sex side of things. As such, if I were writing it for my neck of the woods I'd probably take out the "fuck" reference, but it's certainly not a necessary change.
For their dear ones killed,
When they were sleeping,
Like a baby unaware-
That the parents are playing."
I like that line, and the one opheliac mentioned.
On the whole it's certainly interesting. I'm not sure what the culture is like near you, but anti-gay rights supporters in my area tend to focus solely on the sex side of things. As such, if I were writing it for my neck of the woods I'd probably take out the "fuck" reference, but it's certainly not a necessary change.
10th Dec 2010 11:18am
Indeed! Quite thought provoking and I was not very sure of posting the same. But then I though that such a complex issue should require some insights from the talented ones like you in this site so that my efforts does not goes into vain. Even though there are different perspectives to this work of mine and every reader should have the acute liberty in interpreting this work of mine in their very own way, but I have tried to speak from the skin of a gay, which I am not, and therefore is a challenge for me, and I tested the literature from another skin to focus on the frustrations of the character. Thank you for joining the bandwagon and sharing your insights.
17th Dec 2010 11:04am
interesting poem and quite thought provoking, i really like how you brought in the line "With our top buttons closed,Not for our neck-ties" in the first and second stanza. i also like'd how you used the word 'fuck', it's a powerful word and this is a powerful poem.
i particulary likes how you yourself tried to put yourself in the gay mans shoes,trying to write from his view. great work anandosen :)
i particulary likes how you yourself tried to put yourself in the gay mans shoes,trying to write from his view. great work anandosen :)
17th Dec 2010 11:35am
Thanks a lot Sarah for particularly reading this debative piece of mine and reflecting your thoughts. I was not very much sure about publishing it but then one of my fellow friend really took the pains to read it, and motivated me to do the same. At the first glance, it might surpass an ordinary reader and I was very much afraid of that. The script is complex and each and every line until and unless read twice or thrice might evoke some confusion. But then I am really glad that you read it and given me a thumbs up. I am feeling quite at the top of the world.
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