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Tomorrow
tomorrow
I want you
to play with me
I wish you'd
do with me
anything you want
I very much love
to effectively ride you
when place is precarious
and time scarce
but as we'll have plenty of it
tomorrow
please
conquer me slowly
with your eyes
and lips
your hands
and tool
I'd love
your body
to besiege mine
my sighs and cries
will guide you
along the path
of surrender
I want you
to play with me
I wish you'd
do with me
anything you want
I very much love
to effectively ride you
when place is precarious
and time scarce
but as we'll have plenty of it
tomorrow
please
conquer me slowly
with your eyes
and lips
your hands
and tool
I'd love
your body
to besiege mine
my sighs and cries
will guide you
along the path
of surrender
Published 16th Jul 2013
| Edited 17th Jul 2013
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16th Jul 2013 11:40pm
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17th Jul 2013 3:49am
Happy you love it, Bliss. Thanks a lot for your nice comment and the entry in your reading list! I feel honored!
17th Jul 2013 6:49am
An encouraging come on to the man. I liked the progression of way the woman wants to be taken in.
17th Jul 2013 9:16am
Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Solomon. I much appreciate it since you're undoubtedly a master of the erotic genre.
Anonymous
17th Jul 2013 3:16pm
Chiyo,
Nothing like enjoying a slow, sensuous stroll down the path of surrender! ; ) So, is it tomorrow yet.......very erotic write!
tornado
Nothing like enjoying a slow, sensuous stroll down the path of surrender! ; ) So, is it tomorrow yet.......very erotic write!
tornado
Thanks a lot, your comment is very welcome, tornado! Yes, it's tomorrow yet. But hopefully there will be some more tomorrows :-).
17th Jul 2013 6:07pm
Mmmmm so sensually superbly scripted
Seriously made my mouth salivate :) outstanding!
Seriously made my mouth salivate :) outstanding!
17th Jul 2013 8:01pm
Those saliva dripping words from your lips make me blush, dear Poetikmind. I feel deeply honored!
Chi
Chi
Anonymous
18th Jul 2013 10:55pm
Wonderful sensuality in this beautifully expressed poem, Iris. Lovely work, as always!
*Peace* Carlene
*Peace* Carlene
18th Jul 2013 11:34pm
Your comment is very much appreaciated, Carlene! Thanks a lot! I'm glad you like it!
Anonymous
25th Jul 2013 5:23pm
"your body, to besiege mine"..excellent choice of words. The act of love compared with a siege, so fitting, with the final act one of surrender! Very nice, well done! Prima! Mike
25th Jul 2013 9:19pm
Hi Mike, Thank you very much for your encouraging and lovely words! Much appreciated! The 'prima' is nice :-), too!
13th Aug 2013 9:40am
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11th Sep 2013 3:54am
So sensuous flow and anticipation; want so perfect. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you.
11th Sep 2013 7:49am
I have to thank you, jakehammer for the read and the kind comment! I appreciate it and am honored!
5th Dec 2013 10:03pm
Sweets this is HOT!!!!
Awesome lil piece sweets!!
Truly enjoyed!!!
Sir Lancelott
Awesome lil piece sweets!!
Truly enjoyed!!!
Sir Lancelott
5th Dec 2013 10:05pm
27th Dec 2013 1:02pm
My dear Ms Chi. I kept thinking I had I favourite slice. I don't. I want it all. And it leaves me wanting more. But then you tend to do that. You are simply pleasure Lady. Thank you yet again. xo
27th Dec 2013 1:05pm
Then we're alike, dear Twitch. I too want it all. No slices, no crumbs. I think you feel me and I can assure you that your poems have the same effect on me. So I have to thank YOU.
28th Dec 2013 2:04am
7th Jan 2014 9:20pm
the eroticity in this poetry
indicates the slow cumming down
of a serpent
from spine to intertwine
with juices sweeter than wine
hope together
then both of you dance and dine
as both cums combine
like red super wine in exoticity may you shine
indicates the slow cumming down
of a serpent
from spine to intertwine
with juices sweeter than wine
hope together
then both of you dance and dine
as both cums combine
like red super wine in exoticity may you shine
7th Jan 2014 10:07pm
Superb, your poem on Tomorrow. Erotic and seducing are your lines. I will read them ... again and again.
Thank your very much for your time, your welcome thoughts and your lovely poem-comment!
Thank your very much for your time, your welcome thoughts and your lovely poem-comment!
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