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A State of Mind
My mind is in a mirror house,
Unable to see the real thing because I lost clarity.
Running down hallways trying to find my destiny,
Makes me feel like Scooby Doo chasing after mysteries.
Air being leak from my balloon as I run to a snail pace,
Looking around for patches that can put me back into the race.
Chest was beating like Sonic, but now at a hop scotch game.
Now knowing game is leading me to a path of shame.
Jump start the gun, now I been put in delay,
I tried to resume, but couldn't press play.
Finally able to run the beach
The goal I been aiming for is now in reach.
When the sand start to betray me
I see my heavy foot start to sink me.
Don’t know what to do now cause I’m falling apart.
I should had went and got help from the very start.
But it too late now and I don’t have any other choice,
But to lie down and stay down to life run its course.
I opened my eyes and realize it was just a dream,
I thank God for bringing me back to reality.
For allow me to see the many paths he opened for me.
For allowing me to skip to my own beat.
For giving me the endurance to climb out of anything.
I...now move to a better me.
Unable to see the real thing because I lost clarity.
Running down hallways trying to find my destiny,
Makes me feel like Scooby Doo chasing after mysteries.
Air being leak from my balloon as I run to a snail pace,
Looking around for patches that can put me back into the race.
Chest was beating like Sonic, but now at a hop scotch game.
Now knowing game is leading me to a path of shame.
Jump start the gun, now I been put in delay,
I tried to resume, but couldn't press play.
Finally able to run the beach
The goal I been aiming for is now in reach.
When the sand start to betray me
I see my heavy foot start to sink me.
Don’t know what to do now cause I’m falling apart.
I should had went and got help from the very start.
But it too late now and I don’t have any other choice,
But to lie down and stay down to life run its course.
I opened my eyes and realize it was just a dream,
I thank God for bringing me back to reality.
For allow me to see the many paths he opened for me.
For allowing me to skip to my own beat.
For giving me the endurance to climb out of anything.
I...now move to a better me.
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Re: A State of Mind
Anonymous
26th Jun 2013 7:25pm
Life...trying to find ourselves, lost
in a chaotic world, and yet in the end
survived with the strength from above.
Love this line:Makes me feel like Scooby Doo chasing after mysteries.
Made me smile, Scooby is my favorite
cartoon:)
in a chaotic world, and yet in the end
survived with the strength from above.
Love this line:Makes me feel like Scooby Doo chasing after mysteries.
Made me smile, Scooby is my favorite
cartoon:)
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Wot I Think
27th Jun 2013 3:23am
Usually people vomit out their most angst ridden shlock during their first go, but I'm glad to say that you surprised me and instead wrote a cute, interesting little ditty. I felt that the rhyming took precedence over the content during some sections and that a couple of the pop culture references were a bit forced but overall a thoroughly entertaining read.
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Re: A State of Mind
27th Jun 2013 11:05am
This has a kinda nice flow, slightly jagged in areas but overall not bad... Decent for a first post :)
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Re: A State of Mind
Anonymous
11th Sep 2013 2:08pm
Welcome to DU! I think this is a great start. The road to ones self is often the longest to run. :)
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11th Sep 2013 2:10pm
Welcome to DUP--enjoy the ride, the comments, and lessons to be learned on your road to a better you! :)
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11th Sep 2013 2:40pm
Thank you. Life get a little easier when you can accept the fact the road is not away smooth, but when get to your destination it was worth it.
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Re: A State of Mind
24th Sep 2013 7:55pm
Sorry I diss you
I thought you were
In my league the name
My style and still novice
My apologies you ain't ready
I'll take it back to def★2
No threat of a ink war
I thought you were
In my league the name
My style and still novice
My apologies you ain't ready
I'll take it back to def★2
No threat of a ink war
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re: Re: A State of Mind
Well this novice thank you
Refine is not my mind
Re-fried may be my mind
so I'll take my time
Refine what is this
Unleashed Mind
so again I thank you
No need to apologies
it shows you see big
thing in me in your
RefineminD
Refine is not my mind
Re-fried may be my mind
so I'll take my time
Refine what is this
Unleashed Mind
so again I thank you
No need to apologies
it shows you see big
thing in me in your
RefineminD