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Two Souls...
I don't believe in
two bodies as a soul!
We were being
two souls as a single body!
The darkness serves as our light!
I hunted you and
You hunted me!
You were my prey
and me yours!
We won't allow the time to eat us.
Let we eat each other!
two bodies as a soul!
We were being
two souls as a single body!
The darkness serves as our light!
I hunted you and
You hunted me!
You were my prey
and me yours!
We won't allow the time to eat us.
Let we eat each other!
Published 10th Nov 2010
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10th Nov 2010 8:33pm
Just a few pointers (as I'm feeling egostical and patriarchal) but I mouldn't use all the exclamation marks if I were you. I'd maybe change "Let we eat other!" to 'Lest we eat each other!'. But other than that tis nice and deep.
11th Nov 2010 1:31am
20th Oct 2012 2:20pm
I love this line "The darkness serves as our light!" It somehow sets the mood for the next two lines. ... wonderful poem!
