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Set Sail
I could have my feet in the sand
and my toes kissing the water
with the open sky greeting me
everyday
That salty wind blowing through
brushing up against my perfectly
tanned skin as the sun highlights
my golden hair
Hearing the rush of the ocean,
feeling every wave, catching
sprays of water on me as I
relax and sail
The Cape was a great place to
be, I'll go back one day and set
sail again, I hear the water
flooding my ears, calling to
me
and my toes kissing the water
with the open sky greeting me
everyday
That salty wind blowing through
brushing up against my perfectly
tanned skin as the sun highlights
my golden hair
Hearing the rush of the ocean,
feeling every wave, catching
sprays of water on me as I
relax and sail
The Cape was a great place to
be, I'll go back one day and set
sail again, I hear the water
flooding my ears, calling to
me
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23rd May 2013 4:39pm
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23rd May 2013 4:40pm
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23rd May 2013 4:09pm
This was a nice lil escape, n I love the thought of that sailing! Just be safe when you go lady, we need you here
on DU! lol
on DU! lol
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23rd May 2013 4:41pm
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Anonymous
23rd May 2013 5:27pm
tommielynn,
Mmmmm...love it when you talk nautical ; ) It's good to have dreams!
tornado
Mmmmm...love it when you talk nautical ; ) It's good to have dreams!
tornado
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re: Re: Set Sail
23rd May 2013 5:43pm
Ahoy matey,
That be a fair comment!Grab the helm and
prepare to laveer!!
Thanks tornado ...Arrrrr ;)
That be a fair comment!Grab the helm and
prepare to laveer!!
Thanks tornado ...Arrrrr ;)
Re: Set Sail
Anonymous
23rd May 2013 6:06pm
Nice write tl...used to do some myself...back in the day...in the islands!
strider...
strider...
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23rd May 2013 9:23pm
Re: Set Sail
23rd May 2013 9:00pm
I really liked this poem. I loved your language that you used and I liked your sense of imagery. I also like your use of high diction. In other words I liked how you used words that anyone could understand. Great poem, keep on writing.
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23rd May 2013 9:54pm
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24th May 2013 10:11pm
Could visualise the central character. Recalling the famous pics of Princess Diana's last boating holiday in 1997, that could have been written by her about herself.
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24th May 2013 10:25pm