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Rapture
you spiked me
I wanted more
we leaned into
each others lines
fitting perfectly
swaying in directions
of sweet lustful bliss
flesh amongst flesh
you mixed with me
tempting each craving
how exciting to feel
your push and pulls
I stand on tippy toes
in your rapture
holding onto your
firmness with my desire
you wanted more
giving and taking
receiving the pleasures
of our yearning
our bodies becoming
intensely strong
consuming and binding
until numbness took
over, capturing us
we lay woven as one unit
I wanted more
we leaned into
each others lines
fitting perfectly
swaying in directions
of sweet lustful bliss
flesh amongst flesh
you mixed with me
tempting each craving
how exciting to feel
your push and pulls
I stand on tippy toes
in your rapture
holding onto your
firmness with my desire
you wanted more
giving and taking
receiving the pleasures
of our yearning
our bodies becoming
intensely strong
consuming and binding
until numbness took
over, capturing us
we lay woven as one unit
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23rd May 2013 11:13pm
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24th May 2013 00:02am
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24th May 2013 00:08am
Me too...and I love not standing on my own...
that's wicked fun! ;)
thanks girl! :)))
that's wicked fun! ;)
thanks girl! :)))
Re: Rapture
24th May 2013 4:21am
Nicely done poem. The only word I don't like is "unit," because in the poem there is a back/forth, up/down movement, which is quite sensual, as is your picture. "Unit" reminds me of the military or part of an equation in algebra.
Remarkable consistency. Thank you for sharing this with me.
Remarkable consistency. Thank you for sharing this with me.
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24th May 2013 11:46am
I wasn't sure about using unit...but I did, I see what you mean.Thanks for reading and commenting. :)
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Anonymous
24th May 2013 4:24am
Well done tl...liked this one.
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24th May 2013 11:47am
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24th May 2013 6:24am
Very sexy!
I particularly like:
"swaying in directions
of sweet lustful bliss
flesh amongst flesh."
I particularly like:
"swaying in directions
of sweet lustful bliss
flesh amongst flesh."
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24th May 2013 11:48am
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24th May 2013 10:01pm
"one unit" - I (more Biblically) read as "one flesh". Good description of the way to get there, without being explicitly anatomical (apart from the toes).
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24th May 2013 10:22pm