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What He Does To Me
The feelings that run through my body when I'm around him
it's like electric sparks shooting inside of me turning me on
Then he comes close to me as if he wants to grab me and lay
me down on the floor and ravage me anyway he can
But he doesn't touch me he just stands there and stares at me at
my breathing he watches my pulse in my neck throbbing to a beat
My voice whispers for him to touch me put his hands somewhere
anywhere on my body make the sparks become bolts of lightning
Reaching for my waist I sigh this is what I've been waiting for his
touch holding me tightly so I know how bad he wants me
Locking his arms around me he pulls me close to him and I gasp
from the jolt feeling his stiff cock against me wanting to come out
My full lips begging to be kissed by his soft mouth he leans down
and kisses me our mouths sucking each others lips and tongues
He pulls my pants off and rubs himself up and down my naked
bottom half then rips my blouse open sending buttons everywhere
Not wasting any time I undo his jeans and in one swoop his cock
is free and very happy ready to dive into my dripping wet pool
He spins me around and curves our bodies into one holding me
to him our skin warm his breathing touching my neck tickles
Grabbing a fistfull of my hair me pushes me down with one hand
as his other hand fondles my drenched pussy he moans with pleasure
Backing myself into him wanting his cock deep inside me he let's
go of my hair and gets on his knees grabs my ass cheeks and sighs
Shoving his face into my succulent sweetness licking me from front
to back not leaving a single spot untouched by his incredible tongue
Close to gushing I reach for his head and hold him as he swiftly
flicks and sucks every bit of cum from my convulsing body
Back on his feet he jams his cock inside my pulsing hole thrusting
hard and deep as I hold my ass up high for him to watch and enjoy
Making me scream his name into the bed as he fucks me deeper
knowing I'm going to cum on his cock as he shoots his load in me
Shouting one anothers names from pleasure and cumming at
the same time we finally lay together in our nakedness peacefully
No words are spoken we lay plugged into one another feeling
our flesh touch and listening to our breathing as we fall asleep
it's like electric sparks shooting inside of me turning me on
Then he comes close to me as if he wants to grab me and lay
me down on the floor and ravage me anyway he can
But he doesn't touch me he just stands there and stares at me at
my breathing he watches my pulse in my neck throbbing to a beat
My voice whispers for him to touch me put his hands somewhere
anywhere on my body make the sparks become bolts of lightning
Reaching for my waist I sigh this is what I've been waiting for his
touch holding me tightly so I know how bad he wants me
Locking his arms around me he pulls me close to him and I gasp
from the jolt feeling his stiff cock against me wanting to come out
My full lips begging to be kissed by his soft mouth he leans down
and kisses me our mouths sucking each others lips and tongues
He pulls my pants off and rubs himself up and down my naked
bottom half then rips my blouse open sending buttons everywhere
Not wasting any time I undo his jeans and in one swoop his cock
is free and very happy ready to dive into my dripping wet pool
He spins me around and curves our bodies into one holding me
to him our skin warm his breathing touching my neck tickles
Grabbing a fistfull of my hair me pushes me down with one hand
as his other hand fondles my drenched pussy he moans with pleasure
Backing myself into him wanting his cock deep inside me he let's
go of my hair and gets on his knees grabs my ass cheeks and sighs
Shoving his face into my succulent sweetness licking me from front
to back not leaving a single spot untouched by his incredible tongue
Close to gushing I reach for his head and hold him as he swiftly
flicks and sucks every bit of cum from my convulsing body
Back on his feet he jams his cock inside my pulsing hole thrusting
hard and deep as I hold my ass up high for him to watch and enjoy
Making me scream his name into the bed as he fucks me deeper
knowing I'm going to cum on his cock as he shoots his load in me
Shouting one anothers names from pleasure and cumming at
the same time we finally lay together in our nakedness peacefully
No words are spoken we lay plugged into one another feeling
our flesh touch and listening to our breathing as we fall asleep
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Re: What He Does To Me
12th Apr 2013 8:56pm
Your first verse has an electric note, as has the last, especially the line: No words are spoken we lay plugged into one another. Reminds one of the way the terms "male" and "female ends" are used about electric plugs.
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12th Apr 2013 9:39pm
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12th Apr 2013 10:53pm
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12th Apr 2013 11:38pm
Fuck you're good. :-) The only thing I'd change is "he don't touch me" to "he doesn't touch me." P.S. where were you when I was single? ;-)
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12th Apr 2013 11:48pm
Your right that sounds better your way :)
What year were you single..I'll tell you where I was! ;)
What year were you single..I'll tell you where I was! ;)
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13th Apr 2013 00:14am
lol, don't be sorry. Just giving you a hard time. I wouldn't expect anyone to pick that up. Prétell, how old were you way back then?
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13th Apr 2013 00:29am
well, there you go. It's "the Cabin" in an alternate universe. BTW, you've inspired me. Will most likely write something tonight that is down and dirty. It won't be as good as your stuff, but I can dream can't I?
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13th Apr 2013 00:32am
Oh great I can't wait to read it....
And thank you very much...;) I'm so happy I have inspired you :)
And thank you very much...;) I'm so happy I have inspired you :)
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13th Apr 2013 1:14am
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13th Apr 2013 7:01am
The first word that comes to mind is: intense! I love how you set up the beginning, how before he even touches her his intent gaze is strong enough to even see her pulse. The theme of electricity was brilliant; I really felt it built up and as soon as they touch, it conducts! Speaking of which, I bet it had no trouble conducting because the woman is wet! Using words like "dripping," "gushing" and "drenched" really made it hot! I'm partial to going down so I particularly enjoyed that section. The part that follows is equally naughty though, you use such description that it's almost like watching (and hearing)! The sweet ending is awesome though, the tenderness really wraps things up nicely and leaves the reader hot, bothered and feeling good! I LOVE the "plugged in" line: it's a unique way to describe it, very intimate and in keeping with the electric theme. I enjoyed reading the references throughout like "bolts of lightning," "sparks" and "jolt." This is an amazing work in so many ways, Tommie, it's very sexy and naughty, yet with clever writing and a sweet ending. I love it, nice writing!
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13th Apr 2013 7:18am
Deepest_Fantasy,
I've had my pulse beat so strongly before and wasn't touched...at all!There's a great feeling as it's happening, heart race's, stomach flutters, and I never got touched!Just words were spoken...it was pretty amazing!
Thank you for your kind words..You know I like it when you comment ;-)
I've had my pulse beat so strongly before and wasn't touched...at all!There's a great feeling as it's happening, heart race's, stomach flutters, and I never got touched!Just words were spoken...it was pretty amazing!
Thank you for your kind words..You know I like it when you comment ;-)
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13th Apr 2013 7:24am
I know that EXACT feeling you are talking about, the pinnacle of excitement. It's a rare feeling (for me anyways) but always so amazing to experience. Usually it can only happen with something spontaneous and in the monent, but what a moment!
You're welcome, you know I enjoy reading ;)
You're welcome, you know I enjoy reading ;)
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13th Apr 2013 7:31am
So true, the moment was spontaneous and happened so quick ...I believe that intensified everything!!
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Anonymous
13th Apr 2013 8:09am
Great imagery tl...strider.
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15th Apr 2013 3:22am
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16th Apr 2013 00:04am
So naughty, n so nice! Lol pulsating n steamy inking! Vey nicely done lady :)
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