Poetry competition CLOSED 22nd February 2013 3:04pm
WINNER
kriticool
kriticool
RUNNER-UP:
Grace
When you..I feel
Anonymous
Poetry Contest Description
10 lines, 1 entry per poet, no collabs, more details and example below-1 week, no extensions
10 lines
5 lines that begin with "when you.."
5 lines that begin with "I feel"
Alternate the lines
Example:
When you turn away
I feel so all alone
When you turn off your emotions
I feel shattered and icy cold
When you let your lips leak lies
I feel betrayed and beaten down
When you treat me like an enemy
I feel I can't get up from down
When you look at me with vacant eyes
I feel myself dissolve and die
Hope this will be enjoyable, any questions-inbox me!
5 lines that begin with "when you.."
5 lines that begin with "I feel"
Alternate the lines
Example:
When you turn away
I feel so all alone
When you turn off your emotions
I feel shattered and icy cold
When you let your lips leak lies
I feel betrayed and beaten down
When you treat me like an enemy
I feel I can't get up from down
When you look at me with vacant eyes
I feel myself dissolve and die
Hope this will be enjoyable, any questions-inbox me!
Anonymous
When you touch me
I feel nothing in these awkward days,
when you kiss me
I feel lost in a thousand empty ways.
When you pour salt into my wounds
I feel the sting that I crave;
when you drag me out to sea
I feel like drowning below the waves.
When you touch me
I feel. Nothing.
I feel nothing in these awkward days,
when you kiss me
I feel lost in a thousand empty ways.
When you pour salt into my wounds
I feel the sting that I crave;
when you drag me out to sea
I feel like drowning below the waves.
When you touch me
I feel. Nothing.
When you materalise
I feel , through my eyes
when you are in full connection
I feel emotional perfection
when you speak , through your hands
I feel all there is to understand
when you lie with me
I feel security
when you are yourself
I feel no more hell .
I feel , through my eyes
when you are in full connection
I feel emotional perfection
when you speak , through your hands
I feel all there is to understand
when you lie with me
I feel security
when you are yourself
I feel no more hell .
Anonymous
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When you exceed the accepted levels of lunacy,
I feel that the Moon Tide Regulatory Committee
ought to suspend the service to your valves
until the normal craziness of ladies,
returns.
Like,
when you say its all gravy, and that you're not possessive, or jealous
I feel that you should fucking mean it
and not just think it sounds good.
As for example,
when you ask who Kate is, and why she liked my Facebook post,
I feel like a bit of child, and resent you for caring.
When you post that flirtsy picture, in your new dress, with that subtle pout in your lips
I feel that Bill liked it because you're sexy
and
when you say "oh no, Bills just a friend"
I feel like you're full of shit
because friendly or not
Bill wants to fuck you
and
thats fine and dandy,
because you do look great in that dress
I feel that the Moon Tide Regulatory Committee
ought to suspend the service to your valves
until the normal craziness of ladies,
returns.
Like,
when you say its all gravy, and that you're not possessive, or jealous
I feel that you should fucking mean it
and not just think it sounds good.
As for example,
when you ask who Kate is, and why she liked my Facebook post,
I feel like a bit of child, and resent you for caring.
When you post that flirtsy picture, in your new dress, with that subtle pout in your lips
I feel that Bill liked it because you're sexy
and
when you say "oh no, Bills just a friend"
I feel like you're full of shit
because friendly or not
Bill wants to fuck you
and
thats fine and dandy,
because you do look great in that dress
Anonymous
Great start, very pleased! Thank's to the first 3 entrants!!! Keep them coming!
Anonymous
oops, forgive me--I typed that before yours appeared lightbaron..thanks for your entry ;-)
Anonymous
On a different note, the contest rules state that 10 lines, 5 of each start are required, so-as much as your write is very intriguing, I can't consider it as a valid entry. No hard feelings I hope, ;-)
When you descend into the shadows
I feel the darkness of my loss
When you blow cold winds onto my lips
I feel the ice coat and crack the surface
When you kiss the lids of my eyes
I feel the weight of you blinding me
When you whisper haunting syllables
I feel my heart bleed between the lines
When you leave only silence in my waking day
I feel myself crumble into the emptiness
I feel the darkness of my loss
When you blow cold winds onto my lips
I feel the ice coat and crack the surface
When you kiss the lids of my eyes
I feel the weight of you blinding me
When you whisper haunting syllables
I feel my heart bleed between the lines
When you leave only silence in my waking day
I feel myself crumble into the emptiness
( I can tell lb cares I can see it in his smile, just saying)
When you try and listen to me
I feel the empty stare that blank look
When you say those words I long to hear
I feel nothing
When you kiss me on my corpse cheek
I feel cold and lonely disgusted
When you feel the need to love me
I feel the need to protect myself and run
When you want me
I feel like dying I can't do this anymore just listen to my heart!!
When you try and listen to me
I feel the empty stare that blank look
When you say those words I long to hear
I feel nothing
When you kiss me on my corpse cheek
I feel cold and lonely disgusted
When you feel the need to love me
I feel the need to protect myself and run
When you want me
I feel like dying I can't do this anymore just listen to my heart!!
Anonymous
All great entries- thank's!
Anonymous
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