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Poems written by Top Critiquers
Vision_of_insanity
Published
Yesterday 9:24pm
Yesterday 9:24pm
TAG, YOU'RE IT! (collaboration with Lilliputian)
They played a fierce game of tag all of their lives
From as far back to childhood through to their later years in life
Tag you're it
Now, tag you're it!
The game was harmless, but both were eager to tag the other throughout their lives
Even when they were married & had families, the game went on
One of them fell ill a few years back
Even so, wheelchair bound and sick, he would tag his friend gleefully, like he did for over 70 years
His friend was saddened but thought he'd bounce back
He never did
While in the hospital on his deathbed, he...
From as far back to childhood through to their later years in life
Tag you're it
Now, tag you're it!
The game was harmless, but both were eager to tag the other throughout their lives
Even when they were married & had families, the game went on
One of them fell ill a few years back
Even so, wheelchair bound and sick, he would tag his friend gleefully, like he did for over 70 years
His friend was saddened but thought he'd bounce back
He never did
While in the hospital on his deathbed, he...
#dark
#death
#friendship
#ghosts
#ShortStory
36 reads
8 Comments
DamianDeadLove
Published
26th Jan 2025 9:16am
26th Jan 2025 9:16am
Bad Choices
Does it drive you mad deep inside?
Knowing that I read through the lies
It’s your tone the suggestion implied
As darkness slowly claims your eyes
Eventually the wheels fall off the car
Tired engine sputters going nowhere
Too busy wishing on some falling star
Always present but never really there
Never wrote a word to those songs
Lent my mind recorded some voices
Putting focus back where it belongs
You kill your music with bad choices
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2025
Knowing that I read through the lies
It’s your tone the suggestion implied
As darkness slowly claims your eyes
Eventually the wheels fall off the car
Tired engine sputters going nowhere
Too busy wishing on some falling star
Always present but never really there
Never wrote a word to those songs
Lent my mind recorded some voices
Putting focus back where it belongs
You kill your music with bad choices
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2025
#disappointment
82 reads
18 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Published
Yesterday 00:33am
Yesterday 00:33am
Top Shelf pt 3 (Twist and Final)
#BDSM
#dirty
#lust
#sex
#sexy
127 reads
11 Comments
Her
Published
Yesterday 1:47am
Yesterday 1:47am
Rewriting My Story (revised)
Mmmm, mmmm
I’m leaving my past and what became of me
I’m chasing the light and what’s calling me
Watch me
Mmmm
I’m turning the page and rewriting my story
Mmmm
A new dawn breaks, my skies are clear
I’m wiping my tears with my fear
Step by step I’m moving on
Old days fade I’m moving on
Mmmm, mmmm
I’m turning the page and rewriting my story
I’m breaking chains, there’s no more ties to pain
Every choice, every stride
No more living in shadows, no more reason to hide
Spreading...
I’m leaving my past and what became of me
I’m chasing the light and what’s calling me
Watch me
Mmmm
I’m turning the page and rewriting my story
Mmmm
A new dawn breaks, my skies are clear
I’m wiping my tears with my fear
Step by step I’m moving on
Old days fade I’m moving on
Mmmm, mmmm
I’m turning the page and rewriting my story
I’m breaking chains, there’s no more ties to pain
Every choice, every stride
No more living in shadows, no more reason to hide
Spreading...
#hope
#lyrics
#TimeHeals
62 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Published
Today 2:17am
Today 2:17am
Death Metal Man
an enticing man, puts me under a spell
his music entrances
throbbing rhythm gets into my soul
God, Rob Zomb what you do
I can feel the magic cast
entertaining madness, I slip into the zone
with a witchiness of my own
stir the winds and the darkness
provoking demons with my lust
just out of reach, they can't touch
illiciting desire they crave
wicked little imagination
envisioning riding him
his power undeniable
hypnotising my soul
enchanted I follow the airs, to where he is
achingly...
his music entrances
throbbing rhythm gets into my soul
God, Rob Zomb what you do
I can feel the magic cast
entertaining madness, I slip into the zone
with a witchiness of my own
stir the winds and the darkness
provoking demons with my lust
just out of reach, they can't touch
illiciting desire they crave
wicked little imagination
envisioning riding him
his power undeniable
hypnotising my soul
enchanted I follow the airs, to where he is
achingly...
#lust
28 reads
1 Comment
backdeckbenny
Published
Yesterday 5:25am
Yesterday 5:25am
She's gone
It was cold, very very cold.
I went for a walk with misery in one pocket.
In the other, my dead wife's golden locket.
How confused I felt
holding sunlight in one hand
and darkness in the other.
Onwards I walked.
Fists clenched against the truth or the cold or both.
" It will do you good " they said.
But it didn't
for I wished that I was dead.
But I wasn't
I had a life to live instead.
I went for a walk with misery in one pocket.
In the other, my dead wife's golden locket.
How confused I felt
holding sunlight in one hand
and darkness in the other.
Onwards I walked.
Fists clenched against the truth or the cold or both.
" It will do you good " they said.
But it didn't
for I wished that I was dead.
But I wasn't
I had a life to live instead.
#death
#love
#sadness #uplifting
#sadness #uplifting
42 reads
2 Comments
TheOralizer
Published
Yesterday 10:36pm
Yesterday 10:36pm
IT FEELS SO GOOD!
OH,
you are working
magic; it feels so
amazingly good;
never imagined anything
could feel so wonderful
YES!
You do it perfectly.
Harder...the stiffness
in my neck is
going away; the ache
is gone too.
YES
it feels so good now.
you are working
magic; it feels so
amazingly good;
never imagined anything
could feel so wonderful
YES!
You do it perfectly.
Harder...the stiffness
in my neck is
going away; the ache
is gone too.
YES
it feels so good now.
#courage
#gratitude
#hope
#motivational
#strength
27 reads
3 Comments
Anne-Ri999
Published
26th Jan 2025 8:47am
26th Jan 2025 8:47am
He
his was
an empty verse
brought by a solitary
meaning
it was you
broken one
shining one
who showed me
my given face
returns to me
child
your sight is fading
I hold on to
each vaporizing
tone
knowing
yours is a world far brighter
deeper than all truths
now shake cosmic
snowflakes from
ardent crust
nameless one
once more lend me
this vigil shade
shake tears
from these eardrums
on this pier
I stand avian
do not...
an empty verse
brought by a solitary
meaning
it was you
broken one
shining one
who showed me
my given face
returns to me
child
your sight is fading
I hold on to
each vaporizing
tone
knowing
yours is a world far brighter
deeper than all truths
now shake cosmic
snowflakes from
ardent crust
nameless one
once more lend me
this vigil shade
shake tears
from these eardrums
on this pier
I stand avian
do not...
#LifeChangingMoment
53 reads
6 Comments
PoetSpeak
Published
Yesterday 10:54pm
Yesterday 10:54pm
Cord, Bottle Caps, Cardboard = ART
Collage
On
Recycled Amazon cardboard
Fluorescent Lime Cord
.99 at the Super Store
Gatorade Zero bottle caps
Labor - 15 minutes tops ..
Could easily hang in a museum
Instead
It stays with me
Priceless
On
Recycled Amazon cardboard
Fluorescent Lime Cord
.99 at the Super Store
Gatorade Zero bottle caps
Labor - 15 minutes tops ..
Could easily hang in a museum
Instead
It stays with me
Priceless
#art
49 reads
12 Comments
Numer90
Numer0-un0
Numer0-un0
Published
25th Jan 2025 6:10pm
25th Jan 2025 6:10pm
Simple Pendulum
What in the name of a wee man is this?
I just want to feel this cool breeze as I freeze due to..
Me, sitting here with some very few who don't go by #Me too..
Even though I am a rebel, I won't lose my fate
I need a single or two schedules for each an every date
I have lived for years, decades counting my days
I will only survive those days calculating everything I can say
And since my deeds I must pay
While the Sunshines I guess I have to make my hay..
On a very cool surface at night, am feeling this dew ...
I just want to feel this cool breeze as I freeze due to..
Me, sitting here with some very few who don't go by #Me too..
Even though I am a rebel, I won't lose my fate
I need a single or two schedules for each an every date
I have lived for years, decades counting my days
I will only survive those days calculating everything I can say
And since my deeds I must pay
While the Sunshines I guess I have to make my hay..
On a very cool surface at night, am feeling this dew ...
#strength
58 reads
5 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Published
Today 5:17am
Today 5:17am
This sounds fishy
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words ✍️ WHAT I would like to do is have a intelligent conversation of right and wrong. For sure how many of us who have known, someone who has been killed by the blue 🧱 of silence over the years. 😔 For isn't it kind of strange, that those who were pardon and released mysteriously come to an unexpected crime of death,🤔 from the January six of the chaos and drama, that became world news around the world. 🌍 For here we go again another person was killed, by the blue wall 🧱 of silence. YET we can't...
#corruption
#deception
#HumanRights
#murder
#violence
16 reads
0 Comments
Ahavati
Tams
Tams
Published
19th Jan 2025 2:49pm
19th Jan 2025 2:49pm
A Night in the Museum
I was attending a meeting
hosting a keynote speaker
whom I did not know
During the presentation
the internet connection was lost
and I found myself sitting
next to the speaker
discussing potential options
for a better connection
A fundraiser was suggested
while he politely asked
if I was a Sociologist
At that time, the host
a gangly old man, obviously
frustrated by our discourse
abruptly blurted out:
"We don't use oracle cards...
hosting a keynote speaker
whom I did not know
During the presentation
the internet connection was lost
and I found myself sitting
next to the speaker
discussing potential options
for a better connection
A fundraiser was suggested
while he politely asked
if I was a Sociologist
At that time, the host
a gangly old man, obviously
frustrated by our discourse
abruptly blurted out:
"We don't use oracle cards...
#dreams
#religion
#spiritual #universe
#spiritual #universe
156 reads
12 Comments
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