Poems About Fate Seeking Honest Critique
#fate
Poems about fate seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
not much to do but wait
sitting on a park benches
smoking
watching the
sunset
waiting for twilight
waiting for twilight
waiting for twilight
the years crawl off to a
dry wormwooded
corner stuck
just behind
memory
twilight is not such
a long way
off
smoking
watching the
sunset
waiting for twilight
waiting for twilight
waiting for twilight
the years crawl off to a
dry wormwooded
corner stuck
just behind
memory
twilight is not such
a long way
off
#fate
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Did you lie?
Choice and chance
You know how to dance?
You said God was willing
Did you pay in advance
Or did you ask and ask
Did you lie and lie?
You got fire pants?
Did you do the work
or get that paycheck advance
They said I can't
So now they on a branch
Are you close to root?
Are you fully stalked?
Are you prepared for the day
You begin to rot?
Did you prepay your phone
Before you want to talk?
They told me I'm weird
They don't want to walk
They told me I'm revered
But they want and want
Tell me do...
You know how to dance?
You said God was willing
Did you pay in advance
Or did you ask and ask
Did you lie and lie?
You got fire pants?
Did you do the work
or get that paycheck advance
They said I can't
So now they on a branch
Are you close to root?
Are you fully stalked?
Are you prepared for the day
You begin to rot?
Did you prepay your phone
Before you want to talk?
They told me I'm weird
They don't want to walk
They told me I'm revered
But they want and want
Tell me do...
#fate
#SelfWorth
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Avenge the Storm pt II
#curse
#fate
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A Bite Of A Vampire’s Fate Part I
Tears of Fate Witch’s Brew
TIBRADDEN MOUNTAIN
Dublin, Ireland
Dracon elongated his body on his paws as he stretched out his hind legs. He stood on all four legs and sniffed the mountaintop. He smelled Naynina’s presence in the wind. His paws rested on a boulder overlooking the top of the beautiful towering tress below.
Tonight, he would strike Seneca’s fortress, bringing an end to his ruthless clan. He also knew it was his sole responsibility to provide safe passage for Naynina and himself back to Romania. Therefore, he will have to call upon his second...
TIBRADDEN MOUNTAIN
Dublin, Ireland
Dracon elongated his body on his paws as he stretched out his hind legs. He stood on all four legs and sniffed the mountaintop. He smelled Naynina’s presence in the wind. His paws rested on a boulder overlooking the top of the beautiful towering tress below.
Tonight, he would strike Seneca’s fortress, bringing an end to his ruthless clan. He also knew it was his sole responsibility to provide safe passage for Naynina and himself back to Romania. Therefore, he will have to call upon his second...
#fairies
#fate
#vampires #witches
#vampires #witches
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Beneath
Swimming out
Beyond the blue
Deep diving
Into Netherworlds
Fathomless….as…
Luminosities fade
Welcoming arms
Herald the abyss ..
….
…….
…………
You give yourself………..
…………
………………
to this
……….. Only to this
...
Beyond the blue
Deep diving
Into Netherworlds
Fathomless….as…
Luminosities fade
Welcoming arms
Herald the abyss ..
….
…….
…………
You give yourself………..
…………
………………
to this
……….. Only to this
...
#fate
#sea
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The Puppet Master
When I signed
The application
No idea of
THE JOB
I didn't feel
the strings attach
nor the latches from
THE SOD.
It took too long to notice
what I had become
stuck inside a wooden box
that only made
ME NUMB.
I thought about
the words I used
to capture all of my skills.
not knowing this
would mean a place
for you to catch
YOUR THRILLS.
For now I see
they were so cheap
they only give me chills
Turning to a monster
had been one of ...
The application
No idea of
THE JOB
I didn't feel
the strings attach
nor the latches from
THE SOD.
It took too long to notice
what I had become
stuck inside a wooden box
that only made
ME NUMB.
I thought about
the words I used
to capture all of my skills.
not knowing this
would mean a place
for you to catch
YOUR THRILLS.
For now I see
they were so cheap
they only give me chills
Turning to a monster
had been one of ...
#fate
#responsibility
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Change of tides
There have been a few Important 8n my life.
My mother, father, my children, My Wife.
I would trade everything to have yall back.
You are all in heaven, I'm slipping into hells Crack.
I hate this world, I despise the gods, me most.
Here I am flesh blood still a ghost.
From lightning, bullets, knives, bombs, I'm here.
Hanging, burned, ran over, your hate is clear.
Teary eyes to the sky we feel the same.
Billions on Earth you don't know my name.
I've been to war with the devil we know it's true.
You kept...
My mother, father, my children, My Wife.
I would trade everything to have yall back.
You are all in heaven, I'm slipping into hells Crack.
I hate this world, I despise the gods, me most.
Here I am flesh blood still a ghost.
From lightning, bullets, knives, bombs, I'm here.
Hanging, burned, ran over, your hate is clear.
Teary eyes to the sky we feel the same.
Billions on Earth you don't know my name.
I've been to war with the devil we know it's true.
You kept...
#curse
#dark
#fate
#hate
#morality
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Epitaph
And the graves dances on my flower's death
I spawn worms on my tombstone 's epitaph
and leave them on earth to die without date
as i dwell with a pen stabbed in my hand .
And now, i smell their stench of soul's death
as they stand at my grave;, they rot in flesh
today, i am as dark as the inked air of my veins
as cloudy as the pages' sky, frowned at from beneath
How yellow their faces shine with envy and grudge
as they stick a thorn in my backs' flowering rose
a kabbalistic tribe, and black magic smeared my face
not...
I spawn worms on my tombstone 's epitaph
and leave them on earth to die without date
as i dwell with a pen stabbed in my hand .
And now, i smell their stench of soul's death
as they stand at my grave;, they rot in flesh
today, i am as dark as the inked air of my veins
as cloudy as the pages' sky, frowned at from beneath
How yellow their faces shine with envy and grudge
as they stick a thorn in my backs' flowering rose
a kabbalistic tribe, and black magic smeared my face
not...
#curse
#dystopian
#fate #nightmares
#fate #nightmares
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By My Side
It was in those days of youth
When my emotions had held me loyal and true
And though a mountain range of obstacles lay ahead
I just knew that patience would eventually pay off
I waited and waited for her
But the choices we made carved a different path
And we went our separate and distant ways
Far apart and yet still closer to the heart
And it was after a decade
That upon seeing her face again I knew it was real
That ember never died inside of me
Remembering the emotion with all its intensity
Our time had finally...
When my emotions had held me loyal and true
And though a mountain range of obstacles lay ahead
I just knew that patience would eventually pay off
I waited and waited for her
But the choices we made carved a different path
And we went our separate and distant ways
Far apart and yet still closer to the heart
And it was after a decade
That upon seeing her face again I knew it was real
That ember never died inside of me
Remembering the emotion with all its intensity
Our time had finally...
#fate
#LifeStruggles
#patience
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the agonies
from the womb to
the grave
from first breath
to last gasp
matchbox sized
agonies
car sized
agonies
superstore sized
agonies
agonies of every
imagination
the blunt force
trauma of the
everyday
the persistence
of agony like
nagging mosquitoe
bites upon our
pale flesh
like the last hand
held
the last hand
pulled
away
the last kiss
given
the last kiss
received
the last love ...
the grave
from first breath
to last gasp
matchbox sized
agonies
car sized
agonies
superstore sized
agonies
agonies of every
imagination
the blunt force
trauma of the
everyday
the persistence
of agony like
nagging mosquitoe
bites upon our
pale flesh
like the last hand
held
the last hand
pulled
away
the last kiss
given
the last kiss
received
the last love ...
#fate
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Anniversary
Every year, it comes
unbeknownst
that quiet hour of passing
that date awaiting etching to
marble memory
and I
oblivious to finality
marching, marching, marching,
my matters to attend
I do not bend
to notice
nor pause consideration
to the end
This graceful anniversary
shall come reversed
no wine
no candles
and unrehearsed
unbeknownst
that quiet hour of passing
that date awaiting etching to
marble memory
and I
oblivious to finality
marching, marching, marching,
my matters to attend
I do not bend
to notice
nor pause consideration
to the end
This graceful anniversary
shall come reversed
no wine
no candles
and unrehearsed
#aging
#death
#denial
#fate
#TruthOfLife
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Dark Furrows
the sun bent on the skyline
a few hours past zenith
the mist lands 'pon the pines
the mute river runs beneath
i left the small town behind
riding across turned fields
the few drops of winter rains
gave dead earth nothing to yield
a lonely patch of green land
where the sky has somehow kissed
where the children had once passed
the harmful hands, blindly missed
i cast an eye onto the blue,
dark furrows stretch till the end
green trucks slash the thirsty lands
crop this year will never grow
a few hours past zenith
the mist lands 'pon the pines
the mute river runs beneath
i left the small town behind
riding across turned fields
the few drops of winter rains
gave dead earth nothing to yield
a lonely patch of green land
where the sky has somehow kissed
where the children had once passed
the harmful hands, blindly missed
i cast an eye onto the blue,
dark furrows stretch till the end
green trucks slash the thirsty lands
crop this year will never grow
#curse
#fate
#morality
#philosophical
#TruthOfLife
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DU Poetry : Poems About Fate Seeking Honest Critique