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charred remains
i poured the fuel over myself, the fumes overwhelmed me
i looked around for an audiance to death
but there was only trees
this time i chose to die
where i could not be heard to cry
all they will find is my charred remains
invisable chains now freed
i looked around for an audiance to death
but there was only trees
this time i chose to die
where i could not be heard to cry
all they will find is my charred remains
invisable chains now freed
Published 25th Aug 2015
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25th Aug 2015 8:41pm
That's a tough entry, shark. I like the raw tenor and the straight wording. Welcome to DU!
26th Aug 2015 11:05am
my poetry contains no frills or fancy edges, its just as it spews out
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27th Aug 2015 8:41pm
Interesting. I feel you on this one. Sometimes I feel like my cries for attention are futile, as if no one is around.
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28th Aug 2015 1:27am
28th Aug 2015 4:28pm
I love how you just put out there the true feeling you didn't pull no punches.
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28th Aug 2015 7:32pm
