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dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2018 1:18am
22nd Apr 2018 1:18am
From a kid living a normal life
Life was normal
My childhood was fine
I wasn't abused
Not by my family
My father busted his ads everyday
Out the door by 5 am
He was very strict...very
My mom she was the cool one
Had family gatherings
Youngest of them all
All my cousins were crazy
But fun. From midnight mischief
Shananigans I still can't speak of
To little pranks of covering my aunts lawn with funeral flowers and arrangements.
Etc...
Catholic school wasn't that great
Burgandy black green white plaid
Sister Mary whatever
To this day...
My childhood was fine
I wasn't abused
Not by my family
My father busted his ads everyday
Out the door by 5 am
He was very strict...very
My mom she was the cool one
Had family gatherings
Youngest of them all
All my cousins were crazy
But fun. From midnight mischief
Shananigans I still can't speak of
To little pranks of covering my aunts lawn with funeral flowers and arrangements.
Etc...
Catholic school wasn't that great
Burgandy black green white plaid
Sister Mary whatever
To this day...
#inspirational
37 reads
4 Comments
shadow_starzzz
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 00:47am
21st Apr 2018 00:47am
Another one bites the dust...
It took me a while to understand what you were doing to me, and it wasn't until just recently that I understood the absence of ones touch, and how much I craved everything you couldn't bring yourself to be, for me.
Presence, has very little weight without the other senses being tapped, simultaneously.
It made me wonder why I channeled my never ending hope, respect and trust into you ?
As if you were the only decent man on the planet that blinded me from seeing the goodness within the depths of any other.
Love, means nothing without those core elements underpinning...
Presence, has very little weight without the other senses being tapped, simultaneously.
It made me wonder why I channeled my never ending hope, respect and trust into you ?
As if you were the only decent man on the planet that blinded me from seeing the goodness within the depths of any other.
Love, means nothing without those core elements underpinning...
#betrayal
38 reads
5 Comments
personanongrata
Poem Published
20th Apr 2018 5:13pm
20th Apr 2018 5:13pm
I have nothing to say
So what am I supposed to do right now?
Forget and delete everything that I have felt with you?
The spiral tried to get me in its grief and victimhood but no.
I saw you in me.
I saw that part of me that was screaming for attention. And the way I have been treating it, is the same with yours towards me. This is a mirroring reflection...My freedom and purity wants to be embodied in me but I am running away from them.
What the fuck am I saying?
This is rediculous. I'm brainwashed and naive.
There is no such thing as true love.
Then I say, this is all...
Forget and delete everything that I have felt with you?
The spiral tried to get me in its grief and victimhood but no.
I saw you in me.
I saw that part of me that was screaming for attention. And the way I have been treating it, is the same with yours towards me. This is a mirroring reflection...My freedom and purity wants to be embodied in me but I am running away from them.
What the fuck am I saying?
This is rediculous. I'm brainwashed and naive.
There is no such thing as true love.
Then I say, this is all...
#rejection
#SelfReflection
38 reads
4 Comments
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
19th Apr 2018 8:02am
19th Apr 2018 8:02am
inspiration
inspiration is what i need
starving beast
mouth wide
bloodshot eyes
frostbitten touch
heart of black
soul im gonna
crack
starving beast
mouth wide
bloodshot eyes
frostbitten touch
heart of black
soul im gonna
crack
#sex
#porn
#BDSM #lover
#BDSM #lover
42 reads
3 Comments
shadow_starzzz
Poem Published
16th Apr 2018 11:43am
16th Apr 2018 11:43am
Aeviternal
I'm an amateur writer, a kinky lover, a fair fighter, and a survivor... of incompetent hands.
I wonder if he remembers the words that bound us ?!
I adore coffee but hate the ongoing buzz it gives to me as I bounce off the walls when I’m alone. It interferes with my sleep patterns if I consume too much.
I’d much prefer to be crawling the walls face first as you pin me upon the wall via the width & length of your throbbing gorgeousness.
The chemical daze of dopamine, serotonin and oxytocin is my kind of natural high. I don’t do drugs but I’m a sex addict, by default. ...
I wonder if he remembers the words that bound us ?!
I adore coffee but hate the ongoing buzz it gives to me as I bounce off the walls when I’m alone. It interferes with my sleep patterns if I consume too much.
I’d much prefer to be crawling the walls face first as you pin me upon the wall via the width & length of your throbbing gorgeousness.
The chemical daze of dopamine, serotonin and oxytocin is my kind of natural high. I don’t do drugs but I’m a sex addict, by default. ...
#love
41 reads
6 Comments
cold_fusion
Poem Published
14th Apr 2018 1:10pm
14th Apr 2018 1:10pm
traversing the void
it's a hollow feeling.
Credits for the poem's editing........ Teri the awesome friend a.k.a Amorous_Tryst
#loneliness
81 reads
10 Comments
jmerrick73
Poem Published
14th Apr 2018 12:11pm
14th Apr 2018 12:11pm
Here......
Here i sit.
Here i sit upon this porcelain contraption
Here.
Here taking a shit.
No gallbladder to break down it's content.
Ooozin like chocolate ice cream,
out it's dispensing machine.
There is pain accompanying this horrendous,smelly shit.
15 minutes done passed.
I'm still sitting here taking a shit.
God, how much longer shall this shit last?
The shit ordeal has concluded.
I've given straight facts, nothing was diluted.
The golgothan of shits.
Evil to it's very core.
Down to the hellish stinky depths of my toilet...
Here i sit upon this porcelain contraption
Here.
Here taking a shit.
No gallbladder to break down it's content.
Ooozin like chocolate ice cream,
out it's dispensing machine.
There is pain accompanying this horrendous,smelly shit.
15 minutes done passed.
I'm still sitting here taking a shit.
God, how much longer shall this shit last?
The shit ordeal has concluded.
I've given straight facts, nothing was diluted.
The golgothan of shits.
Evil to it's very core.
Down to the hellish stinky depths of my toilet...
#anxiety
14 reads
1 Comment
Kaywrites
Poem Published
13th Apr 2018 3:58am
13th Apr 2018 3:58am
I survived
My momma had two kids me and my twin... I survived
Elementary school ... I survived
First time falling of a bike... I survived
Molested by my dad ... I survived
First fight ... I survived
Loosing my best friends ... I survived
Being called fat and ugly ... I survived
Being homeless twice ... I survived
Lost my grandma to cancer ... I survived
Broke my arm ... I survived
Middle school... I survived
Lost my dad to a gun , he pulled the trigger ... I survived
Not fitting in with my momma family ... I survived ...
Elementary school ... I survived
First time falling of a bike... I survived
Molested by my dad ... I survived
First fight ... I survived
Loosing my best friends ... I survived
Being called fat and ugly ... I survived
Being homeless twice ... I survived
Lost my grandma to cancer ... I survived
Broke my arm ... I survived
Middle school... I survived
Lost my dad to a gun , he pulled the trigger ... I survived
Not fitting in with my momma family ... I survived ...
#strength
21 reads
1 Comment
JnMlngr
Poem Published
12th Apr 2018 10:27pm
12th Apr 2018 10:27pm
the far clack
if gum cranked in fast hurry ((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^would sit dream
VVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVV______________________& stitch
&
&
&
a manner far in
)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
VVVVVVVVV^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^fur!
& shake
*for inward flashVVVVVVVVVVVVV^^^^^^^^^^
& keep
(till en^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^fur gooly (dup)
& for wonerful dizzy lie^^^^^^for ____________that i can't touch
yet
//got caught
in silly place ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^would sit dream
VVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVV______________________& stitch
&
&
&
a manner far in
)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
VVVVVVVVV^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^fur!
& shake
*for inward flashVVVVVVVVVVVVV^^^^^^^^^^
& keep
(till en^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^fur gooly (dup)
& for wonerful dizzy lie^^^^^^for ____________that i can't touch
yet
//got caught
in silly place ...
#nature
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0 Comments
Kaywrites
Poem Published
12th Apr 2018 1:26am
12th Apr 2018 1:26am
No longer quiet
I'm told to keep my mouth closed but I'm going to open it and speak the truth 🗣 my most precious gift was took by a man , a man who supposed to keep and protect me from those kinds of things ...my dad he molested me at the ages 8-10 buut I finally spoke up and everybody turned against me said I'm lying or I'm just jealous sooo while we in court I told them everything was lie so I could make everyone else happy so last year (2017) I actually decided to go through with it and tell the truth because why should I have to walk around with the stress and being disgusted with myself and...
#anger
#identity
#abuse #MeToo
#abuse #MeToo
40 reads
4 Comments
Hiddenlistener
Austin2002
Austin2002
Poem Published
11th Apr 2018 11:34pm
11th Apr 2018 11:34pm
do what you want
You know what to do anymore what do you want me to do do you actually want me to leave if you do tell me all I've ever asked for was for you to be honest all I ever ask for sick of being broken you've had my life in your hands but chose not to throw me away what purpose do you have for me if you wanted me gone I would already be be honest with yourself with me and with everyone else you said it's hard how is it hard to say what you want we all got our wants and we all got our needs I'm asking you what you want what do you expect me to do your sister said leave my sister alone but before that...
#sadness
#anxiety
#loneliness
#confessional
#confusion
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0 Comments
_boybrains
Poem Published
11th Apr 2018 11:29am
11th Apr 2018 11:29am
Ache.
I thought about burning
this unrecognisable body;
fuel all the flames until
there is no more agony
left inside of me,
I thought about drowning
this unrecognisable mind;
washing away these putrid
feelings & images floating
behind.
this unrecognisable body;
fuel all the flames until
there is no more agony
left inside of me,
I thought about drowning
this unrecognisable mind;
washing away these putrid
feelings & images floating
behind.
#sadness
#dark
#abuse
#oppression
#LifeStruggles
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