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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2022 9:38pm
2nd Dec 2022 9:38pm
The Sword of Mordred: Part II
- The Sword of Mordred: Part II -
Deep were the paths that had led me beneath the great mountain of Yr Wyddfa, in the pleasant land of Gwynedd. My journey across Wales, after having departed Camelot upon a most personal quest, so led me at last here. Something called to me from this place, and had probably been what drove me to set off upon this expedition to begin with. I had thought at first that my quest had been of my own volition, but as I stood now in the place wherein I beheld the unearthly sight before me... I realized that some power was at work which wished to make...
Deep were the paths that had led me beneath the great mountain of Yr Wyddfa, in the pleasant land of Gwynedd. My journey across Wales, after having departed Camelot upon a most personal quest, so led me at last here. Something called to me from this place, and had probably been what drove me to set off upon this expedition to begin with. I had thought at first that my quest had been of my own volition, but as I stood now in the place wherein I beheld the unearthly sight before me... I realized that some power was at work which wished to make...
#family
#death
#memories
#pagan
#magic
16 reads
0 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2022 9:32pm
2nd Dec 2022 9:32pm
The Sword of Mordred: Part I
- The Sword of Mordred: Part I -
A winding and perilous course took me forth from Camelot, in the days when Arthur was the king of all the folk of what today is called Britain. There were goodly reasons for my setting forth, and of that journey which I undertook, and why it was I undertook it, there were dark undercurrents to all that had transpired... beneath which, some measure of light was at work, though at the time I knew it not. A big gray steed carried me, a steed with a night black saddle. I refused the offer of a chariot, for those were costly, and then I would need to...
A winding and perilous course took me forth from Camelot, in the days when Arthur was the king of all the folk of what today is called Britain. There were goodly reasons for my setting forth, and of that journey which I undertook, and why it was I undertook it, there were dark undercurrents to all that had transpired... beneath which, some measure of light was at work, though at the time I knew it not. A big gray steed carried me, a steed with a night black saddle. I refused the offer of a chariot, for those were costly, and then I would need to...
#dark
#family
#memories
#pagan
#magic
19 reads
0 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2022 5:04pm
2nd Dec 2022 5:04pm
The Forty Years' War
Hi!
If we haven’t met in person, we are probably friends online, or maybe you’ve come across my work on ‘The Notes and the Words’ or DUP. I tend to go by Wafflenose or Ellie online. I have decided to be brave, or as brave as it’s possible for a pathologically shy, mild-mannered, socially-phobic English woman to be. I’m going to share a bit about my journey with a lifelong mood disorder, in the hope that somebody might learn something, and that I might develop more understanding of my condition, which still baffles me from time to time.
Like most people, I don’t have many...
If we haven’t met in person, we are probably friends online, or maybe you’ve come across my work on ‘The Notes and the Words’ or DUP. I tend to go by Wafflenose or Ellie online. I have decided to be brave, or as brave as it’s possible for a pathologically shy, mild-mannered, socially-phobic English woman to be. I’m going to share a bit about my journey with a lifelong mood disorder, in the hope that somebody might learn something, and that I might develop more understanding of my condition, which still baffles me from time to time.
Like most people, I don’t have many...
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
41 reads
1 Comment
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
1st Dec 2022 7:06pm
1st Dec 2022 7:06pm
Finally feeling brave (Part 3 of 3)
The second diagram starts where the first one left off. My 30s, though plagued with fear and insecurity, were my most stable years to date, hence the vastly oversimplified straight line. I've added the random green dots as before, to show life its richness and complexity. After a long and unexpected low patch which started at the age of 40, my lifelong pattern changed. You can see a frantically oscillating wavy line for the remainder of the page. Instead of putting individual green dots all over the place during this period, I've illustrated a typical day with the vertical line of...
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
48 reads
8 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
1st Dec 2022 7:03pm
1st Dec 2022 7:03pm
Finally feeling brave (Part 2 of 3)
I also did some drawings to represent what has happened. I'm very bad at drawing, and indeed all forms of visual representation. I also don't have a perfect memory, so it's not to scale. My first diagram represents the first 32 years of my life. On the x axis, we have time, and on the y axis we have mood. Again, we have some greyness and question marks over the first few years, followed by three dips representing bad patches at 5, 7 and 9 years old. The little zigzag represents the normal ups and downs of childhood, and soon after that, you can see what are supposed to be my annual...
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
49 reads
2 Comments
Em-ily
Poem Published
1st Dec 2022 4:53pm
1st Dec 2022 4:53pm
Edit
ELECT LAUREN JEWETT
with pride-flags
with My Lady Carey's
✓
XAN'S GUIDE TO PRIDE FLAGS
WIKIPEDIA
The rainbow flag is often
used to represent the whole
LGBTQ community, but
there are many other pride
flags out there!
These more specific flags
are a way to give visibility to
groups in the community
that might otherwise feel
ignored.
Dompe
There are flags for different
sexualities, gender
identities and even some
kinks with...
with pride-flags
with My Lady Carey's
✓
XAN'S GUIDE TO PRIDE FLAGS
WIKIPEDIA
The rainbow flag is often
used to represent the whole
LGBTQ community, but
there are many other pride
flags out there!
These more specific flags
are a way to give visibility to
groups in the community
that might otherwise feel
ignored.
Dompe
There are flags for different
sexualities, gender
identities and even some
kinks with...
#love
29 reads
4 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
30th Nov 2022 11:53pm
30th Nov 2022 11:53pm
Finally feeling brave (Part 1 of 3)
Hi!
If we haven’t met in person, we are probably friends online, or maybe you’ve come across my work on ‘The Notes and the Words’ or DUP. I tend to go by Wafflenose or Ellie online. I have decided to be brave, or as brave as it’s possible for a pathologically shy, mild-mannered, socially-phobic English woman to be. I’m going to share a bit about my journey with a lifelong mood disorder, in the hope that somebody might learn something, and that I might develop more understanding of my condition, which still baffles me from time to time.
Like most people, I don’t have...
If we haven’t met in person, we are probably friends online, or maybe you’ve come across my work on ‘The Notes and the Words’ or DUP. I tend to go by Wafflenose or Ellie online. I have decided to be brave, or as brave as it’s possible for a pathologically shy, mild-mannered, socially-phobic English woman to be. I’m going to share a bit about my journey with a lifelong mood disorder, in the hope that somebody might learn something, and that I might develop more understanding of my condition, which still baffles me from time to time.
Like most people, I don’t have...
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection #SelfDiscovery
74 reads
2 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
21st Nov 2022 6:36pm
21st Nov 2022 6:36pm
Otherworldly Memories Part XI: The Dragon War
#anger
#grief
#war
#dragons
#memories
14 reads
0 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
21st Nov 2022 6:32pm
21st Nov 2022 6:32pm
Otherworldly Memories Part X: The Hidden Citadel
#love
#family
#rebirth
#memories
#passion
20 reads
0 Comments
Em-ily
Poem Published
19th Nov 2022 10:41pm
19th Nov 2022 10:41pm
Message to bot
Or person. (Good sleuthing, Relic 54)
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/466700-the-dup-plagiarist/
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/466700-the-dup-plagiarist/
#identity
#technology
#morality
72 reads
4 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
19th Nov 2022 7:17pm
19th Nov 2022 7:17pm
Otherworldly Memories Part IX: The Last Journey
#love
#science
#death
#rebirth
#memories
26 reads
3 Comments
APissPoorShaman
Ryszard
Ryszard
Poem Published
17th Nov 2022 5:36pm
17th Nov 2022 5:36pm
Character assassination and sexual harassment
--- I have NEVER said an improper word to any one [women or man] on this site ---
the following message chain is point black accusing me WITHOUT evidence of driving women from this site. I am now requesting all who read this post to link hard evidence of improper behavior [emails, replies, messages] that corroborates the vile accusations presented here. I have already begun transitioning to other poetry sites because of lost friends and closed doors on dup since I took sides in a war between two poetesses. Enough is enough, I am demanding evidence. ...
the following message chain is point black accusing me WITHOUT evidence of driving women from this site. I am now requesting all who read this post to link hard evidence of improper behavior [emails, replies, messages] that corroborates the vile accusations presented here. I have already begun transitioning to other poetry sites because of lost friends and closed doors on dup since I took sides in a war between two poetesses. Enough is enough, I am demanding evidence. ...
#anger
#frustration
137 reads
9 Comments
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