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DaniePhantom
Poem Published
20th Mar 2019 3:52am
20th Mar 2019 3:52am
Calling on Life
#regret
#LifeStruggles
#spiritual #confusion
#spiritual #confusion
23 reads
2 Comments
T_V_Walker
Poem Published
18th Mar 2019 11:33pm
18th Mar 2019 11:33pm
Perfect
I'm not religious and I'm not a Dr of Science, I'm not a preacher or a teacher or anything other than a human who has learn't a watered down version of English. I'm not an authority on light, all I have to go on is what I can see. Light may be the only thing that everyone sees the same. The light they see is perfect.
If a hypothetical gender-less god came to us from another dimension and was asked to improve light, it would probably say "It can't be done its great as it is, why didn't you ask me to give you the secret to world peace."
Light can't be improved, there...
If a hypothetical gender-less god came to us from another dimension and was asked to improve light, it would probably say "It can't be done its great as it is, why didn't you ask me to give you the secret to world peace."
Light can't be improved, there...
#sun
10 reads
0 Comments
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
17th Mar 2019 11:50pm
17th Mar 2019 11:50pm
pause!!! Errrrr !
Time just stopped!!!
Pretty cool huh?
Pretty cool huh?
#TruthOfLife
60 reads
7 Comments
MonicaT
Poem Published
17th Mar 2019 4:24pm
17th Mar 2019 4:24pm
limitless
Our true existence is timeless and limitless, present only Now, without past or future, beginning or end.
An enlightened person always lives in that space only, and has no concept of past time.
The human mind has difficulties apprehending such concepts, and creates false borders in which it can operate.
We were not created or destroyed, 'creation' doesn't need a beginning or an end. That is mind concept.
We are That which knows no birth nor death.
An enlightened person always lives in that space only, and has no concept of past time.
The human mind has difficulties apprehending such concepts, and creates false borders in which it can operate.
We were not created or destroyed, 'creation' doesn't need a beginning or an end. That is mind concept.
We are That which knows no birth nor death.
#spiritual
26 reads
3 Comments
Tallen
Poem Published
16th Mar 2019 11:47pm
16th Mar 2019 11:47pm
Scuttles
. . strolling through a concrete jungle
of no particular latitude or longitude
kicking empty cans that should have
been recycled a long long time ago
I guess
It was inevitable
I stumbled.
Falling into somebody’s worn out
Sandbox, I came across several
rusted out buckets.
These buckets were filled with dreams.
Left behind in haste
to escape
a decline of suburban rote living ----
would be my first thoughts. . .
impressions.
Why do we leave our dreams
Behind?
Is it because we are...
of no particular latitude or longitude
kicking empty cans that should have
been recycled a long long time ago
I guess
It was inevitable
I stumbled.
Falling into somebody’s worn out
Sandbox, I came across several
rusted out buckets.
These buckets were filled with dreams.
Left behind in haste
to escape
a decline of suburban rote living ----
would be my first thoughts. . .
impressions.
Why do we leave our dreams
Behind?
Is it because we are...
#dreams
#LifeStruggles
52 reads
12 Comments
Poetikmind
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Poem Published
14th Mar 2019 00:57am
14th Mar 2019 00:57am
“Delilah”
Can’t hope to comprehend
Not about to try n’ pretend
Why...? Why douse her light?
Dear God, it don’t feel right
I pray for her mom n’ family
Such a beautiful child, a gift to
all...She fulfilled HER destiny
Yet, gone far too soon for me...
Delilah, for the family, a shinin’ star
Now, in the company of angels I’m told
I guess the wonder, I’ll always hold
As night falls, you’ll be shining brightest by far....
R.I.P... my beautiful lil niece...
Not about to try n’ pretend
Why...? Why douse her light?
Dear God, it don’t feel right
I pray for her mom n’ family
Such a beautiful child, a gift to
all...She fulfilled HER destiny
Yet, gone far too soon for me...
Delilah, for the family, a shinin’ star
Now, in the company of angels I’m told
I guess the wonder, I’ll always hold
As night falls, you’ll be shining brightest by far....
R.I.P... my beautiful lil niece...
#birth
#childhood
#death #LifeCycle
#death #LifeCycle
69 reads
12 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
13th Mar 2019 3:24am
13th Mar 2019 3:24am
This is it
I will forever exist,
born inside a lazarus pit,
born to brooding and wit,
I'm a natural at this,
you're words' are only disastrous.
I like to unglue and to strip,
to watch the gears and the bits,
as they move and they twist.
It took years to master this,
you took your shots and they missed.
Even if you do get a grip
and I do choose to loosen my mitts,
you couldn't wade through my mist.
I'm so fluid, one drop you'll be rinsed. ...
born inside a lazarus pit,
born to brooding and wit,
I'm a natural at this,
you're words' are only disastrous.
I like to unglue and to strip,
to watch the gears and the bits,
as they move and they twist.
It took years to master this,
you took your shots and they missed.
Even if you do get a grip
and I do choose to loosen my mitts,
you couldn't wade through my mist.
I'm so fluid, one drop you'll be rinsed. ...
#anger
33 reads
0 Comments
MonicaT
Poem Published
12th Mar 2019 8:57pm
12th Mar 2019 8:57pm
ramblings
Imagine the whole universe a conscious entity that is fully aware of itself, just as you are aware of your-self. That entity is looking out though all these eyes that are me and you. That is just what it does.
Now, the fact that you feel there is a definite separate 'you', keeps you separate and therefore, in delusion.
When in fact, all there is, is a single awareness experiencing itself in infinite modalities.
When 'i' disappear, mind disappears, and reality remains bare, luminous and perfect.
Now, the fact that you feel there is a definite separate 'you', keeps you separate and therefore, in delusion.
When in fact, all there is, is a single awareness experiencing itself in infinite modalities.
When 'i' disappear, mind disappears, and reality remains bare, luminous and perfect.
#spiritual
32 reads
6 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
12th Mar 2019 8:27pm
12th Mar 2019 8:27pm
My pallete
You stole my heart, you stole my dreams,
you stole my youth, I wanna scream.
In black and white I bleed my blues
with every colour that I've seen.
Every movie, every scene,
every word that crops up in my head,
happy, sad or mean.
At times I'm but a catalyst, that just how it is.
I grab some flavour and I add a bit,
I want my words to fizz before I send em off.
Don't get mad at it, if I put you in a song,
I bring you up in life, I can put you in a poem.
I write about what I like,...
you stole my youth, I wanna scream.
In black and white I bleed my blues
with every colour that I've seen.
Every movie, every scene,
every word that crops up in my head,
happy, sad or mean.
At times I'm but a catalyst, that just how it is.
I grab some flavour and I add a bit,
I want my words to fizz before I send em off.
Don't get mad at it, if I put you in a song,
I bring you up in life, I can put you in a poem.
I write about what I like,...
#inspirational
39 reads
2 Comments
HowlingHeart
Poem Published
12th Mar 2019 8:28am
12th Mar 2019 8:28am
Where we can't travel
Where is it that you have gone I know only wherever it I can't travel. Where to start I have no clue so much to say and yet my thoughts I can't unravel. Life can be so cruel here one day and gone the next. I have learnt to say what you need to now is the best rule. I know you know I love you yet my last words were unfair. I should of listened when you said something was not right. Yet I did what I thought was best I never knew it would be our last night. The Doctors said you were fine and the cause was in your head. I wish that I would of listened to you instead. They said your stroke was...
#redemption
27 reads
1 Comment
MoonChild96
Poem Published
12th Mar 2019 3:03am
12th Mar 2019 3:03am
Leo
He's a Leo and he is ruled by the sun and has hazel eyes . His qualities are fixed and he fits his zodiac characteristics perfectly he's affectionate , enthusiastic , a leader and romantic he can be temperamental and dramatic but i wouldn't want him any other way . He's warmhearted creative and loyal , what more could i want? I too am a fire sign so I'm looking forward to the fire we will make when we are together , I don't write about him much and honestly i want to . I'd tell him how i really feel but i'm stubborn and i'm afraid of my emotions but here i go being honest , I want to...
#admiration
16 reads
0 Comments
MoonChild96
Poem Published
11th Mar 2019 6:45am
11th Mar 2019 6:45am
hide and seek
Lets play a game i whispered . Lets close our eyes and count to ten . Let us hide so someone can come find us. well its been years and i havn't been found and i doubt anyone's even bothered to look for me. Not like i would be able to be found , I have managed to hide in the darkest corner of my mind , I kept walking the hallway looking for a place to hide but i went deeper and deeper of this long hallway and walked through many doors , ran up and down stairs then finally i hid , I hid for what felt like hours , days and it even felt like years . I peaked out the room i was hiding in and it...
#loneliness
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