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LiamReeduus
LiamReedus
LiamReedus
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:41pm
Yesterday 5:41pm
Happy Birthday
You opened your eyes to flowers
Oldest daughter has fruit cups and oatmeal for you
Youngest has a card "Feliz cumpleaños a ti mamá"
I lay your gifts at your feet. We love you know its true
The heavens poured out an amazing gift this day
Brought fourth the reina de corazones
Youve brought a world of beauty with you
A beauty so deep it goes passed you outter appearance deep into the bones
Happy birth day my love
Know you are special to me
Halo heart necklace you wanted
Silver rose hair piece the girls got for thy
...
Oldest daughter has fruit cups and oatmeal for you
Youngest has a card "Feliz cumpleaños a ti mamá"
I lay your gifts at your feet. We love you know its true
The heavens poured out an amazing gift this day
Brought fourth the reina de corazones
Youve brought a world of beauty with you
A beauty so deep it goes passed you outter appearance deep into the bones
Happy birth day my love
Know you are special to me
Halo heart necklace you wanted
Silver rose hair piece the girls got for thy
...
#mother
#children
16 reads
1 Comment
XxmagickgirlxX
Poem Published
Yesterday 12:51pm
Yesterday 12:51pm
Dear D Three
We tried. i think i fell out of love with you sometime in the last year we spent apart. I know i promised i wouldent leave you for him and im sorry i broke my promise. i left everyone behind for this. my mother disowned me, my dads dead, and all my friends loved you but hate him. i even gave up my best friend because of this. i hope this is it, i dont want to start over again.
#heartbroken
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dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
22nd Aug 2019 10:57pm
22nd Aug 2019 10:57pm
I made plans
And it would be rude to break them.
I'm working
Working on me
Yes I think of you often
The glare outside the gates
Kills me deep, so fuckin deep
Like right through my soul
Deep.
But I'm not changing for anyone
Especially when the only effort they put out
Is showing up to glare and drive off........
And if that makes me a cunt?
Good....
Xoxo,
Diz
And to think, all you would of had to do was text, as you.
I'm working
Working on me
Yes I think of you often
The glare outside the gates
Kills me deep, so fuckin deep
Like right through my soul
Deep.
But I'm not changing for anyone
Especially when the only effort they put out
Is showing up to glare and drive off........
And if that makes me a cunt?
Good....
Xoxo,
Diz
And to think, all you would of had to do was text, as you.
#TimeHeals
#respect
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Harold-Weathervein
Poem Published
17th Aug 2019 4:26am
17th Aug 2019 4:26am
Movie Date (getting asked out)
Do you want to go to the movies with me?"
'!...um...I...
I don't know. You...you, sort of seem like the kind of girl... who would buy a box of Sprees at the concessions stand?'
"Huh?"
'nothing. I just don't want to go to The Lion King.'
"Maybeeee a different movie then??"
'I really can't get over the Sprees thing at this point...'
"Why?!"
'I feel like you would spill them or something.'
"I'd pick them up though."
'and throw them away?'
"Well yeah, what else would I do with them?"
'you could...
'!...um...I...
I don't know. You...you, sort of seem like the kind of girl... who would buy a box of Sprees at the concessions stand?'
"Huh?"
'nothing. I just don't want to go to The Lion King.'
"Maybeeee a different movie then??"
'I really can't get over the Sprees thing at this point...'
"Why?!"
'I feel like you would spill them or something.'
"I'd pick them up though."
'and throw them away?'
"Well yeah, what else would I do with them?"
'you could...
#patience
#dialogue
#dating
46 reads
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dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
15th Aug 2019 1:38am
15th Aug 2019 1:38am
Somedays
I sit and watch the
Wind blow
Wind blow
#TimeHeals
#respect
28 reads
1 Comment
Poetryman
Poem Published
12th Aug 2019 5:10am
12th Aug 2019 5:10am
Pride vs Self-Esteem
Self-esteem flows solely internalized.
Pride rides similarly internal but twists with a superficial slant.
When the id is puffed up with pride it greedily strokes the ego.
Self-esteem builds confidence while pride leads to arrogance.
Pride spins a feedback loop that suffers from gluttonous envy.
The more it feasts the fatter pride grows then craves ever more
to feed it's repetitious addiction.
Self-Esteem is everything!
It fills us with a healthy dose of confidence providing tools for personal success.
Pride thirsts for more than...
Pride rides similarly internal but twists with a superficial slant.
When the id is puffed up with pride it greedily strokes the ego.
Self-esteem builds confidence while pride leads to arrogance.
Pride spins a feedback loop that suffers from gluttonous envy.
The more it feasts the fatter pride grows then craves ever more
to feed it's repetitious addiction.
Self-Esteem is everything!
It fills us with a healthy dose of confidence providing tools for personal success.
Pride thirsts for more than...
#SelfWorth
78 reads
7 Comments
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
12th Aug 2019 1:26am
12th Aug 2019 1:26am
pause
see you all in 2weeks
bye now
bye now
#TruthOfLife
46 reads
4 Comments
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
11th Aug 2019 4:01pm
11th Aug 2019 4:01pm
to the women
i would just like to thank the women that ive encountered
for being so patient in this whole escapade
when ive met some of you
i see you trying to clutch your phones
to take a peek
of the crappy writings
and hearing the rumors
of what i seek and why
i just want to say thank you
there is a method to the madness
but i need a little more time
and then it will all make sense
for being so patient in this whole escapade
when ive met some of you
i see you trying to clutch your phones
to take a peek
of the crappy writings
and hearing the rumors
of what i seek and why
i just want to say thank you
there is a method to the madness
but i need a little more time
and then it will all make sense
#TruthOfLife
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1 Comment
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
11th Aug 2019 5:51am
11th Aug 2019 5:51am
His writing
Is actually growing on me.
With some mentality
Twisting
The wiring in my brain
Now smoke is rising
As I think to myself
Hmmmm?
Self?.....
With some mentality
Twisting
The wiring in my brain
Now smoke is rising
As I think to myself
Hmmmm?
Self?.....
#respect
49 reads
6 Comments
Wordsunspoken88
Savannah
Savannah
Poem Published
10th Aug 2019 1:30am
10th Aug 2019 1:30am
Suicide
#anxiety
#depression
#SelfHarm
#MentalHealth
#PTSD
66 reads
0 Comments
Zombie_Twinkie
Poem Published
9th Aug 2019 1:06am
9th Aug 2019 1:06am
Letter to my love pt2
Oh my dear sweet girl how I love you. I love so many things about you. Even when you are a total brat to me. Even when I get frustrated or upset with you. I never stop loving you. I long to hold you again. It's always on my mind. Holding you, hugging you, snuggling with you. I miss that so much. I miss all the little things we did together through the day. Even if we didnt do much. It was always so much better because you were there. I miss everything, even when we got into stupid arguments. I also miss when cuddling became more. I miss the feel of your body on mine. The way you looked when I...
#sadness
#love
30 reads
0 Comments
TLM5150
Poem Published
7th Aug 2019 11:43am
7th Aug 2019 11:43am
Declaration of War
Darling...
From this moment forward... I've decided to sacrifice my previous existence on the altar of everything I feel for you; the happiness and truth that you and I discovered together this past eight months, that is something worth holding onto, and if need be, fighting for and I intend to do both.
With a certainty that only love can manifest; I sincerely believe that between the both of us, if we worked in tandem, as a team, we could and would have the ability to transcend the boundaries of our limitless potential. Not to mention, the strength to embrace yesterdays...
From this moment forward... I've decided to sacrifice my previous existence on the altar of everything I feel for you; the happiness and truth that you and I discovered together this past eight months, that is something worth holding onto, and if need be, fighting for and I intend to do both.
With a certainty that only love can manifest; I sincerely believe that between the both of us, if we worked in tandem, as a team, we could and would have the ability to transcend the boundaries of our limitless potential. Not to mention, the strength to embrace yesterdays...
#love
#strength
#hope
#forgiveness
#redemption
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1 Comment
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