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Bon_Mot
Poem Published
18th Jun 2021 11:51pm
18th Jun 2021 11:51pm
A Cynic's Advice On Love.
If you must fall in love, try to avoid any emotional involvement.
Love’s like a litter box; looks fine on the surface, but lots of shit beneath.
Love teaches pain; too many become avid learners.
The amount of love expended is proportional to the vulnerability accrued.
Love takes a psychic toll; please have exact change ready.
The more you wager on love, the more you stand to lose.
Love is a 4 letter word.
If you don’t love yourself, don’t expect to be loved by anyone else.
Confuse “lust” with “love” and you will be f**ked twice.
Never underestimate...
Love’s like a litter box; looks fine on the surface, but lots of shit beneath.
Love teaches pain; too many become avid learners.
The amount of love expended is proportional to the vulnerability accrued.
Love takes a psychic toll; please have exact change ready.
The more you wager on love, the more you stand to lose.
Love is a 4 letter word.
If you don’t love yourself, don’t expect to be loved by anyone else.
Confuse “lust” with “love” and you will be f**ked twice.
Never underestimate...
#love
#lover
#wisdom
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3 Comments
RagingFlames
Poem Published
17th Jun 2021 11:22pm
17th Jun 2021 11:22pm
Recurring dream
I had this dream…
A few days ago I had this weird dream
I was with my child hood best friend (ex)
And we where back in our home town…
We met up and fucked it was a lucid dream
It felt so real and I remember it so vividly like it had actually happened
We had gone two rounds and made her bf leave.
Well last night… I had a continuation of that
We were here in my current town. (Which is even more weird cause we both moved to this state.)
We had gone to this party and she was making out with her best friend
I thought it was hot… ...
A few days ago I had this weird dream
I was with my child hood best friend (ex)
And we where back in our home town…
We met up and fucked it was a lucid dream
It felt so real and I remember it so vividly like it had actually happened
We had gone two rounds and made her bf leave.
Well last night… I had a continuation of that
We were here in my current town. (Which is even more weird cause we both moved to this state.)
We had gone to this party and she was making out with her best friend
I thought it was hot… ...
#dreams
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Garsaun
Poem Published
15th Jun 2021 6:00pm
15th Jun 2021 6:00pm
Garsaun Presario Quotes-2021
Seek wisdom and knowledge, for these things strengthen a man from within."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Never be afraid to stand-up for what you believe in, he that shows courage, shows the value of leadership in troubled times."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Respect is a man's way of acknowledging another man's worth and equality."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"The truth has no fear, walk in purpose and stand firm on your beliefs."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Jealousy is the thought process of an individual who views their own success as...
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Never be afraid to stand-up for what you believe in, he that shows courage, shows the value of leadership in troubled times."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Respect is a man's way of acknowledging another man's worth and equality."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"The truth has no fear, walk in purpose and stand firm on your beliefs."
Gar'saun Pre'sario-2021
"Jealousy is the thought process of an individual who views their own success as...
#strength
#inspirational
#uplifting
#meditation
#wisdom
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4Her411
Poem Published
11th Jun 2021 6:48am
11th Jun 2021 6:48am
Happy anniversary to my everything
Happy anniversary to my everything
Through out the years I've expressed to you
depth of my love and the need of yours
your need now exceeds that I dreamed
a strong and lasting love I valued
now rings true in a love you find greater value
that surprised you in the joy your own love brings
to seeing the depth how much you care for me
now you don't always have to say it
the way you show it brings essence
my love has changed for you as well
its become more develop and more mature
does my mood swing make you what maturity ...
Through out the years I've expressed to you
depth of my love and the need of yours
your need now exceeds that I dreamed
a strong and lasting love I valued
now rings true in a love you find greater value
that surprised you in the joy your own love brings
to seeing the depth how much you care for me
now you don't always have to say it
the way you show it brings essence
my love has changed for you as well
its become more develop and more mature
does my mood swing make you what maturity ...
#happiness
#FallingInLove
#support
#respect
#FirstLove
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BlueBeastGirl
Poem Published
10th Jun 2021 7:28am
10th Jun 2021 7:28am
Bleeding Hallways
#childhood
#conflict
#betrayal
31 reads
3 Comments
Fallen_Angel_194
Angel.
Angel.
Poem Published
10th Jun 2021 4:07am
10th Jun 2021 4:07am
To Rueben, All my love.
It is as if you are dragging me back to that house by my throat, bones and all.
The pain of losing you is blossoming inside of my lungs, and I have lost you all over again.
Part of me died that day you decided to leave me, and she lives chained inside the home we both knew.
You have kept me bound and tortured here, destined to wait for a return that will never come.
You hold my soul inside of your hands and you do nothing, you keep me here.
There are some nights I spend wide awake, trying to remember the outline of your face
It is as if you are...
The pain of losing you is blossoming inside of my lungs, and I have lost you all over again.
Part of me died that day you decided to leave me, and she lives chained inside the home we both knew.
You have kept me bound and tortured here, destined to wait for a return that will never come.
You hold my soul inside of your hands and you do nothing, you keep me here.
There are some nights I spend wide awake, trying to remember the outline of your face
It is as if you are...
#grief
#heartbroken
#death #IMissYou
#death #IMissYou
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1 Comment
Bon_Mot
Poem Published
10th Jun 2021 00:04am
10th Jun 2021 00:04am
Sleep? (un-revised notes from a war zone).
(Note: This will be the last of these entries I'll post here. I realize the subject and somewhat graphic images may deter readers, ESPECIALLY ladies.)
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Lack of sleep is an ever present anathema for most of us. The quality of sleep our Company manages is far from the R.E.M. variety; it’s more like a teased semi-consciousness.
Tightly closed eyes get ready and convinced to force fantasies and home dreams… but rats, unfamiliar noises, noxious odors, rifle or rocket fire (far away or closer than trained ears felt...
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Lack of sleep is an ever present anathema for most of us. The quality of sleep our Company manages is far from the R.E.M. variety; it’s more like a teased semi-consciousness.
Tightly closed eyes get ready and convinced to force fantasies and home dreams… but rats, unfamiliar noises, noxious odors, rifle or rocket fire (far away or closer than trained ears felt...
#dark
#soldiers
#war
#environment
#despair
23 reads
4 Comments
Poetryman
Poem Published
9th Jun 2021 3:46pm
9th Jun 2021 3:46pm
pride
I wish there was a different word. Another way of expressing the feeling of self-esteem that gets beaten down and oppressed by people who think themselves superior.
People use the word to claim their favorite football team is the best, their religion is the real one, their country is the greatest... But pride is a monster that hants the human soul.
It took me years of contemplation after arguing the point with my brother. I was so certain that pride was a good thing, that it inspired people to accomplish great things, things they could take pride in. I was sure that it was a...
People use the word to claim their favorite football team is the best, their religion is the real one, their country is the greatest... But pride is a monster that hants the human soul.
It took me years of contemplation after arguing the point with my brother. I was so certain that pride was a good thing, that it inspired people to accomplish great things, things they could take pride in. I was sure that it was a...
#SelfWorth
46 reads
6 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
7th Jun 2021 7:14pm
7th Jun 2021 7:14pm
Just Sad
Not going too well, got wisdom to share, everybody tell me go to hell
#loneliness
#despair
#boredom
25 reads
2 Comments
FeNyX
Poem Published
5th Jun 2021 6:50pm
5th Jun 2021 6:50pm
Home At 1am Or No One's Name On That One
Home At 1am Or No One's Name On That One
I could have left earlier, but I hated going home. At 15 freedom had narrow windows, which I pushed to the limit and beyond. I was James Bond with all the gadgets and prescience. Zukof ... Alan Zukof ... lol
I was hyper aware and in great shape, though I didn't think so then. There was always better around the next corner, next bend in the road, next girl. A fatal flaw that I used to drive me then, until I learned better. Feats of athletic wonder did little to impress gangs and bullies on the...
I could have left earlier, but I hated going home. At 15 freedom had narrow windows, which I pushed to the limit and beyond. I was James Bond with all the gadgets and prescience. Zukof ... Alan Zukof ... lol
I was hyper aware and in great shape, though I didn't think so then. There was always better around the next corner, next bend in the road, next girl. A fatal flaw that I used to drive me then, until I learned better. Feats of athletic wonder did little to impress gangs and bullies on the...
#love
#LifeStruggles
18 reads
10 Comments
bandit
Poem Published
4th Jun 2021 4:10pm
4th Jun 2021 4:10pm
Wasted
How many wish you would have been patient
Now you wish you would have waited
Wishing you would have saved it
For the special one that you should have gave it
How many fell you wasted it
Now you wish you would have waited
Wishing you would have saved it
For the special one that you should have gave it
How many fell you wasted it
#regret
#grief
#relationships
#LifeChangingMoment
#responsibility
23 reads
0 Comments
Bon_Mot
Poem Published
4th Jun 2021 3:48am
4th Jun 2021 3:48am
ARE YOU INTELLIGENT?
Intelligent people reject petty gossip. Gossip thrives in petty places, promulgated by petty, immature people who are devoid of character. Petty gossip is always malicious, unsupported by fact (and when believed) serves only one purpose…it infers some perverse authority on the monger. Hearsay (especially of a scandalous nature) is a cancer; it metastasizes among the intellectually and socially challenged…those who are only capable of following.
Gossip is the brother of lies, the cousin of censorship and the ally of hate; if you are intelligent, you realize that.
Gossip is the brother of lies, the cousin of censorship and the ally of hate; if you are intelligent, you realize that.
#lies
#ignorance
#manipulation
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8 Comments
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