Non-Fiction Prose Seeking Honest Critique
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Non-poetic writing including diary extracts, journal entries, letters, essays and art
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Young Me Versus Old Me
When I was young, I had all this energy and little knowledge. Google didn't exist. I had to rely on my elders for how to do things. Half the time they were worried I'd take their jobs, the other half they would suggest ways that would save my back, or my knees.
I didn't get it. I was a stupid young pup. I did things my way. I lifted things improperly. I worked much harder than I should have. I'm paying for it now.
If I had Google, or YouTube, I would have gotten so much more accomplished. They didn't exist back then. I was a pup running around in circles, or one...
I didn't get it. I was a stupid young pup. I did things my way. I lifted things improperly. I worked much harder than I should have. I'm paying for it now.
If I had Google, or YouTube, I would have gotten so much more accomplished. They didn't exist back then. I was a pup running around in circles, or one...
#aging
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Loneliness Is More Hazardous to Your Health Than Obesity or Smoking
This isn't a story or a poem. This is real life. I'm writing this because many friends and family members I know are suffering. This problem has become drastically worse since 2020. We all know why...
Loneliness plays a role in many chronic health conditions, including pain, drug or alcohol abuse and depression. Recent studies have linked loneliness to an increased risk for Alzheimer's disease, heart attack and stroke, and lower survival rates for breast cancer patients. Studies have also shown that people who are lonely are more likely to experience:
Higher levels of...
Loneliness plays a role in many chronic health conditions, including pain, drug or alcohol abuse and depression. Recent studies have linked loneliness to an increased risk for Alzheimer's disease, heart attack and stroke, and lower survival rates for breast cancer patients. Studies have also shown that people who are lonely are more likely to experience:
Higher levels of...
#loneliness
#friendship
#MentalHealth
#support
#nonfiction
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First experience at Six Flags Great Adventure
In July this will mark the 40th anniversary of my 1st time at Six Flags Great Adventure in Jackson New Jersey.
Prior to Great Adventure, I had some experience with Amusement Parks. My parents and grandparents have taken me to Adventureland in Farmingdale Long Island since 1980. My first roller coaster experience was there in 1982. Accompanied by my father, I rode a coaster called the Galaxy. A simplistic, figure 8 coaster that hit speeds of 30 mph. At that time, I thought it was the greatest thing on Earth!
In 1983 my parents took my brother & I to Disney World. That...
Prior to Great Adventure, I had some experience with Amusement Parks. My parents and grandparents have taken me to Adventureland in Farmingdale Long Island since 1980. My first roller coaster experience was there in 1982. Accompanied by my father, I rode a coaster called the Galaxy. A simplistic, figure 8 coaster that hit speeds of 30 mph. At that time, I thought it was the greatest thing on Earth!
In 1983 my parents took my brother & I to Disney World. That...
#family
#anniversary
#memories
#nostalgia
#ThrillSeeking
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Journal Entry at 28 Weeks
April 3, 2024
Well, here I am, 28 weeks into this pregnancy journey. And let me tell you, one thing that's really caught me off guard is my sex drive. It's not dwindling like I thought it would—it's actually cranking up. Joseph's noticed it too, and he's pretty happy about it, to say the least.
But here's the kicker: it's not just about Joseph. Lately, I've found myself feeling even more drawn to other men, especially those who already have families of their own. It's weird, and honestly, it's a bit confusing. But it's definitely happening.
I guess pregnancy...
Well, here I am, 28 weeks into this pregnancy journey. And let me tell you, one thing that's really caught me off guard is my sex drive. It's not dwindling like I thought it would—it's actually cranking up. Joseph's noticed it too, and he's pretty happy about it, to say the least.
But here's the kicker: it's not just about Joseph. Lately, I've found myself feeling even more drawn to other men, especially those who already have families of their own. It's weird, and honestly, it's a bit confusing. But it's definitely happening.
I guess pregnancy...
#SelfReflection
#passion
#pregnancy
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2 Comments
Sea Breeze Cafe
In the tourist town of 10B, in the sea breeze cafe, I popped in for a bacon bap and a nice hot latte.
A short dumpy gremlin, whose name was Jolene, was being rude to the customers, tho she was quite pretty.
But only on the face, her greasy hair was tied back in a bun, I'm sure she just like being a b*tch and did it all for fun.
She should work at Karen's cafe, then she would be good at her job, instead of flobbing into people's cups of tea and acting like a yob.
With a screw face on and her arms folded up, she chucked the menu to the customers like...
A short dumpy gremlin, whose name was Jolene, was being rude to the customers, tho she was quite pretty.
But only on the face, her greasy hair was tied back in a bun, I'm sure she just like being a b*tch and did it all for fun.
She should work at Karen's cafe, then she would be good at her job, instead of flobbing into people's cups of tea and acting like a yob.
With a screw face on and her arms folded up, she chucked the menu to the customers like...
#birds
#beach
#holiday
#food
#travel
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Confession
#wife
#murder
#confessional
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14 Comments
Just a heads up..
I may murder my wife today.
#wife
#murder
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24 Comments
William S. Burroughs
Mr. Burroughs was possessed by genius
founding member of the Beat Generation
1st novel was Junkie
hipster subculture sweeping the nation
After WWII morphine was his choice drug
Greenwich Village heroin was sold
became an addict for the rest of his life
shooting up till he was 83 years old
In 1951 drunk in Mexico City
time for the "William Tell Act"
highball glass on his wife's head
gun shot murder, that's a fact
Naked Lunch was his biggest seller
a series of loosely connected vignettes
highly...
founding member of the Beat Generation
1st novel was Junkie
hipster subculture sweeping the nation
After WWII morphine was his choice drug
Greenwich Village heroin was sold
became an addict for the rest of his life
shooting up till he was 83 years old
In 1951 drunk in Mexico City
time for the "William Tell Act"
highball glass on his wife's head
gun shot murder, that's a fact
Naked Lunch was his biggest seller
a series of loosely connected vignettes
highly...
#rhyming
#PopCulture
#nonfiction
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8 Comments
Frozen in my cocoon
Late days sky,
Cloudy, and peering through the leaves
Winds, strong, but welcome from the Arizona heat
Wind through the Palo Verdes makes a wall of sounds
Crickets singing,
joining in harmonic convergence in my Desert, that is silently loud
Loneliness pulled from the air, a forever sound never heard
The three snowflakes and a winter leave,
They are wonderful, forming out of nowhere
Cool night blowing,
Sounds of Tucsonan stirrings
Coyote howls, Javelina grunting, picking up olives and fruits
a bat flies low, the sound of wings...
Cloudy, and peering through the leaves
Winds, strong, but welcome from the Arizona heat
Wind through the Palo Verdes makes a wall of sounds
Crickets singing,
joining in harmonic convergence in my Desert, that is silently loud
Loneliness pulled from the air, a forever sound never heard
The three snowflakes and a winter leave,
They are wonderful, forming out of nowhere
Cool night blowing,
Sounds of Tucsonan stirrings
Coyote howls, Javelina grunting, picking up olives and fruits
a bat flies low, the sound of wings...
#winter
#spring
#narrative
#nostalgia
#dawn
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1 Comment
Sunday
It is a crisp day today
And I got my thoughts
Old enough
Like stagnant clothes
Here is a jacket
Torn
That I yet do not throw
I do not know what to do with them
Yet the give me something to do
In this crisp day
Without sun
And I got my thoughts
Old enough
Like stagnant clothes
Here is a jacket
Torn
That I yet do not throw
I do not know what to do with them
Yet the give me something to do
In this crisp day
Without sun
#confessional
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9 Comments
Chocolate Bunnies
To me Easter is very similar to Thanksgiving. Lots of amazing food, desserts and family who I enjoy to be around. I am NOT a religious person at all. My immediate family aren't either. Just like Xmas, there is no true celebration in the deep meaning of what these holidays are about. It's more of a food orgy and welcoming family I don't see to often.
When I was a little kid, the house was decorated with plastic eggs, Easter bunnies, ornate, colorful, flowery decor's (purples, light greens, pink) for spring and other nick-knacks. My mother would try & encourage my...
When I was a little kid, the house was decorated with plastic eggs, Easter bunnies, ornate, colorful, flowery decor's (purples, light greens, pink) for spring and other nick-knacks. My mother would try & encourage my...
#family
#Easter
#food
#memories
#nostalgia
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8 Comments
WHEREVER YOU LEAD, I WILL FOLLOW
It's like I have made you with my very own hands
I want you to dance like I taught you every step
And my beacon will call you without any neglect
I want you standing tall even if you feel six feet deep
You're to send chills down spines with a confidence
That's more then just heard whenever you speak
I want your lips telling I’m the reason you breathe
I want for us to always slumber melded in peace
knowing you and God only know secrets I will keep
Let's build our foundation on prayer, faith, and trust
I...
I want you to dance like I taught you every step
And my beacon will call you without any neglect
I want you standing tall even if you feel six feet deep
You're to send chills down spines with a confidence
That's more then just heard whenever you speak
I want your lips telling I’m the reason you breathe
I want for us to always slumber melded in peace
knowing you and God only know secrets I will keep
Let's build our foundation on prayer, faith, and trust
I...
#ILoveYou
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4 Comments
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