Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about the universe seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
oldmanG
Poem Published
18th Dec 2024 10:25am
18th Dec 2024 10:25am
15 Billion
15 billion miles from Earth
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
#astronomy
#father
#memories
#son
#universe
53 reads
0 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
12th Dec 2024 2:03am
12th Dec 2024 2:03am
Delphic Depressions
Comingling with some foresight frets
I see a future of regrets
where the outcome is rarely good
if ever it is understood
that within a Pythian song
is all of that which could go wrong
when the hand of fate makes a fist
confirming it as nihilist
almost as if it were a god
committed to soul crushing fraud
where jubilation in our youth
decays into the painful truth
where things will seldom go our way,
even on the sunniest day,
since all the physics now in play...
are all, to death, a grand ballet.
I see a future of regrets
where the outcome is rarely good
if ever it is understood
that within a Pythian song
is all of that which could go wrong
when the hand of fate makes a fist
confirming it as nihilist
almost as if it were a god
committed to soul crushing fraud
where jubilation in our youth
decays into the painful truth
where things will seldom go our way,
even on the sunniest day,
since all the physics now in play...
are all, to death, a grand ballet.
#universe
204 reads
8 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
10th Dec 2024 2:13pm
10th Dec 2024 2:13pm
NIGHT TIME THOUGHTS
Here I am just a mortal man in the wee hours in.a beautiful, place to just unwind and shut my mind off. AS I clear out my thoughts amongst the spider webs 🕸️ of deepness of the world. For sure as I sit here amongst, the darkness in the silent of peace and tranquility. AS the fire 🔥 slowly starts warming, my body and spiritually lifting, my spirit to new highs. For it's here in this space and time, I can be free to dream as I think about, what has happen that has change, my own outlet about life. 🤔 For sure in this moment of no time. just space. I slowly began...
#evolution
#metaphor
#StreamOfConsciousness
#universe
#uplifting
98 reads
0 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
9th Dec 2024 2:03am
9th Dec 2024 2:03am
BE SOME PLACE ELSE
If you could just be able to go somewhere else, to escape for a righteous blessing. AS you become so invisible. TO the insanity from the negativity, and drama, and confusion of the world. 🌎 Where would you rather be, here amongst the deepness, of your own sanity. Feeling your spiritual pain leave your thoughts to find thyself, yet sometimes feeling still alone me myself and I. Yet you have a connection, to the outer limits of your own thoughts. ☺️ TO experience a good vibration within, this place far away from society. THAT only you can see and feel the inner vibes. Which...
#earth
#evolution
#StreamOfConsciousness
#universe
#water
80 reads
0 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
6th Dec 2024 3:52pm
6th Dec 2024 3:52pm
Ultimately Nullified
All is ruination supreme
and life a bitter joke
in desolation nightmare scream
on universal folk...
as if in horror cinema
whose cast must suffer stunts
where matter force in minima
means bearing real brunts.
Thus for sure reality sucks;
a clock just winding down
away from youth and thrilling fucks
like verbs reduced to noun.
And so to death we modify,
even during Yule,
regifting fodder when we die;
with ourselves as gruel.
and life a bitter joke
in desolation nightmare scream
on universal folk...
as if in horror cinema
whose cast must suffer stunts
where matter force in minima
means bearing real brunts.
Thus for sure reality sucks;
a clock just winding down
away from youth and thrilling fucks
like verbs reduced to noun.
And so to death we modify,
even during Yule,
regifting fodder when we die;
with ourselves as gruel.
#TruthOfLife
#universe
155 reads
10 Comments
CircleDanceSquared
AlyssaJane96
AlyssaJane96
Poem Published
5th Dec 2024 8:28pm
5th Dec 2024 8:28pm
The Lovers
What a cruel thing
To separate two lovers
So deeply intertwined and tangled
In each other
Not with surgeons hands
With precision to save a life
They hacked away with chainsaws
Cleavers, butchers knives
Now both of them are bleeding
Harsh wounds are hard to sooth
A love that once gave meaning
Now rots under the moon
Let’s be gentle with our lovers
They came from the same star
We’ve come too far to hate them
And destroy without regard
To separate two lovers
So deeply intertwined and tangled
In each other
Not with surgeons hands
With precision to save a life
They hacked away with chainsaws
Cleavers, butchers knives
Now both of them are bleeding
Harsh wounds are hard to sooth
A love that once gave meaning
Now rots under the moon
Let’s be gentle with our lovers
They came from the same star
We’ve come too far to hate them
And destroy without regard
#hurt
#love
#lover
#stars
#universe
145 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
5th Dec 2024 10:13am
5th Dec 2024 10:13am
In Front of Us
Melding metal 400000
Putting a bearing on smooth rails
Precision sailing through Panama Canal
Brush the mirror into completion
Possessive in me 200 inch disk
5 tons of glass 2 millionths of an inch perfection
Pause before barbarity task of polishing
Job is done on Mount Palomar telescoping me
Saw the life and death of stars I’m one of them
Capabilities within you it amazes me
Hubb has seen 12 billion light years in front of us
Putting a bearing on smooth rails
Precision sailing through Panama Canal
Brush the mirror into completion
Possessive in me 200 inch disk
5 tons of glass 2 millionths of an inch perfection
Pause before barbarity task of polishing
Job is done on Mount Palomar telescoping me
Saw the life and death of stars I’m one of them
Capabilities within you it amazes me
Hubb has seen 12 billion light years in front of us
#astronomy
#science
#technology #universe
#technology #universe
56 reads
0 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2024 4:47pm
2nd Dec 2024 4:47pm
Drowning In A Daylight Nightmare
Where are we heading
Human nature helplessly wondering
Mother Nature hopefully warning..
A submerged universe
By a torrent of floods curse
What is coming hope not worse..
A world of less and less meaning
For all those on the surface floating
Solid grounds nolonger touching..
To what is occurring inside unaware
Unable to see the gloom and void in the air
Drowning in a daylight nightmare..
Trapped in a web of wealth and profusion
Full to the brim the sight in confusion
Bathing in...
Human nature helplessly wondering
Mother Nature hopefully warning..
A submerged universe
By a torrent of floods curse
What is coming hope not worse..
A world of less and less meaning
For all those on the surface floating
Solid grounds nolonger touching..
To what is occurring inside unaware
Unable to see the gloom and void in the air
Drowning in a daylight nightmare..
Trapped in a web of wealth and profusion
Full to the brim the sight in confusion
Bathing in...
#humankind
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeCycle
#technology
#universe
116 reads
6 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
26th Nov 2024 5:28pm
26th Nov 2024 5:28pm
Venus
The Shepherd's Hour
The moon is red on misty horizon
Within a dancing fog, and the plains
In vapor dozing, the frog complains
Among the reeds, where chill has arisen
***
Water flowers have closed their petals
In distance far, poplars show profile
Straight and tight their ghosts unseen awhile
And between the bush, glowworms shuttle
**
The owls now awake, noiseless take flight
Rowing the black air with heavy wings
The zenith full, a fainting glow blinks
White, Venus emerges, it is Night *
...
The moon is red on misty horizon
Within a dancing fog, and the plains
In vapor dozing, the frog complains
Among the reeds, where chill has arisen
***
Water flowers have closed their petals
In distance far, poplars show profile
Straight and tight their ghosts unseen awhile
And between the bush, glowworms shuttle
**
The owls now awake, noiseless take flight
Rowing the black air with heavy wings
The zenith full, a fainting glow blinks
White, Venus emerges, it is Night *
...
#nature
#sky
#stars #universe
#stars #universe
89 reads
4 Comments
michaelslove2
Poem Published
25th Nov 2024 7:50am
25th Nov 2024 7:50am
"Dork"
Dork”
Dork from planet “Dorkus” is traveling through space.
He is dodging many asteroids to come visit this place.
Dork's ship is zipping past planets going warp factor nine.
Earth is coming into view.
Dork is making a beeline.
But why is the “Dork” coming? What does he have on his mind?
A “Dorkus” coming to our home? We better hope that he is kind.
NASA has him now on radar. They say that soon he will be in view.
All around people are wondering just what the hell they should do!
Soon NASA will have a visual of...
Dork from planet “Dorkus” is traveling through space.
He is dodging many asteroids to come visit this place.
Dork's ship is zipping past planets going warp factor nine.
Earth is coming into view.
Dork is making a beeline.
But why is the “Dork” coming? What does he have on his mind?
A “Dorkus” coming to our home? We better hope that he is kind.
NASA has him now on radar. They say that soon he will be in view.
All around people are wondering just what the hell they should do!
Soon NASA will have a visual of...
#aliens
#funny
#universe
68 reads
3 Comments
Adingtan
Dottie
Dottie
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 3:04pm
21st Nov 2024 3:04pm
Wind's song
I am the voice of the wind
The one you've forgotten
That sang lullabies to you as a child
Now I am singing a song of despair
Begging for some grown kid to remember
The soothing melodies of the sleepless nights
I am the song of the moon and the skies
The child who asked the cosmos all why's
Hear the wind's desperate cries
The one you've forgotten
That sang lullabies to you as a child
Now I am singing a song of despair
Begging for some grown kid to remember
The soothing melodies of the sleepless nights
I am the song of the moon and the skies
The child who asked the cosmos all why's
Hear the wind's desperate cries
#bittersweet
#emotions
#sadness
#universe
#wind
86 reads
2 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
19th Nov 2024 10:03pm
19th Nov 2024 10:03pm
Meanwhile Down Here on Earth
There is a new light shining in the distance
Over in the southern celestial hemisphere
The scales of fate seem to weigh in balance
Welcoming a new presence
Meanwhile down here on earth
Broken hearts
and watery eyes fixate on Libra
The constellation has given birth
As stargazers wonder and watch in awe
Replete with love the spirit is lifted
Words and verse become memories and memoirs
For in the great beyond out in the universe
She has completed her journey to the stars
Over in the southern celestial hemisphere
The scales of fate seem to weigh in balance
Welcoming a new presence
Meanwhile down here on earth
Broken hearts
and watery eyes fixate on Libra
The constellation has given birth
As stargazers wonder and watch in awe
Replete with love the spirit is lifted
Words and verse become memories and memoirs
For in the great beyond out in the universe
She has completed her journey to the stars
#death
#grief
#universe
194 reads
6 Comments
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