Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique
#universe
Poems about the universe seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
rubyredheart
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:30pm
Yesterday 6:30pm
My Sun, Moon & Stars
You are the Sun in my skies
You are the Light of my life
You help me grow
You warm my soul
You are my Sun shining bright
You are the Moon in my night
Reflecting again my light
So I may know
I have a glow
You are the Moon in my life
You are my sky-full of Stars
Immense sphere of heat. Though now far,
Still you shine here
Sparking my cheer
You are the Stars in my sky
Sun moon and stars through the years
Always in my heart most dear
In time we’ll find
Shared peace of mind...
You are the Light of my life
You help me grow
You warm my soul
You are my Sun shining bright
You are the Moon in my night
Reflecting again my light
So I may know
I have a glow
You are the Moon in my life
You are my sky-full of Stars
Immense sphere of heat. Though now far,
Still you shine here
Sparking my cheer
You are the Stars in my sky
Sun moon and stars through the years
Always in my heart most dear
In time we’ll find
Shared peace of mind...
#love
#hope
#universe
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Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
15th May 2022 9:54pm
15th May 2022 9:54pm
shorts from Lady Bracknell's Handbag
The Haunted Doll House
She screwed her eyes into
The corners of the empty nursery,
Recalling the rag doll &
Silver pair of scissors.
Horses
For those of us left behind,
We slept water in dusk cradles.
Felt the sea bubble in the foals’ lungs
When we breathed into their mouth.
The Lion, the Witch & the IKEA Wardrobe
Struggling with the lock and dark,
Lucy realised way too late,
She was in the wrong wardrobe.
Statuesque in Suburbia
In the summer of rain and batik skies...
She screwed her eyes into
The corners of the empty nursery,
Recalling the rag doll &
Silver pair of scissors.
Horses
For those of us left behind,
We slept water in dusk cradles.
Felt the sea bubble in the foals’ lungs
When we breathed into their mouth.
The Lion, the Witch & the IKEA Wardrobe
Struggling with the lock and dark,
Lucy realised way too late,
She was in the wrong wardrobe.
Statuesque in Suburbia
In the summer of rain and batik skies...
#universe
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MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
15th May 2022 5:13pm
15th May 2022 5:13pm
Monstrosity
I only see bleached bones ahead
For the entire human race;
All freshly radioactive dead
On cruise control through outer space.
They had no reason to stay alive
With God so eagerly calling them home
Where seventy seven virgins thrive
Like angels in an aerodrome!
Why keep the carcass in one piece
When afterlives are fucking great
And all the death squad hate police
We'll thank for sealing mortal fate
When all we did was waste our time
Fretting about human rights abuse
As heaven's the catch-all paradigm
For any lame...
For the entire human race;
All freshly radioactive dead
On cruise control through outer space.
They had no reason to stay alive
With God so eagerly calling them home
Where seventy seven virgins thrive
Like angels in an aerodrome!
Why keep the carcass in one piece
When afterlives are fucking great
And all the death squad hate police
We'll thank for sealing mortal fate
When all we did was waste our time
Fretting about human rights abuse
As heaven's the catch-all paradigm
For any lame...
#universe
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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
7th May 2022 5:16am
7th May 2022 5:16am
Ancient Memories Part II: The Wrath of the Golden Queen
- Ancient Memories Part II: The Wrath of the Golden Queen -
Terra Nithal had been our home for many long years. In our time there, Sapphira and I had actually allowed ourselves the luxury of losing tack of time. But now, time had caught up to us and with time came the encroachment of destiny. Sapphira was the absolute queen of that world, but her heart was also among the stars as ever it was with her people. She was the reincarnation of their legendary first queen, A'drahla, a woman who was deified long ago and worshiped in various places all across that particular galaxy. She was...
Terra Nithal had been our home for many long years. In our time there, Sapphira and I had actually allowed ourselves the luxury of losing tack of time. But now, time had caught up to us and with time came the encroachment of destiny. Sapphira was the absolute queen of that world, but her heart was also among the stars as ever it was with her people. She was the reincarnation of their legendary first queen, A'drahla, a woman who was deified long ago and worshiped in various places all across that particular galaxy. She was...
#love
#war
#universe
#ShortStory
#rebellion
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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
7th May 2022 5:12am
7th May 2022 5:12am
Ancient Memories Part I: The Darkness of Terra Nithal
- Ancient Memories Part I: The Darkness of Terra Nithal -
During the turbulent period that followed Cyndijaz Megg's total assumption of power on the planet of Gehenna Primus, a period that lasted many long and bloody years... there was very little for me to do in that time, with the new ruler preferring to lead her loyal forces personally in just about every battle that came up. She gave me leave to do whatsoever my heart directed me to, and taking her up on this I had begun to make serious plans to leave the planet for a time. In preparation for this, I named my beloved consort...
During the turbulent period that followed Cyndijaz Megg's total assumption of power on the planet of Gehenna Primus, a period that lasted many long and bloody years... there was very little for me to do in that time, with the new ruler preferring to lead her loyal forces personally in just about every battle that came up. She gave me leave to do whatsoever my heart directed me to, and taking her up on this I had begun to make serious plans to leave the planet for a time. In preparation for this, I named my beloved consort...
#love
#conflict
#universe
#ShortStory
#memories
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Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
6th May 2022 11:11pm
6th May 2022 11:11pm
Shorts from the Attic Vase
Tomb it May Concern
Kneeling at the grave
As if slumped at the altar of a bar,
The flowers I laid on the earth
Were the secrets I never shared.
“This is not an Exit.”
She peeled the full stop from
American Psycho and crept inside.
In hyphens of blood & cocaine colons,
She slit Bateman’s throat with a paper knife.
Suburban Stories #26
ONCE upon a time
There were a content couple with pretty curtains.
The End.
'Once Seen'
Wednesday, Baker Street 08:57
You: Green dress,...
Kneeling at the grave
As if slumped at the altar of a bar,
The flowers I laid on the earth
Were the secrets I never shared.
“This is not an Exit.”
She peeled the full stop from
American Psycho and crept inside.
In hyphens of blood & cocaine colons,
She slit Bateman’s throat with a paper knife.
Suburban Stories #26
ONCE upon a time
There were a content couple with pretty curtains.
The End.
'Once Seen'
Wednesday, Baker Street 08:57
You: Green dress,...
#universe
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Orc_Pirate_68
Poem Published
6th May 2022 4:21am
6th May 2022 4:21am
Traveling Death
Decay, touches us, with his cold fingertips,
So matter-of-fact, and nonchalant,
We hear the whispers, from his dead lips,
As we live, we defy, gallant, and persistent.
To live, is to be in defiance of decay,
To defy decay, is to defy the ever-present void,
Just out of reach of us, travelling the galaxy's seaway.
So matter-of-fact, and nonchalant,
We hear the whispers, from his dead lips,
As we live, we defy, gallant, and persistent.
To live, is to be in defiance of decay,
To defy decay, is to defy the ever-present void,
Just out of reach of us, travelling the galaxy's seaway.
#dark
#gothic
#death
#sea
#universe
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fieryangelsouljia
M6rr6g6n
M6rr6g6n
Poem Published
4th May 2022 6:25am
4th May 2022 6:25am
Within His Eyes
I learned to Scry
in the eyes of a witch
whose colors could shift
with the rising tide
and in those depths
I saw fractals of Time
the gods tried to weave
into something...
Something
Tangible or... manageable?
Laughable was what it became
for the days were named
and the nights, they came
and the stars were engraved
with unintelligible script
and no translation
to relieve the vacant eyes
which sat upon their
dying frames
The gods did not invent
the words...
in the eyes of a witch
whose colors could shift
with the rising tide
and in those depths
I saw fractals of Time
the gods tried to weave
into something...
Something
Tangible or... manageable?
Laughable was what it became
for the days were named
and the nights, they came
and the stars were engraved
with unintelligible script
and no translation
to relieve the vacant eyes
which sat upon their
dying frames
The gods did not invent
the words...
#universe
#stars
#spiritual
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shannonJane
Poem Published
3rd May 2022 9:43pm
3rd May 2022 9:43pm
A t o m I c
Light in my life
always glowing in the dark
Keep your UV
I'm elastic art
They spread and paint me everywhere
I am art
Dark in my life
I bring you to light and you Glow
Keep your tortch
I'm fire itself
My atoms melt
I sweat
My atoms melt
I split and come back together
My atoms melt
Vaporising before my memory eyes
always glowing in the dark
Keep your UV
I'm elastic art
They spread and paint me everywhere
I am art
Dark in my life
I bring you to light and you Glow
Keep your tortch
I'm fire itself
My atoms melt
I sweat
My atoms melt
I split and come back together
My atoms melt
Vaporising before my memory eyes
#universe
#astronomy
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CanisInc-Untis
Poem Published
3rd May 2022 10:52am
3rd May 2022 10:52am
Nightmare Nightingale
Her song is the evening diamond
Splitting light into gemless souls
Carrying them far into sunlit spaces
Her shadow – fibre that fills their holes
How skilfully she flies and hovers
From midnight to morning tree
Filling the notes of the eveningtide
Bombarding their winter-struck dreams
Her beak nocturnal piper
Drawing them like little blind mice
Sleepwalking and sleeptalking
Then she goes - a sleep slaughtering!
With lashings of her spinning tail
Tapped-in spirits released to roam
Leading these felled...
Splitting light into gemless souls
Carrying them far into sunlit spaces
Her shadow – fibre that fills their holes
How skilfully she flies and hovers
From midnight to morning tree
Filling the notes of the eveningtide
Bombarding their winter-struck dreams
Her beak nocturnal piper
Drawing them like little blind mice
Sleepwalking and sleeptalking
Then she goes - a sleep slaughtering!
With lashings of her spinning tail
Tapped-in spirits released to roam
Leading these felled...
#evil
#universe
#birds
#nightmares
#horror
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nikkimoe
Poem Published
27th Apr 2022 5:59pm
27th Apr 2022 5:59pm
Ones and Zeros
In a parallel universe
I'm probably an extremely
positive person so it's completely
acceptable that I might be a fat
minus in this time and place.
I can work with that.
Balance is key.
I'm probably an extremely
positive person so it's completely
acceptable that I might be a fat
minus in this time and place.
I can work with that.
Balance is key.
#universe
#unicorns
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
24th Apr 2022 11:21pm
24th Apr 2022 11:21pm
linger
lingering too long in the shadow lands
and in a instant vanish
traveling through space as stardust
a soul splits reassembles and becomes something different
and shine as starlit wonder
in the caverns of the unknown wander
collecting wisdom from fellow travelers
in cosmic recognition of each other
souls touch and go on their way
into the darkness to be revealed as beings of light
the dark beams to see its own unveiled
the vastness of space is daunting
there is no time like now to rise
hearken the angel's path
be...
and in a instant vanish
traveling through space as stardust
a soul splits reassembles and becomes something different
and shine as starlit wonder
in the caverns of the unknown wander
collecting wisdom from fellow travelers
in cosmic recognition of each other
souls touch and go on their way
into the darkness to be revealed as beings of light
the dark beams to see its own unveiled
the vastness of space is daunting
there is no time like now to rise
hearken the angel's path
be...
#universe
#stars
#philosophical
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2 Comments
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