Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique
#universe
Poems about the universe seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
JohnnyBlaze
Poem Published
3rd Dec 2021 12:35pm
3rd Dec 2021 12:35pm
D I S T R I B U T A R Y
Everything desirable
or deemed necessary
pours from an abundance
often referred to as God
greeting you in the flowing
stream your daily existence is
until convinced otherwise
---there is not enough
food on the table
shelter from the elements
pure oxygen for breathing
time to accomplish goals
money in any pocket
physical health
companionship
purpose to Life
Love to go around
And when this happens
misery is experienced
in all of its glorious
abundance as well'ed
...
or deemed necessary
pours from an abundance
often referred to as God
greeting you in the flowing
stream your daily existence is
until convinced otherwise
---there is not enough
food on the table
shelter from the elements
pure oxygen for breathing
time to accomplish goals
money in any pocket
physical health
companionship
purpose to Life
Love to go around
And when this happens
misery is experienced
in all of its glorious
abundance as well'ed
...
#universe
#spiritual
44 reads
2 Comments
Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2021 10:16pm
2nd Dec 2021 10:16pm
Sing Your Love
Beyond all mist
Remember only this,
You were loved.
Is there anything more
Mere mortals can wish for?
Some talk of revolution,
But in the dead of night
There is no warmth in a gun.
One day,
A solitary ship will sail the ocean
Cast overboard its plundered treasure
And seek comfort in the last lighthouse.
Memories remain in the
Grass in the rain,
Sun on the sea,
Small toys on Christmas trees.
Mum’s last word to Sue and me was “sing.” She nil-by-mouth at this stage. We were trying to...
Remember only this,
You were loved.
Is there anything more
Mere mortals can wish for?
Some talk of revolution,
But in the dead of night
There is no warmth in a gun.
One day,
A solitary ship will sail the ocean
Cast overboard its plundered treasure
And seek comfort in the last lighthouse.
Memories remain in the
Grass in the rain,
Sun on the sea,
Small toys on Christmas trees.
Mum’s last word to Sue and me was “sing.” She nil-by-mouth at this stage. We were trying to...
#love
#death
#universe
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0 Comments
Wired6
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2021 2:48pm
2nd Dec 2021 2:48pm
1,2,3
Yes,that's free----1,2+3=6
©Wired6.28/10/2021
©Wired6.28/10/2021
#universe
#symbolism
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Wired6
Poem Published
29th Nov 2021 11:31pm
29th Nov 2021 11:31pm
Imperceptible 2 The Touch.
Just Like gravity,
this entity is a natural Law.
No vengeance lives,
just Justice and fairness
2 everything and every one involved.
A Divine simplicity,
yet complex,in its form.
You must remember,through all thoughts,
via action,this entity,distributes consequences,
dark or light,or both,2 all.
This entity,we know(or do we know?),
As "Karma"- A great cosmic teacher,
We cannot ignore.
One of the most important laws,governing our human lives.
2 evolve,we must experience the Karmic nature oscillating ...
this entity is a natural Law.
No vengeance lives,
just Justice and fairness
2 everything and every one involved.
A Divine simplicity,
yet complex,in its form.
You must remember,through all thoughts,
via action,this entity,distributes consequences,
dark or light,or both,2 all.
This entity,we know(or do we know?),
As "Karma"- A great cosmic teacher,
We cannot ignore.
One of the most important laws,governing our human lives.
2 evolve,we must experience the Karmic nature oscillating ...
#universe
#evolution
43 reads
0 Comments
Keilani
Poem Published
29th Nov 2021 6:30pm
29th Nov 2021 6:30pm
Cadence…
he looked up
and said to me
in a moment
of reverie
Is that not everything
or
at least
well
the tapping rain
when reaching ground
cycles of the
ocean’s tides
fractal beauty
that resides
so openly
or drawn
in music
implicitly
the mathematics
of our beating heart
an orchestra
of pulsing blood
patterns ...
and said to me
in a moment
of reverie
Is that not everything
or
at least
well
the tapping rain
when reaching ground
cycles of the
ocean’s tides
fractal beauty
that resides
so openly
or drawn
in music
implicitly
the mathematics
of our beating heart
an orchestra
of pulsing blood
patterns ...
#universe
#nature
68 reads
6 Comments
Wired6
Poem Published
27th Nov 2021 6:27am
27th Nov 2021 6:27am
_------------
---------------------------∆∆∆
∆∆∆∆∆∆------------Illuminate Me-------∆∆∆
∆∆∆
------------------------------∆∆∆-------∆∆∆
-------------3+3=Mysterious Lady---------
-------------∆-∆-∆
©Wired6.12/11/2021
---------------------------∆∆∆
∆∆∆∆∆∆------------Illuminate Me-------∆∆∆
∆∆∆
------------------------------∆∆∆-------∆∆∆
-------------3+3=Mysterious Lady---------
-------------∆-∆-∆
©Wired6.12/11/2021
#universe
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Keilani
Poem Published
26th Nov 2021 2:51pm
26th Nov 2021 2:51pm
Poetry and Prophecy
Where the madness of darkness swirls
in a cauldron of silence
calm and frenzied second death
Sleeping mortals
of dreams and astral awakenings
freed from the manacles of day
slumber in midnight wings
their souls resurrect
Then we poets
rise with lighted veins
soothsayer and sage to all the realm
that is human
Art of lunacy and logic birth
ruby liquored hymns
in silken song
liberating Heaven’s tears
of merciful rain
showering prophecy’s lonely gift
through our pen ...
in a cauldron of silence
calm and frenzied second death
Sleeping mortals
of dreams and astral awakenings
freed from the manacles of day
slumber in midnight wings
their souls resurrect
Then we poets
rise with lighted veins
soothsayer and sage to all the realm
that is human
Art of lunacy and logic birth
ruby liquored hymns
in silken song
liberating Heaven’s tears
of merciful rain
showering prophecy’s lonely gift
through our pen ...
#universe
42 reads
4 Comments
Wired6
Poem Published
26th Nov 2021 10:52am
26th Nov 2021 10:52am
River And Honey.
Hail Lady Of River And Honey.
Full Of Grace You Be.
We approach you
with open arms
knowing we're barely
open 2 the demands
you place on We.
Hail Lady Of River And Honey.
We Implore You
2
Set Us Free.
Remove The Shackles
That Bind Our Destiny.
And
Set Us Free.
Free 2 Learn
Free 2 Scream
Free 2 Believe.
©Wired6. 29/08/2021
Full Of Grace You Be.
We approach you
with open arms
knowing we're barely
open 2 the demands
you place on We.
Hail Lady Of River And Honey.
We Implore You
2
Set Us Free.
Remove The Shackles
That Bind Our Destiny.
And
Set Us Free.
Free 2 Learn
Free 2 Scream
Free 2 Believe.
©Wired6. 29/08/2021
#universe
33 reads
2 Comments
Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
24th Nov 2021 00:00am
24th Nov 2021 00:00am
'I have mislaid the torment and the fear'
The cold
Withers the sky,
Corpse-grey bandage
Shrouds the sea skin.
Alone on the beach
Seeking syllables in the sand,
Semaphore of my flagging heart
Braille blinks to Gods of indifference.
Smokey breath of seventh cigarette
Wisps a muddy patina on ocean table.
Heavenly (en)trails
Tear guts from clouds,
In pumice schorls
Deep-sleep rain shoals
Sail too close to a heart,
Raw & tender- as if slain
On a butcher’s slab.
Brined broken^breakers
Breach the headland, ...
Withers the sky,
Corpse-grey bandage
Shrouds the sea skin.
Alone on the beach
Seeking syllables in the sand,
Semaphore of my flagging heart
Braille blinks to Gods of indifference.
Smokey breath of seventh cigarette
Wisps a muddy patina on ocean table.
Heavenly (en)trails
Tear guts from clouds,
In pumice schorls
Deep-sleep rain shoals
Sail too close to a heart,
Raw & tender- as if slain
On a butcher’s slab.
Brined broken^breakers
Breach the headland, ...
#sea
#universe
#beach #ghosts
#beach #ghosts
81 reads
3 Comments
juliagkrimmel
daisygirl
daisygirl
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2021 2:00am
23rd Nov 2021 2:00am
vessel
everything is heavy
and im am a weak vessel
that can't uphold the masses
im weak from my own insecurities
that fuel my distaste to eat
and leave me worthless
and breathless
and exhausted
im weak from social affairs
and people with sick intentions
who crack open my once beautiful vessel
and consume the parts of me i wanted to keep
maybe they donnt mean to destory mee
but they do, and I let them
i take each hit as they come
openly
fully
even worse
i like the pain, i chase the pain ...
and im am a weak vessel
that can't uphold the masses
im weak from my own insecurities
that fuel my distaste to eat
and leave me worthless
and breathless
and exhausted
im weak from social affairs
and people with sick intentions
who crack open my once beautiful vessel
and consume the parts of me i wanted to keep
maybe they donnt mean to destory mee
but they do, and I let them
i take each hit as they come
openly
fully
even worse
i like the pain, i chase the pain ...
#anxiety
#grief
#loneliness
#universe
#emptiness
49 reads
2 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Poem Published
18th Nov 2021 1:09pm
18th Nov 2021 1:09pm
The Eternal Stage
In that moment her eyes said wait,
but all the hopes and desires
of the Universe looked past her.
Alone in her plea, we were specks of flesh on an eternal stage
where crashing lives are created and broken.
We chose to dance to ancient rhythms that would direct us in silence.
There were no lines of dialogue written for these moments,
only movement.
There were no thoughts of the future,
only an eternal now.
In the footlights we became the play as all other human forms faded.
Waves of lust poured from flesh to...
but all the hopes and desires
of the Universe looked past her.
Alone in her plea, we were specks of flesh on an eternal stage
where crashing lives are created and broken.
We chose to dance to ancient rhythms that would direct us in silence.
There were no lines of dialogue written for these moments,
only movement.
There were no thoughts of the future,
only an eternal now.
In the footlights we became the play as all other human forms faded.
Waves of lust poured from flesh to...
#lust
#sex
#universe
99 reads
2 Comments
theyrejustwords
Poem Published
16th Nov 2021 5:53pm
16th Nov 2021 5:53pm
harmonious
spinning
around the sun
on an axis
in my chair
the motion sickness creeps in
I begin to float away
my frequency is off
my atoms and soul vibrating lawlessly
soon I will be a phantasm
bond to me
so that we may spin together
through the stars as one
around the sun
on an axis
in my chair
the motion sickness creeps in
I begin to float away
my frequency is off
my atoms and soul vibrating lawlessly
soon I will be a phantasm
bond to me
so that we may spin together
through the stars as one
#universe
#stars
#spiritual
#lover
#meditation
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