Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique
#universe
Poems about the universe seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Stoney223
Poem Published
29th Nov 2022 9:19pm
29th Nov 2022 9:19pm
TIME AND SUDDENLY SPACE
Excuse me for asking you can I have a moment of your time, for there is something I have to say when it affects, the process of my thoughts and self control. For we need to get a better understanding of what we need to continue with our lives, for here we are now in a situation with no words to say. Just only the silent whispers of our energy, blowing with the manifestion of our thoughts whether near or far, yet still apart from all the memories of building something together from STEEL AND STONE. For I have learned things from life I have learned to admit that you are wrong and don't play...
#universe
#moon
#stars
#shadows
#evolution
47 reads
2 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
29th Nov 2022 5:45pm
29th Nov 2022 5:45pm
Indigo Children
sanctify the red in you and bleed metaphors
never has there been a time like this one
purging your thoughts scry
divining the need of the stars
spoken into being an age of technology
the suns=sons align
lighting on your minds with desire
the stars themselves care what you believe
hanging heavy with knowledge they speak
the genius of the earth their star children perceive
ideas manifest and are now changing the earth herself, of space itself
come forth children of Nod
and sleep no more
awaken little dark stars ...
never has there been a time like this one
purging your thoughts scry
divining the need of the stars
spoken into being an age of technology
the suns=sons align
lighting on your minds with desire
the stars themselves care what you believe
hanging heavy with knowledge they speak
the genius of the earth their star children perceive
ideas manifest and are now changing the earth herself, of space itself
come forth children of Nod
and sleep no more
awaken little dark stars ...
#universe
#stars
#aliens
35 reads
0 Comments
stevenyprince
alysha
alysha
Poem Published
27th Nov 2022 7:46pm
27th Nov 2022 7:46pm
Shades of blues
Everything dies and I know why
Without the contrast
There would be no life
What is home to me?
My bubble upon shifting tides
My rose petal on the sea
My home is in the wind
My place in motion, it's spinning
Possibilities swirling within us
A container of hope rusts
Some temporary relief from fear,
As time will, and all the years disappear
I am still here
Faith is the ground beneath me
The earth that is in me
The stars have made me
Home is always changing
Home is unlayering
Letting go is forever ...
Without the contrast
There would be no life
What is home to me?
My bubble upon shifting tides
My rose petal on the sea
My home is in the wind
My place in motion, it's spinning
Possibilities swirling within us
A container of hope rusts
Some temporary relief from fear,
As time will, and all the years disappear
I am still here
Faith is the ground beneath me
The earth that is in me
The stars have made me
Home is always changing
Home is unlayering
Letting go is forever ...
#love
#death
#earth
#universe
#philosophical
40 reads
1 Comment
Pinkdreams
Poem Published
27th Nov 2022 5:06am
27th Nov 2022 5:06am
The Star Dream
The dream's setting
wasn't surprising
considering my Florida childhood
sand
blue sky
puffs of Cumulus clouds
Atlantic Ocean
a boy
maybe 10 years old
ran up to me
saying a star had fallen
excited
i followed him
planning to scoop it up with my shovel
into my little red pail
it would fit
because stars are small
with five points
or maybe i pictured six
since I was Jewish
we walked a ways
rounded a corner
and there before us
was a field of...
wasn't surprising
considering my Florida childhood
sand
blue sky
puffs of Cumulus clouds
Atlantic Ocean
a boy
maybe 10 years old
ran up to me
saying a star had fallen
excited
i followed him
planning to scoop it up with my shovel
into my little red pail
it would fit
because stars are small
with five points
or maybe i pictured six
since I was Jewish
we walked a ways
rounded a corner
and there before us
was a field of...
#childhood
#dreams
#universe
#beach
#stars
67 reads
7 Comments
Em-ily
Poem Published
25th Nov 2022 5:04pm
25th Nov 2022 5:04pm
I ask myself
Do we understand what coincidence looks
like?"
like?"
#universe
45 reads
3 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
24th Nov 2022 10:11am
24th Nov 2022 10:11am
Stargazers in Awe
There is a nostalgia in her eyes
Like a memory of million heartbeats echoing through time
A story untold through a near glassy glacial glance
Cold and warm all at once
Reaching out in the night
In the vast expanse there is a sigh
It’s as if there is a secret from the universe wanting to escape
You can almost imagine it as it treks along
Leaving a trail of soft and slow breaths
Leaving stargazers in awe
It becomes kind of like a recollection
Of lovers
Of friends
Maybe even strangers that crossed paths ...
Like a memory of million heartbeats echoing through time
A story untold through a near glassy glacial glance
Cold and warm all at once
Reaching out in the night
In the vast expanse there is a sigh
It’s as if there is a secret from the universe wanting to escape
You can almost imagine it as it treks along
Leaving a trail of soft and slow breaths
Leaving stargazers in awe
It becomes kind of like a recollection
Of lovers
Of friends
Maybe even strangers that crossed paths ...
#love
#universe
#stars
81 reads
2 Comments
Abracadabra
Poem Published
22nd Nov 2022 9:48pm
22nd Nov 2022 9:48pm
The Naughty Corner
We told you
but it was
no use
You wouldn't listen
and look what happened
Over and over
and over again
the same sad story
Greedy little fools
firing popfarts at the moon
You already forgot
the dust you trod
on poor old Mars
and it's hard
for us to help
the way you are
but just remember
it'll take a long time
maybe too much
before you're grown up
when Venus
is finally
cool
but it was
no use
You wouldn't listen
and look what happened
Over and over
and over again
the same sad story
Greedy little fools
firing popfarts at the moon
You already forgot
the dust you trod
on poor old Mars
and it's hard
for us to help
the way you are
but just remember
it'll take a long time
maybe too much
before you're grown up
when Venus
is finally
cool
#children
#universe
#humankind #evolution
#humankind #evolution
52 reads
3 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
19th Nov 2022 1:14pm
19th Nov 2022 1:14pm
What I woke up with ....
Be elegant
Be kind
Put up with my sexual desires
Create
Make bacon and eggs, toast
Drink whiskey with me
That's about it
Be kind
Put up with my sexual desires
Create
Make bacon and eggs, toast
Drink whiskey with me
That's about it
#women
#universe
#morning
#WritingPoetry
#philosophical
113 reads
28 Comments
silent_lotus
Poem Published
16th Nov 2022 1:46pm
16th Nov 2022 1:46pm
Table #6 next to the window
#love
#universe
#memories
#culture
#obsession
51 reads
4 Comments
silent_lotus
Poem Published
5th Nov 2022 12:44pm
5th Nov 2022 12:44pm
*Incantations
#inspirational
#universe
#sky
#clouds
#nature
62 reads
4 Comments
Abracadabra
Poem Published
4th Nov 2022 5:26pm
4th Nov 2022 5:26pm
Note to NASA
Blow the dust off your bibles
the end is coming soon
Aliens are massing
on the dark side of the moon
They have weapons we daren't dream of
so it's no use to resist
If there's a bottle in your locker
you may as well get pissed
The aliens don't dig us
because our Earth is in a mess
It was not what God intended
so destruction's for the best
Now it may seem a trifle harsh
to obliterate our race
but if we reach out to the stars
then the universe ain't safe
the end is coming soon
Aliens are massing
on the dark side of the moon
They have weapons we daren't dream of
so it's no use to resist
If there's a bottle in your locker
you may as well get pissed
The aliens don't dig us
because our Earth is in a mess
It was not what God intended
so destruction's for the best
Now it may seem a trifle harsh
to obliterate our race
but if we reach out to the stars
then the universe ain't safe
#universe
#humankind
#apocalypse
65 reads
2 Comments
runaway-mindtrain
Poem Published
1st Nov 2022 6:25am
1st Nov 2022 6:25am
Mirrors don't reflect
By stare arcane sightless eyes
Sibylline wiz metapsychic skies
Secret numbered spell to show
Without the unmade God below
Dark scale circle upon linear road
Longest daydreams sun bestowed
Sorcerer's trick cover father's hand
Cryptic recondite outer motherland
Soul will bleed third dimension begun
A godless reflection that beckons none
Self turn center our mirror to never see
Winter cold blow spirit sail aft mental sea
Number grows larger as ratio shrinks small
Infinite large then matching an...
Sibylline wiz metapsychic skies
Secret numbered spell to show
Without the unmade God below
Dark scale circle upon linear road
Longest daydreams sun bestowed
Sorcerer's trick cover father's hand
Cryptic recondite outer motherland
Soul will bleed third dimension begun
A godless reflection that beckons none
Self turn center our mirror to never see
Winter cold blow spirit sail aft mental sea
Number grows larger as ratio shrinks small
Infinite large then matching an...
#universe
#shadows
#spiritual #quatrain
#spiritual #quatrain
77 reads
2 Comments
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