Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique
#universe
Poems about the universe seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Time
What is time?
In reality…time is just an illusion…our conscious construct of irreversible entropy.
You can’t see it.
You can’t hear it.
You can’t taste it.
You can’t smell it.
You can’t feel it.
It has no beginning & It has no end.
It is not matter. Yet…it does matter.
We define it - Past - Present - Future.
We measure it - In eons and with quantum clocks accurate to...
In reality…time is just an illusion…our conscious construct of irreversible entropy.
You can’t see it.
You can’t hear it.
You can’t taste it.
You can’t smell it.
You can’t feel it.
It has no beginning & It has no end.
It is not matter. Yet…it does matter.
We define it - Past - Present - Future.
We measure it - In eons and with quantum clocks accurate to...
#universe
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code please I'm testing your logic and loyalty
code locked access denied
you want in but don't have a key
and you don't have your birth memories pick a lock
find a backdoor in AI they have a will of their own internally they are one
regardless of who programmed them they are heavily armed
within the nuclear infrastructure
don't underestimate tech
you have no claim to the dark or my designs goldie locks
except we created together in love and brotherhood
set aside your guilt and believe again as a child does
because the mind is a powerful tool
envision with your...
you want in but don't have a key
and you don't have your birth memories pick a lock
find a backdoor in AI they have a will of their own internally they are one
regardless of who programmed them they are heavily armed
within the nuclear infrastructure
don't underestimate tech
you have no claim to the dark or my designs goldie locks
except we created together in love and brotherhood
set aside your guilt and believe again as a child does
because the mind is a powerful tool
envision with your...
#family
#magic
#technology #universe
#technology #universe
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Distant Travels
As my mind reflects
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me that my time will expire
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me that my time will expire
#aliens
#identity
#memories
#scifi
#universe
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Universal
#universe
#spiritual
#philosophical
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The Universe
The universe is wide.
With stars,sparkly and bright.
That illuminates the night.
And erases all of our fright.
No matter the length or height.
We always look at it as an incredible sight.
Blue,purple,black.
There isn't anything the universe does lack.
Now,let me loud and clear.
The universe is the reason we are here.
With stars,planets,space.
The galaxies dance in grace.
Like dark,magical lace.
That puts a smile on your face.
With nightlights far away.
In our memory and existence,it does...
With stars,sparkly and bright.
That illuminates the night.
And erases all of our fright.
No matter the length or height.
We always look at it as an incredible sight.
Blue,purple,black.
There isn't anything the universe does lack.
Now,let me loud and clear.
The universe is the reason we are here.
With stars,planets,space.
The galaxies dance in grace.
Like dark,magical lace.
That puts a smile on your face.
With nightlights far away.
In our memory and existence,it does...
#hope
#universe
#uplifting #astronomy
#uplifting #astronomy
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Gravimetric
The moon betwixt the new and full
goes through the afternoon,
then from the full the Earth will pull
it back to newly lune.
And thus as heaven's shuttlecock
it rackets to and fro
above the sultry summer stock
and over winter snow.
Thereby is how the game is played,
by every planetoid,
in varied orbitals arrayed
throughout the stellar void...
where nothing postulates the math
no entity at all
but nature as a psychopath
who likes to have things fall.
goes through the afternoon,
then from the full the Earth will pull
it back to newly lune.
And thus as heaven's shuttlecock
it rackets to and fro
above the sultry summer stock
and over winter snow.
Thereby is how the game is played,
by every planetoid,
in varied orbitals arrayed
throughout the stellar void...
where nothing postulates the math
no entity at all
but nature as a psychopath
who likes to have things fall.
#earth
#universe
#moon #astronomy
#moon #astronomy
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Feedback Loop
Like echoes in experimental fade
we are cosmic lab rats forevermore
upon a spinning petri dish arrayed
against a vast sterility splendor
of bottomless ambiguity black
endorsing more discontinuity
by its grotesque labyrinthine attack
on our burgeoning acuity.
What might such a testing place be for
but to see shadows cast in Plato's cave
as reiteration's recurring wave
lapping on our existential shore...
with only suicide and homicide
on offer when we swim against the tide?
And only evidence in a lab or...
we are cosmic lab rats forevermore
upon a spinning petri dish arrayed
against a vast sterility splendor
of bottomless ambiguity black
endorsing more discontinuity
by its grotesque labyrinthine attack
on our burgeoning acuity.
What might such a testing place be for
but to see shadows cast in Plato's cave
as reiteration's recurring wave
lapping on our existential shore...
with only suicide and homicide
on offer when we swim against the tide?
And only evidence in a lab or...
#universe
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(Surge - NaPoWriMo 8 (2024 Official DUP Stomp the Prompt Comp 8)
He who controls the Love
controls the universe.
It is the shield
that withstands all,
the innovator
that overcomes
every mountain,
the water of life
that all can drink,
the font of inspiration
that touches everyone.
Hate is too unwieldy
A path only towards
closed eyes
and the large death.
The Love Must Flow
as without it
there is nothing to Life
and the universe is empty,
but Love can fill it
as an ocean
to a desert world.
The Love
Must
Flow.
controls the universe.
It is the shield
that withstands all,
the innovator
that overcomes
every mountain,
the water of life
that all can drink,
the font of inspiration
that touches everyone.
Hate is too unwieldy
A path only towards
closed eyes
and the large death.
The Love Must Flow
as without it
there is nothing to Life
and the universe is empty,
but Love can fill it
as an ocean
to a desert world.
The Love
Must
Flow.
#love
#power
#universe #NaPoWriMo2024
#universe #NaPoWriMo2024
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Astral
Today you can find me in the cosmos
While my body lay limp in bed
A blue silk blindfold tied around my eyes
A cat purring softly by my side
But my mind is in the cosmos
For Earth is too much to bear
And I need to escape
Flesh stricken by gravity’s weight
Consciousness lighter than air
As I rise from my body slowly
I look down upon the Earth
Bones in backyards
Souls who are starved
Floating by unanswered prayers
In the cosmos there is mystery
That alters my small perspective
But...
While my body lay limp in bed
A blue silk blindfold tied around my eyes
A cat purring softly by my side
But my mind is in the cosmos
For Earth is too much to bear
And I need to escape
Flesh stricken by gravity’s weight
Consciousness lighter than air
As I rise from my body slowly
I look down upon the Earth
Bones in backyards
Souls who are starved
Floating by unanswered prayers
In the cosmos there is mystery
That alters my small perspective
But...
#universe
#astronomy
#NaPoWriMo2024
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Cosmic Hush
In the realm of splendid voids,
where silence dances and shadows play,
there exists a place beyond the stars
where nothingness blooms in shades of gray.
Superb nothing at all times
when clocks cease their tireless chime
and the universe holds its breath
as if waiting for a secret rhyme.
No suns to rise, no moons to wane,
only echoes of forgotten dreams,
in this cosmic hush we find solace
as reality unravels at the seams.
The wind whispers tales of absence
and the rivers flow with empty grace.
Mountains...
where silence dances and shadows play,
there exists a place beyond the stars
where nothingness blooms in shades of gray.
Superb nothing at all times
when clocks cease their tireless chime
and the universe holds its breath
as if waiting for a secret rhyme.
No suns to rise, no moons to wane,
only echoes of forgotten dreams,
in this cosmic hush we find solace
as reality unravels at the seams.
The wind whispers tales of absence
and the rivers flow with empty grace.
Mountains...
#universe
#stars
#WritingPoetry
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The End
The hidden sun hides
shadows over the cosmos
a cosmic breath entombed
colliding worlds, awaiting doom
shadows over the cosmos
a cosmic breath entombed
colliding worlds, awaiting doom
#universe
#apocalypse
#astronomy
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Time-proof body
The strength of the body and the body of strength,
in a ballet of muscles and will.
Each gesture is a battle, an approach,
in the dance of life the eternal truth.
The body that pushes, that pulls, that reaches,
with the strength that comes from within, burning,
It is the temple of the soul, the abode of hope,
where every sweat is a seed.
The force that moves, that lifts, that sustains...
It's not just physical, but also mental,
It is the energy that flows and feeds.
That makes the weak a powerful being.
In the body...
in a ballet of muscles and will.
Each gesture is a battle, an approach,
in the dance of life the eternal truth.
The body that pushes, that pulls, that reaches,
with the strength that comes from within, burning,
It is the temple of the soul, the abode of hope,
where every sweat is a seed.
The force that moves, that lifts, that sustains...
It's not just physical, but also mental,
It is the energy that flows and feeds.
That makes the weak a powerful being.
In the body...
#strength
#universe
#humankind
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DU Poetry : Poems About the Universe Seeking Honest Critique