Poems About Sleep Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about sleep seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
PAR
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2025 4:38pm
23rd Jan 2025 4:38pm
Two Cats
In the soft glow of evening
two cats lie together.
Their breaths steady
tails gently twitching in dreams.
Their whiskers quiver,
paws knead the air,
murmurs of sleep talk
escape their parted lips.
One purrs deeply,
a sound like distant thunder.
The other replies,
a softer rhythmic hum.
Their bodies rise and fall
with each contented sigh,
In this tranquil moment
all is almost quiet and serene.
You watch over them,
heart swelling with love,
Each sound, each movement, ...
two cats lie together.
Their breaths steady
tails gently twitching in dreams.
Their whiskers quiver,
paws knead the air,
murmurs of sleep talk
escape their parted lips.
One purrs deeply,
a sound like distant thunder.
The other replies,
a softer rhythmic hum.
Their bodies rise and fall
with each contented sigh,
In this tranquil moment
all is almost quiet and serene.
You watch over them,
heart swelling with love,
Each sound, each movement, ...
#beauty
#cats
#dreams
#love
#sleep
75 reads
8 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 11:17am
18th Jan 2025 11:17am
it all smells a bit iffy
time and space are irrelevant when
we’re tucked up in bed, and yes I know
that the alarm clock has gone off,
but we can always get a new one ..
we’re tucked up in bed, and yes I know
that the alarm clock has gone off,
but we can always get a new one ..
#sleep
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1 Comment
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
16th Jan 2025 7:02pm
16th Jan 2025 7:02pm
~sleep mode
sleep mode
..
but where is it
when pain had seeped in
..in the continuous mumblings
of immobilised desperations
those indistinct murmurs
pitch a sudden high
as unbelievably
peaking lucidities
glowering as angered
red sparking embers
in their many pointed shout outs
of a deadening pace.. wrapped
up shockingly.. with low
alternating troughs.. of
as if an enacted thorough
begging.. with some
quick silvered dark twist
of frightening frustrations, in
a busted...
..
but where is it
when pain had seeped in
..in the continuous mumblings
of immobilised desperations
those indistinct murmurs
pitch a sudden high
as unbelievably
peaking lucidities
glowering as angered
red sparking embers
in their many pointed shout outs
of a deadening pace.. wrapped
up shockingly.. with low
alternating troughs.. of
as if an enacted thorough
begging.. with some
quick silvered dark twist
of frightening frustrations, in
a busted...
#death
#hurt
#night
#sadness
#sleep
133 reads
3 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
15th Jan 2025 1:03am
15th Jan 2025 1:03am
2 am
go to bed,
you’ve got to be up early
in the morning
I’ll be tired,
whatever
you said
you’ve got to be up early
in the morning
I’ll be tired,
whatever
you said
#sleep
50 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Jan 2025 11:11am
14th Jan 2025 11:11am
Awake All Night
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
When I go in to bed and close my eyes
Only bad things rolling in my mind
Maybe something in my history
Maybe everything in my memory
Maybe nothing, maybe that full fucking moon last night
I don't know, but I want sleep
This is driving me crazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
During the day I'll be lazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
Have a dream, to sleep forever
I need my...
I don’t know what is wrong with me
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
When I go in to bed and close my eyes
Only bad things rolling in my mind
Maybe something in my history
Maybe everything in my memory
Maybe nothing, maybe that full fucking moon last night
I don't know, but I want sleep
This is driving me crazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
During the day I'll be lazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
Have a dream, to sleep forever
I need my...
#myself
#SelfReflection
#sleep
85 reads
6 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
4th Jan 2025 1:39pm
4th Jan 2025 1:39pm
awoken too early
woke up, wondered what time
it was certainly early
victorian, perhaps early to mid
all the conjecture I fell back
asleep
it was certainly early
victorian, perhaps early to mid
all the conjecture I fell back
asleep
#sleep
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 11:54am
3rd Jan 2025 11:54am
4:36 AM
4:36 am, still can't sleep
I think I did everything completely wrong
All I know is...
When you use to touch me
I would think of all of those different men
Fucking my sister & mother at the same time
My hatred towards them, came out towards you
You're in a much better place now
And so am I
One day if i ever get out, I will visit you, for sure
I think I did everything completely wrong
All I know is...
When you use to touch me
I would think of all of those different men
Fucking my sister & mother at the same time
My hatred towards them, came out towards you
You're in a much better place now
And so am I
One day if i ever get out, I will visit you, for sure
#dark
#memories
#regret #sleep
#regret #sleep
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 11:49am
3rd Jan 2025 11:49am
3:15 AM
You're alive but in this room you're a ghost
The last few nights you have come to haunt me
It's 3:15 am
The room is getting smaller
I think about what they did to you
I tried to make you see that I was different
Maybe you saw something I didn't see
Perhaps you saw them in my eyes
I'll never see you again
It's never been the same
I feel like I have failed
So old & final
This night breaks Father Time's nose
The last few nights you have come to haunt me
It's 3:15 am
The room is getting smaller
I think about what they did to you
I tried to make you see that I was different
Maybe you saw something I didn't see
Perhaps you saw them in my eyes
I'll never see you again
It's never been the same
I feel like I have failed
So old & final
This night breaks Father Time's nose
#hurt
#memories
#relationships #sleep
#relationships #sleep
83 reads
14 Comments
skymikan
Poem Published
29th Dec 2024 11:11am
29th Dec 2024 11:11am
Dreams
If the lyrics of the songs
could come to life,
I wouldn’t invent the dark
to echo back your strife.
If the verses of the poems
could breathe and thrive,
I’d keep a stiff upper lip
with determined eyes.
If the colors of the sky
could linger for a while,
but it ended in darkness,
a meaningful goodbye.
If the sunrise could be
as golden as today,
I wouldn’t eat alone
or listen to hearsay.
If dreams could come true,
I’d give them all to you,
but now they’re short-lived—
the red...
could come to life,
I wouldn’t invent the dark
to echo back your strife.
If the verses of the poems
could breathe and thrive,
I’d keep a stiff upper lip
with determined eyes.
If the colors of the sky
could linger for a while,
but it ended in darkness,
a meaningful goodbye.
If the sunrise could be
as golden as today,
I wouldn’t eat alone
or listen to hearsay.
If dreams could come true,
I’d give them all to you,
but now they’re short-lived—
the red...
#dreams
#sleep
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
26th Dec 2024 3:44pm
26th Dec 2024 3:44pm
Jagged Carvings
I’ve seen it, by the dim lamp’s glow, I’ve seen it
Totem speaks truths no man seen writ
I bow to whispers, spectral and vast
My limbs grow cold; this trance shall last
The walls dissolve—oh, what madness reveals!
The mind unfurls, its ancient seals
The red sigils glow, their meaning I glean
Too late, I know—no man should have seen
I believe I shall perish, by knowledge undone
Yet in this dream, I am the one
I saw the carvings, etched by hands long decayed
Marks of old dreamers, their warnings betrayed
Symbols crawl and shift...
Totem speaks truths no man seen writ
I bow to whispers, spectral and vast
My limbs grow cold; this trance shall last
The walls dissolve—oh, what madness reveals!
The mind unfurls, its ancient seals
The red sigils glow, their meaning I glean
Too late, I know—no man should have seen
I believe I shall perish, by knowledge undone
Yet in this dream, I am the one
I saw the carvings, etched by hands long decayed
Marks of old dreamers, their warnings betrayed
Symbols crawl and shift...
#curse
#dreams
#night
#nightmares
#sleep
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summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
21st Dec 2024 4:07pm
21st Dec 2024 4:07pm
~many embryonic sleeps.. in love
Viz: sleep
#love
#sleep
#birth
#death
#meditation
86 reads
0 Comments
s0_obscen3
s0_Obscene
s0_Obscene
Poem Published
19th Dec 2024 8:24pm
19th Dec 2024 8:24pm
Let them be alien
Mouthfuls of mindfulness
invading my senses
inhaling , patience complacence
what is this foul fragrance
unfamiliar, alien
yet verbatim
a sleepless ultimatum
or let them be alien?
invading my senses
inhaling , patience complacence
what is this foul fragrance
unfamiliar, alien
yet verbatim
a sleepless ultimatum
or let them be alien?
#apathy
#emptiness
#SelfReflection #sleep
#SelfReflection #sleep
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