Poems About Sleep Seeking Honest Critique
#sleep
Poems about sleep seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:55am
Yesterday 10:55am
Yesterday's Dream
I knew him once upon a dream.
A dream like you have never seen.
And so have I.
But it seemed peaceful,with a light blue sky.
I saw a girl in that dream.
She was doubtful of all she's ever been.
She says,my pain I don't want you to carry.
I don't want you to worry,I want you to be merry.
The way she spoke in this vivid dream.
Like there is more to her than others have seen.
She says,but what if you don't like me?
What if you dislike the real me?
What if you don't like my flaws?
That stand out...
A dream like you have never seen.
And so have I.
But it seemed peaceful,with a light blue sky.
I saw a girl in that dream.
She was doubtful of all she's ever been.
She says,my pain I don't want you to carry.
I don't want you to worry,I want you to be merry.
The way she spoke in this vivid dream.
Like there is more to her than others have seen.
She says,but what if you don't like me?
What if you dislike the real me?
What if you don't like my flaws?
That stand out...
#dreams
#hope
#motivational
#sleep
#uplifting
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
25th Feb 2025 2:49pm
25th Feb 2025 2:49pm
Don't You Want To Stay For One More?
Roxann finally opened her eyes.
She saw Jon getting ready to leave.
Roxann sat up totally naked.
She saw Jon getting ready to leave.
Roxann sat up totally naked.
#fiction
#friendship
#lover
#sex
#sleep
120 reads
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
24th Feb 2025 2:17am
24th Feb 2025 2:17am
Inside The Examination Room Of An Extraterrestrial Spaceship
Mark opened both his eyes.
He found himself inside an examination room.
He turned his head slightly.
He saw his wife Maria.
She was also naked on a table.
He tried calling to her.
He's unable to do so.
Then, some grey alien beings walked in.
They touched Maria all over.
That was before something happened.
That something was Amanda walking towards Mark.
She's about to hump him.
That was before the alarm clock sounded.
Mark and Maria woke in their bedroom.
He found himself inside an examination room.
He turned his head slightly.
He saw his wife Maria.
She was also naked on a table.
He tried calling to her.
He's unable to do so.
Then, some grey alien beings walked in.
They touched Maria all over.
That was before something happened.
That something was Amanda walking towards Mark.
She's about to hump him.
That was before the alarm clock sounded.
Mark and Maria woke in their bedroom.
#aliens
#fiction
#scifi
#sex
#sleep
150 reads
2 Comments
PunkPoe
Poem Published
5th Feb 2025 11:15pm
5th Feb 2025 11:15pm
Be Set Free
"Be Set Free"
The wonders that thrive inside my mind
Anyone doubting me, I will leave behind
Come along I promise you an adventure
You have no pain measures of pleasure
Every meal includes macaroni & cheese
Ending war we all deserve to live in peace
Paradise in everyone's own shape & form
News from the headlines love your unicorn
There's a place where we can do anything
Together we restore balance of yang & ying
From now on children are safe in their beds
Board candyland express salads killed...
The wonders that thrive inside my mind
Anyone doubting me, I will leave behind
Come along I promise you an adventure
You have no pain measures of pleasure
Every meal includes macaroni & cheese
Ending war we all deserve to live in peace
Paradise in everyone's own shape & form
News from the headlines love your unicorn
There's a place where we can do anything
Together we restore balance of yang & ying
From now on children are safe in their beds
Board candyland express salads killed...
#children
#dreams
#love #sleep
#love #sleep
75 reads
0 Comments
bignp
Poem Published
3rd Feb 2025 9:45am
3rd Feb 2025 9:45am
ode to a dream
I had a dream.
Not of grandeur or poverty.
Power or flight.
Race nor riot.
A dream of waking.
endlessly waking.
Sometimes sitting up in bed…
Then just waking.
Am I still there?
I may never know.
Or soon be there.
When the alarm's blare ends.
Not of grandeur or poverty.
Power or flight.
Race nor riot.
A dream of waking.
endlessly waking.
Sometimes sitting up in bed…
Then just waking.
Am I still there?
I may never know.
Or soon be there.
When the alarm's blare ends.
#dreams
#frustration
#night #sleep
#night #sleep
81 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2025 4:38pm
23rd Jan 2025 4:38pm
Two Cats
In the soft glow of evening
two cats lie together.
Their breaths steady
tails gently twitching in dreams.
Their whiskers quiver,
paws knead the air,
murmurs of sleep talk
escape their parted lips.
One purrs deeply,
a sound like distant thunder.
The other replies,
a softer rhythmic hum.
Their bodies rise and fall
with each contented sigh,
In this tranquil moment
all is almost quiet and serene.
You watch over them,
heart swelling with love,
Each sound, each movement, ...
two cats lie together.
Their breaths steady
tails gently twitching in dreams.
Their whiskers quiver,
paws knead the air,
murmurs of sleep talk
escape their parted lips.
One purrs deeply,
a sound like distant thunder.
The other replies,
a softer rhythmic hum.
Their bodies rise and fall
with each contented sigh,
In this tranquil moment
all is almost quiet and serene.
You watch over them,
heart swelling with love,
Each sound, each movement, ...
#beauty
#cats
#dreams
#love
#sleep
105 reads
8 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 11:17am
18th Jan 2025 11:17am
it all smells a bit iffy
time and space are irrelevant when
we’re tucked up in bed, and yes I know
that the alarm clock has gone off,
but we can always get a new one ..
we’re tucked up in bed, and yes I know
that the alarm clock has gone off,
but we can always get a new one ..
#sleep
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1 Comment
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
16th Jan 2025 7:02pm
16th Jan 2025 7:02pm
~sleep mode
sleep mode
..
but where is it
when pain had seeped in
..in the continuous mumblings
of immobilised desperations
those indistinct murmurs
pitch a sudden high
as unbelievably
peaking lucidities
glowering as angered
red sparking embers
in their many pointed shout outs
of a deadening pace.. wrapped
up shockingly.. with low
alternating troughs.. of
as if an enacted thorough
begging.. with some
quick silvered dark twist
of frightening frustrations, in
a busted...
..
but where is it
when pain had seeped in
..in the continuous mumblings
of immobilised desperations
those indistinct murmurs
pitch a sudden high
as unbelievably
peaking lucidities
glowering as angered
red sparking embers
in their many pointed shout outs
of a deadening pace.. wrapped
up shockingly.. with low
alternating troughs.. of
as if an enacted thorough
begging.. with some
quick silvered dark twist
of frightening frustrations, in
a busted...
#death
#hurt
#night
#sadness
#sleep
208 reads
3 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
15th Jan 2025 1:03am
15th Jan 2025 1:03am
2 am
go to bed,
you’ve got to be up early
in the morning
I’ll be tired,
whatever
you said
you’ve got to be up early
in the morning
I’ll be tired,
whatever
you said
#sleep
56 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Jan 2025 11:11am
14th Jan 2025 11:11am
Awake All Night
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
When I go in to bed and close my eyes
Only bad things rolling in my mind
Maybe something in my history
Maybe everything in my memory
Maybe nothing, maybe that full fucking moon last night
I don't know, but I want sleep
This is driving me crazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
During the day I'll be lazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
Have a dream, to sleep forever
I need my...
I don’t know what is wrong with me
Last night I could not sleep
I don’t know what is wrong with me
When I go in to bed and close my eyes
Only bad things rolling in my mind
Maybe something in my history
Maybe everything in my memory
Maybe nothing, maybe that full fucking moon last night
I don't know, but I want sleep
This is driving me crazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
During the day I'll be lazy
I need my sleep, I need my sleep
Have a dream, to sleep forever
I need my...
#myself
#SelfReflection
#sleep
103 reads
6 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
4th Jan 2025 1:39pm
4th Jan 2025 1:39pm
awoken too early
woke up, wondered what time
it was certainly early
victorian, perhaps early to mid
all the conjecture I fell back
asleep
it was certainly early
victorian, perhaps early to mid
all the conjecture I fell back
asleep
#sleep
60 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 11:54am
3rd Jan 2025 11:54am
4:36 AM
4:36 am, still can't sleep
I think I did everything completely wrong
All I know is...
When you use to touch me
I would think of all of those different men
Fucking my sister & mother at the same time
My hatred towards them, came out towards you
You're in a much better place now
And so am I
One day if i ever get out, I will visit you, for sure
I think I did everything completely wrong
All I know is...
When you use to touch me
I would think of all of those different men
Fucking my sister & mother at the same time
My hatred towards them, came out towards you
You're in a much better place now
And so am I
One day if i ever get out, I will visit you, for sure
#dark
#memories
#regret #sleep
#regret #sleep
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10 Comments
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