Poems About the Sky Seeking Honest Critique
#sky
Poems about the sky seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Drawing Clouds
A magic soul ascends, its flame untamed,
among the clouds that shift in heaven's gaze.
A phantom orchestra of whispers framed
where time dissolves in mystic swirling haze.
Each gaze unearths a tale, a tender thread,
from dragon scales to castles steeped in lore.
A fleeting kiss—a wish that’s softly said—
goodbye to dreams that anchor hearts no more.
A storm begins and streaks of silver bleed.
Revealing skies of tempest, cruel and vast.
Yet, still I trace the skies’ eternal creed.
The soul, now etched...
among the clouds that shift in heaven's gaze.
A phantom orchestra of whispers framed
where time dissolves in mystic swirling haze.
Each gaze unearths a tale, a tender thread,
from dragon scales to castles steeped in lore.
A fleeting kiss—a wish that’s softly said—
goodbye to dreams that anchor hearts no more.
A storm begins and streaks of silver bleed.
Revealing skies of tempest, cruel and vast.
Yet, still I trace the skies’ eternal creed.
The soul, now etched...
#clouds
#dragons
#mirror
#scary
#sky
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4 Comments
I'll Return to You
I’ll leave tomorrow to a distant place.
You’ll miss me when I go away.
In three years, I’ll return to you.
I want you to wait for me,
But I know it’s too much to ask.
Your poor heart will ache for me,
But the sky will still be blue,
And the faithful sun will still shine.
I’ll think of you as time goes by.
The fire will keep burning.
I promise you that I’ll return to you.
Please don’t give up on me.
I’ll see you when I come back.
We’ll smile at each other again.
Darling, I’ll return to you,
And I’ll stay with you...
You’ll miss me when I go away.
In three years, I’ll return to you.
I want you to wait for me,
But I know it’s too much to ask.
Your poor heart will ache for me,
But the sky will still be blue,
And the faithful sun will still shine.
I’ll think of you as time goes by.
The fire will keep burning.
I promise you that I’ll return to you.
Please don’t give up on me.
I’ll see you when I come back.
We’ll smile at each other again.
Darling, I’ll return to you,
And I’ll stay with you...
#fire
#love
#sky #sun
#sky #sun
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Jangkro
(Patois)
Nahsi niegah call mi peel ed jangkro,
But mi noh kier wa dem seh bout mi.
Mi noh like picheery caw dem gi tumuch troble.
Dem fiesi bud deh noh like mi needa.
Ebry time dem si mi, dem pick mi inna mi ed.
Mi affi fly high fi get weh fran dem.
Mi jus a glaid wiay up inna di sky peaceful.
Di breeze feel gud ahnda mi wing dem.
Ebryting pan di grong luk soh likke bit.
Bad mine peeple a fite gyence wan aneddda.
Mi noh bizniz wid wah gwaan dung deh.
Mi jus wah fine a pisa rattn meat fi nyam.
Nahsi niegah call mi peel ed jangkro,
But mi noh kier wa dem seh bout mi.
Mi noh like picheery caw dem gi tumuch troble.
Dem fiesi bud deh noh like mi needa.
Ebry time dem si mi, dem pick mi inna mi ed.
Mi affi fly high fi get weh fran dem.
Mi jus a glaid wiay up inna di sky peaceful.
Di breeze feel gud ahnda mi wing dem.
Ebryting pan di grong luk soh likke bit.
Bad mine peeple a fite gyence wan aneddda.
Mi noh bizniz wid wah gwaan dung deh.
Mi jus wah fine a pisa rattn meat fi nyam.
#birds
#food
#humankind
#sky
#wind
69 reads
3 Comments
Hope
Light breaks the night.
Its flicker grows, yet fragile still.
A flame burns bright within despair.
Where silence lingers, whispers dare to rise anew.
Through storms and shadows, it calls, defies, it prevails.
Boundless and untamed, it stretches through time, unyielding.
Hope swells like oceans, crashing, surging with infinite waves that collide.
Its roots entangle stars, weaving lifelines from fractures, each moment revived.
Hope ascends like constellations, a beacon eternal, shining through endless skies.
Its flicker grows, yet fragile still.
A flame burns bright within despair.
Where silence lingers, whispers dare to rise anew.
Through storms and shadows, it calls, defies, it prevails.
Boundless and untamed, it stretches through time, unyielding.
Hope swells like oceans, crashing, surging with infinite waves that collide.
Its roots entangle stars, weaving lifelines from fractures, each moment revived.
Hope ascends like constellations, a beacon eternal, shining through endless skies.
#fire
#night
#shadows
#sky
#storm
81 reads
7 Comments
Synergy
The mystical flow of nature
Rippling on the river banks
Along the edge of the forest swooshing
The day breathes
In the light
And radiant energy
Synergy
Of the heat
And drying rain dew
Under wispy cotton candy clouds
And endless deep blue
the horizons far side
The backdrop of evening hues
The home of falling stars
The moon
And eternal nighttime views
Rippling on the river banks
Along the edge of the forest swooshing
The day breathes
In the light
And radiant energy
Synergy
Of the heat
And drying rain dew
Under wispy cotton candy clouds
And endless deep blue
the horizons far side
The backdrop of evening hues
The home of falling stars
The moon
And eternal nighttime views
#earth
#nature
#sky
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Chattered Teeth
Its frigid like a whip outside
the Hawk is out
I took two steps in brisk
to land clenched teeth in mouth
Consider me a visiting guest
I’m not used to low temps
There’s beach life sun at home
arctic gust took my energy limp
Dr. Seuss me some Camu Camu
to keep immunity high
Then toke condensated puffs in jest
to keep comic from going awry
I can’t stand in the cold
I can’t stand it at all
Have me laid up in downed sheets
smothered curled in a ball
Sniffles flute to whistle
wrapped burrito like when born ...
the Hawk is out
I took two steps in brisk
to land clenched teeth in mouth
Consider me a visiting guest
I’m not used to low temps
There’s beach life sun at home
arctic gust took my energy limp
Dr. Seuss me some Camu Camu
to keep immunity high
Then toke condensated puffs in jest
to keep comic from going awry
I can’t stand in the cold
I can’t stand it at all
Have me laid up in downed sheets
smothered curled in a ball
Sniffles flute to whistle
wrapped burrito like when born ...
#countryside
#fall
#sky
#wind
#winter
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Terrafirma Baby
touch the sky and bow to its power
with spectrums of blue, it calms
its grey brings me a maelstrom of contemplation
heavy and heady suspended in clouds just above me
with fog and shadows descending upon everything
the winds transfigure and transport
blowing me to exotic worlds
dominions of nothingness
then heights of freedom as I roam the open places
suspended above the mighty ancient trees
who whisper in creaks
a language I understand
its dialect spoken, in my body
languishing in the quiet, hush
where...
with spectrums of blue, it calms
its grey brings me a maelstrom of contemplation
heavy and heady suspended in clouds just above me
with fog and shadows descending upon everything
the winds transfigure and transport
blowing me to exotic worlds
dominions of nothingness
then heights of freedom as I roam the open places
suspended above the mighty ancient trees
who whisper in creaks
a language I understand
its dialect spoken, in my body
languishing in the quiet, hush
where...
#earth
#meditation
#sky
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2 Comments
Nitid Together
I'd like to fly a mylar kite
of argent spar and silken string
in lunar zenith moonbeam flight
and watch its tinsel tail fling
a scintillation here and there
upon a clear and breezy night
of scintillation friendly air
astir in angel wing delight.
And by such a heaven as this
hearts would sigh in midsummer bliss
or seek another balmy kiss
in some romantic genesis...
where rekindled honeymoon love,
might scintillate...more than above!
of argent spar and silken string
in lunar zenith moonbeam flight
and watch its tinsel tail fling
a scintillation here and there
upon a clear and breezy night
of scintillation friendly air
astir in angel wing delight.
And by such a heaven as this
hearts would sigh in midsummer bliss
or seek another balmy kiss
in some romantic genesis...
where rekindled honeymoon love,
might scintillate...more than above!
#marriage
#moon
#sky #wind
#sky #wind
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16 Comments
Sights Aloft
Fourth I Marched today, for the freshest air,
into the blue, white, and gray intermix
blasting transpiration through my hair
as Zephyr got his atmospheric kicks
step by obstreperous step to the fore,
as a proud Zephyr won't blow in reverse
to mark some bootless barometric score
in the fluxion dynamic universe
where inspiration is the first to flow...
...in myriad crepuscularities...
perceived as a most ethereal show
in thermic air current disparities,
as uplifting to a vernal feather...
as the forthwith march of...
into the blue, white, and gray intermix
blasting transpiration through my hair
as Zephyr got his atmospheric kicks
step by obstreperous step to the fore,
as a proud Zephyr won't blow in reverse
to mark some bootless barometric score
in the fluxion dynamic universe
where inspiration is the first to flow...
...in myriad crepuscularities...
perceived as a most ethereal show
in thermic air current disparities,
as uplifting to a vernal feather...
as the forthwith march of...
#clouds
#sky
#wind
178 reads
8 Comments
Under the moon light
Here I am as I am in a place of pure calmness and tranquility, with the quiteness of the moon reflection, upon the peaceful waters, as they flow so peacefully up stream. For sure it's here and now I feel the tension leaving my mind, and heart and spiritual subconsciousness of my soul. As it eliminates to the point there's no hurt and no pain, only the deepness of being replaced by the sounds of the quiet waters, drifting with the winds of time. For even as I feel this great sensation, I begin to inhale and exhale out the negativity, from my subconscious of my deepest thoughts of healing,...
#clouds
#countryside
#nature
#river
#sky
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In the afternoon of dawn
They say that it's in the afternoon dawn as the sun goes down, that we have peace and harmony, as we exchange our thoughts and prayers with nature as our back drop with peace. For even as I sit here looking out at world around me, I wonder how much the world has been changed, by its own demise with nothing but corruption and deception. As they lie with an straight face as they gas light you without the light bulb.💡 But yet here we are in the environment of nature, with it's mountains and streams. Surrounded by the clouds and open skies, just sitting here in quiet space of a cave...
#clouds
#mountains
#nature
#sky
#StreamOfConsciousness
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I Don't See a Rainbow
The sun is up and it blinds my sight.
With
all this snow.
A flashbang grenade went off.
As my eyes water and recoil in pain.
At the brilliance of the light.
I am bathed in blindness.
Glaring on the horizon.
The oppressive omnipresent light.
That binds me to walk blindly.
I'm praying for dirt, something to break up the glare.
Of the sun reflected from the ground.
Directly into my eyes with a luminescent halo.
It's refracted.
Yet I don't see a rainbow.
I just lurch along the road.
With
all this snow.
A flashbang grenade went off.
As my eyes water and recoil in pain.
At the brilliance of the light.
I am bathed in blindness.
Glaring on the horizon.
The oppressive omnipresent light.
That binds me to walk blindly.
I'm praying for dirt, something to break up the glare.
Of the sun reflected from the ground.
Directly into my eyes with a luminescent halo.
It's refracted.
Yet I don't see a rainbow.
I just lurch along the road.
#sky
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0 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About the Sky Seeking Honest Critique