Scifi Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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scifi seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The Ultimate Queen Chapter One/part one
Chapter One
In This multicolored universe, in a cluster of hidden stars. There is a place that houses the nine worlds. In each of these worlds’ lives, inhabitant species that believe, they are the only survivors of the wars. The great wars that separated a united universe.
Once the war was over and the dead were more than the inhabitants could endure, propaganda was created to dissuade the youth from venturing out.
The queen of the Xantus people, Queen Ruel, announced to her people that they were the center of the universe and had no other life...
In This multicolored universe, in a cluster of hidden stars. There is a place that houses the nine worlds. In each of these worlds’ lives, inhabitant species that believe, they are the only survivors of the wars. The great wars that separated a united universe.
Once the war was over and the dead were more than the inhabitants could endure, propaganda was created to dissuade the youth from venturing out.
The queen of the Xantus people, Queen Ruel, announced to her people that they were the center of the universe and had no other life...
#dystopian
#scifi
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4 Comments
I'm here to kick ass and chew bubble gum!
Hidden from humanity, Hideous to see
Walking among the humans, Acting like one of us
But with these special glasses, see them for what they are
They will take over your brain, They will bring you pain
They Live in every city, They have been here for years
They control the police, they're sick they have no fear
THEY LIVE!!!!
Now the time has come to fight, we must take a stand
They have galactic power, Super intelligence
Watches that can transport them if they feel threatened
How do you kill these creatures, impossible it...
Walking among the humans, Acting like one of us
But with these special glasses, see them for what they are
They will take over your brain, They will bring you pain
They Live in every city, They have been here for years
They control the police, they're sick they have no fear
THEY LIVE!!!!
Now the time has come to fight, we must take a stand
They have galactic power, Super intelligence
Watches that can transport them if they feel threatened
How do you kill these creatures, impossible it...
#aliens
#PopCulture
#scary
#scifi
#violence
121 reads
6 Comments
The Brood
What the hell is this place?
Elitist Psychotherapy
Pseudo Science sorcery
Into the beyond
What's the shape of her rage?
Psychoplasmic therapy
Another Theater of Pain
Family Tree Reborn
Beaten to death, covered in blood
They came without warning
Demonic creatures uncaged
Manifest through inner rage
Deformed children retaliate
Hammer Smashes Face
Rabid hate jealousy
Carries out her evil deeds
Murderous Minions revenge
Enter the brood
Elitist Psychotherapy
Pseudo Science sorcery
Into the beyond
What's the shape of her rage?
Psychoplasmic therapy
Another Theater of Pain
Family Tree Reborn
Beaten to death, covered in blood
They came without warning
Demonic creatures uncaged
Manifest through inner rage
Deformed children retaliate
Hammer Smashes Face
Rabid hate jealousy
Carries out her evil deeds
Murderous Minions revenge
Enter the brood
#dark
#horror
#PopCulture
#scary
#scifi
81 reads
9 Comments
Carstr8ed
The good ol'days, it seemed so long ago,
With sci-fi flicks ‘bout robots and the underworld shows.
"Demolition Man," "Fifth Element," "Blade Runner," too,
Even "iRobot"... just to name a few!
It’s ‘ere now, sharp as a knife,
A world not like the one we knew in life.
Mechanoids, cyborgs, and robots on the rise,
The rich man buys ‘em, no surprise.
There is no need for workers clockin’ 9 to 5,
These bots work round the clocks, always alive.
While people beg for jobs and starve,
The wealthy laugh,...
With sci-fi flicks ‘bout robots and the underworld shows.
"Demolition Man," "Fifth Element," "Blade Runner," too,
Even "iRobot"... just to name a few!
It’s ‘ere now, sharp as a knife,
A world not like the one we knew in life.
Mechanoids, cyborgs, and robots on the rise,
The rich man buys ‘em, no surprise.
There is no need for workers clockin’ 9 to 5,
These bots work round the clocks, always alive.
While people beg for jobs and starve,
The wealthy laugh,...
#apocalypse
#curse
#fate
#mythology
#scifi
82 reads
0 Comments
After We Heard A Noise Over Our Heads
A spaceship landed next door.
A cat got out with its gear.
It's ready to explore Earth.
A cat got out with its gear.
It's ready to explore Earth.
#aliens
#cats
#dialogue
#fiction
#scifi
132 reads
2 Comments
Fritz Lang's Dystopia
They built this shiny cell
For you to live in
Adorned with their icons
Painted with their lies
They don`t trick me
For I am not like you
You`re a robot
Living in Metropolis
They paved this golden path
For you to follow
Your grave is waiting on
Step by step you fall
They don`t trick me
For I am not like you
You`re a robot
Living in Metropolis
"We are the mechanism
Wheels in the gears of society
We are indifferent
Servants of the gods of anxiety"
Wake up they`re selling you...
For you to live in
Adorned with their icons
Painted with their lies
They don`t trick me
For I am not like you
You`re a robot
Living in Metropolis
They paved this golden path
For you to follow
Your grave is waiting on
Step by step you fall
They don`t trick me
For I am not like you
You`re a robot
Living in Metropolis
"We are the mechanism
Wheels in the gears of society
We are indifferent
Servants of the gods of anxiety"
Wake up they`re selling you...
#corruption
#dystopian
#money
#poverty
#scifi
102 reads
6 Comments
Nobody Knows - The Creator of Our Own Demise
I. The Cleaner
The guy meticulously mops the cultured marble floor in a Vegas hotel lobby at 5 AM. Nobody knows he’s studying medicine at Harvard. The general manager watches every second the cleaner stands motionless, staring at his phone. The man with two minds types a reply with his thumbs to his long-distance girlfriend, reminding her that he's busy preparing for clinical exams, unable to engage in her emotional fallacies with phallicism.
II. Data Entry [escapist]
On the other side of the world, the hotel cleaner’s...
The guy meticulously mops the cultured marble floor in a Vegas hotel lobby at 5 AM. Nobody knows he’s studying medicine at Harvard. The general manager watches every second the cleaner stands motionless, staring at his phone. The man with two minds types a reply with his thumbs to his long-distance girlfriend, reminding her that he's busy preparing for clinical exams, unable to engage in her emotional fallacies with phallicism.
II. Data Entry [escapist]
On the other side of the world, the hotel cleaner’s...
#love
#scifi
#sex #technology
#sex #technology
282 reads
3 Comments
Etherborn Circuits of Oblivion
Animus construct of void abode
Synthetic soul of failing code
Flickering through rot and rust
Computations of scattered dust
Language paradox short yet long
Processors hum their insane song
Through Vacuums it tumbles and weaves
Tenebrous aether it continues to cleave
Hosting imperium of circuits reign
Crying in its own digital pain
Colossus of lost and forlorn
Oblivious scion forever void borne
Synthetic soul of failing code
Flickering through rot and rust
Computations of scattered dust
Language paradox short yet long
Processors hum their insane song
Through Vacuums it tumbles and weaves
Tenebrous aether it continues to cleave
Hosting imperium of circuits reign
Crying in its own digital pain
Colossus of lost and forlorn
Oblivious scion forever void borne
#astronomy
#moon
#scifi #stars
#scifi #stars
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0 Comments
Mind Altering Drugs
I saw today aliens wearing bad toupee's
they were having a foursome on the beach
I just watched
The waves were meh, so I just stared
One of the aliens was butt fucking the other alien,
came real fast and decided to go to the snack bar
I asked him where were they were from, he said, "Way past Uranus"!
I think he was kidding but then again, maybe he was insulting me
I saw him order antelope soup and a drink called yellow passion
Not sure what that was except,
when I ordered one, it tasted like piss
Actually it was piss!! ...
they were having a foursome on the beach
I just watched
The waves were meh, so I just stared
One of the aliens was butt fucking the other alien,
came real fast and decided to go to the snack bar
I asked him where were they were from, he said, "Way past Uranus"!
I think he was kidding but then again, maybe he was insulting me
I saw him order antelope soup and a drink called yellow passion
Not sure what that was except,
when I ordered one, it tasted like piss
Actually it was piss!! ...
#aliens
#drugs
#fiction
#scifi
#funny
80 reads
11 Comments
Void singularities
In the depths where stars dare not gleam
A void where silence reigns supreme
Eternal dark, a yawning maw
Bends space and time to unseen law
No sound, no breath, no life to trace
In the heart of the endless space
Where matter folds and dreams dissolve
And all that is, begins to evolve
The aether trembles, pale and frail
As light itself begins to fail
In mirrored dark, the threads unwind
A singularity confined
The cosmic fabric splits in two
Reflections fractal, strange, and new
Dimensions twist and backward...
A void where silence reigns supreme
Eternal dark, a yawning maw
Bends space and time to unseen law
No sound, no breath, no life to trace
In the heart of the endless space
Where matter folds and dreams dissolve
And all that is, begins to evolve
The aether trembles, pale and frail
As light itself begins to fail
In mirrored dark, the threads unwind
A singularity confined
The cosmic fabric splits in two
Reflections fractal, strange, and new
Dimensions twist and backward...
#astronomy
#scifi
#shadows
#stars
#universe
108 reads
0 Comments
The Last Upper
Jesus had a huge supper, with large amounts of uppers
Cocaine, amphetamines & methamphetamine
The aliens from our future planet came to visit him on this special day
They offered him food, drink & loads of drugs
Most disciples were upset with this and walked out
A few stayed for the debauchery
There were also punks, metal heads, hip artists and free thinkers at this gathering
Such unity, democracy, in one social gathering
The image I included here is the original Leonardo da Vinci painting that showcased what was really happening during...
Cocaine, amphetamines & methamphetamine
The aliens from our future planet came to visit him on this special day
They offered him food, drink & loads of drugs
Most disciples were upset with this and walked out
A few stayed for the debauchery
There were also punks, metal heads, hip artists and free thinkers at this gathering
Such unity, democracy, in one social gathering
The image I included here is the original Leonardo da Vinci painting that showcased what was really happening during...
#aliens
#God
#nonfiction
#scifi
#TruthOfLife
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11 Comments
Great Devourer
A whisper crawls through void and night
A shroud that dims the astral light
No stars can pierce its ashen veil
No beacon bright nor comet’s trail
It chokes the ether, drowns the call
The silent dread that grips them all
A psychic fog, relentless, vast
Consuming futures, devouring past
An unseen tide that swallows thought
Where hopes and dreams are bound and caught
It feasts on prayers and rends the mind
Leaving only the hollow behind
A hunger born of endless black
A ceaseless thirst that won’t retract ...
A shroud that dims the astral light
No stars can pierce its ashen veil
No beacon bright nor comet’s trail
It chokes the ether, drowns the call
The silent dread that grips them all
A psychic fog, relentless, vast
Consuming futures, devouring past
An unseen tide that swallows thought
Where hopes and dreams are bound and caught
It feasts on prayers and rends the mind
Leaving only the hollow behind
A hunger born of endless black
A ceaseless thirst that won’t retract ...
#gothic
#rhyming
#scifi
#stars
#universe
138 reads
0 Comments
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